No Guarantees
swap quatrain poem.14 total reviews
Comment from Raffaelina Lowcock
The art says a lot about what we face on any given day. We will not always be prepared, but we should be strong with our faith in ourselves to see whatever through. Just as we endure the joy we can endure the hardships.
Ralf
reply by the author on 27-Sep-2021
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The art says a lot about what we face on any given day. We will not always be prepared, but we should be strong with our faith in ourselves to see whatever through. Just as we endure the joy we can endure the hardships.
Ralf
Comment Written 22-Sep-2021
reply by the author on 27-Sep-2021
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Thank you very much for this understanding review.
Comment from Sherry Asbury
Your artwork is stunning and so is your poem.
"To take you through, God has a plan..." this is my favorite line. I wish you good luck in your competition...you have a lovely entry here!
reply by the author on 27-Sep-2021
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Your artwork is stunning and so is your poem.
"To take you through, God has a plan..." this is my favorite line. I wish you good luck in your competition...you have a lovely entry here!
Comment Written 22-Sep-2021
reply by the author on 27-Sep-2021
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Thank you very much for your encouraging review.
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
We must never take for granted a life that is lived in peace as all too often there is something that will upset the status quo, we should all count our blessings as your poem shows us that things can change without a moment's notice. A fine club entry, much enjoyed, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 27-Sep-2021
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We must never take for granted a life that is lived in peace as all too often there is something that will upset the status quo, we should all count our blessings as your poem shows us that things can change without a moment's notice. A fine club entry, much enjoyed, love Dolly x
Comment Written 22-Sep-2021
reply by the author on 27-Sep-2021
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Thank you very much for the encouraging review.
Comment from Seshadri_Sreenivasan
Yes. There are absolutely no guarantees in life. What is guaranteed is that we all make mistakes. But if we do not follow some basic rules of living, what is a sureshot guarantee is that the Karma will get you!:) I loved your poem although I am not familiar with so many forms of poems. Thanks for sharing!
reply by the author on 27-Sep-2021
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Yes. There are absolutely no guarantees in life. What is guaranteed is that we all make mistakes. But if we do not follow some basic rules of living, what is a sureshot guarantee is that the Karma will get you!:) I loved your poem although I am not familiar with so many forms of poems. Thanks for sharing!
Comment Written 22-Sep-2021
reply by the author on 27-Sep-2021
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Thank you very much for this glittering stars. thanks once again.
Comment from country ranch writer
This presentation I'd really great.The words rig true for many of us . God is always around when and where we least expect him.you can believe he has not forsaken us.
reply by the author on 27-Sep-2021
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This presentation I'd really great.The words rig true for many of us . God is always around when and where we least expect him.you can believe he has not forsaken us.
Comment Written 22-Sep-2021
reply by the author on 27-Sep-2021
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Thank you very much once again for these lovely remarks and glittering stars...I am honoured .Sorry for the delay in my reply.
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Comment from country ranch writer
This presentation I'd really great.The words rig true for many of us . God is always around when and where we least expect him.you can believe he has not forsaken us.
reply by the author on 27-Sep-2021
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This presentation I'd really great.The words rig true for many of us . God is always around when and where we least expect him.you can believe he has not forsaken us.
Comment Written 22-Sep-2021
reply by the author on 27-Sep-2021
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Thank you very much once again for this encouragement with the glittering stars
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Comment from Mary Shifman
This is an interesting poem with an important message. You have achieved rhyme, rhythm and lovely imagery. All in all this poem is quite eloquent. I enjoyed reading it.
reply by the author on 27-Sep-2021
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This is an interesting poem with an important message. You have achieved rhyme, rhythm and lovely imagery. All in all this poem is quite eloquent. I enjoyed reading it.
Comment Written 21-Sep-2021
reply by the author on 27-Sep-2021
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Thanks a lot for your encouraging review.I appreciate it very much.
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You are so welcome;
Comment from lyenochka
Loved the message of your poem. It's so reassuring, especially your final stanza. And the theme is consistent throughout the poem - life is certainly full of curves and offers no guarantees.
Is the reverse rhyme the same as the swap quatrain? I felt you didn't keep the same words with the swapped lines. For example you have an added "the" in "The clouds can conceal a smiling sun." The meaning is different (or can be read differently) in the first line: A smiling sun can clouds conceal. But that's clever if you intended the different meanings.
Really liked the philosophical theme of the poem!
reply by the author on 22-Sep-2021
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Loved the message of your poem. It's so reassuring, especially your final stanza. And the theme is consistent throughout the poem - life is certainly full of curves and offers no guarantees.
Is the reverse rhyme the same as the swap quatrain? I felt you didn't keep the same words with the swapped lines. For example you have an added "the" in "The clouds can conceal a smiling sun." The meaning is different (or can be read differently) in the first line: A smiling sun can clouds conceal. But that's clever if you intended the different meanings.
Really liked the philosophical theme of the poem!
Comment Written 21-Sep-2021
reply by the author on 22-Sep-2021
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Yes .it is the swap quatrain. I will correct it I will look into the line also.thank you very much.
I removed 'the' .and also corrected the form to swap quatrain. i dont know why I wrote 'reverse line' .i had forgotten it I think.!!!
Remadevi wrote to me that she is unable to review my poem because I have blocked the general members.But I have not done so .So what should I do for that?
Sorry to trouble you with my inadequacies .I am not at all tech savvy.I dont use advance editor or the spag finding software..
Comment from karenina
I am so not up on all my poetry forms. This looks similar to a swap quatrain I just read by another writer... Are they the same? It matters not to me--not sure I could write one if I put my secret poet genius hat (that I don't own) on!-- The meat of your poem is just so true... No easy rides through life...always something waiting 'round the bend! I'll be interested to hear if this is the same as the other! (I will learn one day!)
Karenina
reply by the author on 27-Sep-2021
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I am so not up on all my poetry forms. This looks similar to a swap quatrain I just read by another writer... Are they the same? It matters not to me--not sure I could write one if I put my secret poet genius hat (that I don't own) on!-- The meat of your poem is just so true... No easy rides through life...always something waiting 'round the bend! I'll be interested to hear if this is the same as the other! (I will learn one day!)
Karenina
Comment Written 21-Sep-2021
reply by the author on 27-Sep-2021
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yes it is a swap quatrain. Foolishly i entered it like that now i have corrected it.There was some emergency as I was posting it .So i just wrote something.My 88 year old mother lives with me.I am her care giver. Thank you very much for the understanding words.
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An easy correction! You sound very committed to your Mom!
Blessings!
Karenina
Comment from Paul McFarland
Good job with a difficult form. I think you should change the line: "He is around unknown to you". The unknown part is what bothers me.
Possibly something like: "He's always looking after you".
reply by the author on 27-Sep-2021
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Good job with a difficult form. I think you should change the line: "He is around unknown to you". The unknown part is what bothers me.
Possibly something like: "He's always looking after you".
Comment Written 21-Sep-2021
reply by the author on 27-Sep-2021
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Thank you very much for your encouraging comments.
