Baker's Dozen
Twelve thoughts.5 total reviews
Comment from SHABAMO
Definitely some food for thought and high quality as your work always is.
I think you meant IF rather than IS for Zorro's identity being stolen.
Loved the color scheme, gonna have to try that!
reply by the author on 21-Sep-2021
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Definitely some food for thought and high quality as your work always is.
I think you meant IF rather than IS for Zorro's identity being stolen.
Loved the color scheme, gonna have to try that!
Comment Written 20-Sep-2021
reply by the author on 21-Sep-2021
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Actually after I wrote this I realized a Baker's Dozen is 13.
And if you recheck it you'll see there's only 12 so I'm going to have to add to it one day and change it.
Re-edit it and a rewrite.
Thanks for the time and review.
Ricky
Comment from Yardier
Interesting rant, Dr. Ricky. Sometimes it is a poem other times a list of questions and comments/observations. Hurky jerky freestyle word smithing leaving the readers to rephrase and provide their own answers. In some ways it is brilliant, in other ways challenging to understand motive. Still, beauty is in the eyes of the reader, right? Good job, my friend.
reply by the author on 21-Sep-2021
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Interesting rant, Dr. Ricky. Sometimes it is a poem other times a list of questions and comments/observations. Hurky jerky freestyle word smithing leaving the readers to rephrase and provide their own answers. In some ways it is brilliant, in other ways challenging to understand motive. Still, beauty is in the eyes of the reader, right? Good job, my friend.
Comment Written 20-Sep-2021
reply by the author on 21-Sep-2021
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I will have to add one more because the baker's doesn't have 12.
Actually didn't pop into my head until it was written and posted!
Thanks anyhow and have a blessed week!
Doctor Ricky 1024
Comment from Sherry Asbury
Our Father blessed you with the gift of continuity!! I actually read the whole thing despite my ADD! Each little bit held its own story and was amusing and interesting. Fine work here!!
reply by the author on 20-Sep-2021
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Our Father blessed you with the gift of continuity!! I actually read the whole thing despite my ADD! Each little bit held its own story and was amusing and interesting. Fine work here!!
Comment Written 20-Sep-2021
reply by the author on 20-Sep-2021
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Well thank you Miss Sherry.
Because this is a relief!
Yes, considering my previous review was two stars!
And, was criticized severely!
And, had many grammar issues?
It's funny I always reject my writings and the spell check tells me of something's wrong.
Plus the reviewer didn't tell me which words were wrong?
And whoever it was also said it was up and down they couldn't understand it.
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Of course I went on their site and reviewed one of their pieces and they didn't like the one star review.
I gave but it was the whole thing was a basic one sentence contest entry.
And, was putting down religion.
Had something to do with the church and a door ding dong?
So I decided to block this person.
But they are still able to post a retort but not of course where it could be reviewed.
Got Very, Very, acid tongued and it's extremely nasty!
Doctor Ricky 1024
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Sounds like someone who gave me a 3 - the first less than 5 I ever received--they were wrong about the story - which received 2 6's If they had read it it might have helped.
Comment from Jewelzies
This was a very interesting read, just a bit difficult for me to follow, as it jumped around somewhat excessively, many times, to something that seems completely unrelated. There were a fair amount of grammatical errors & a spelling mistake or two, all of which can easily be avoided in the future by taking some extra time to proofread before deciding on a final draft. The jumping around did offer a nice whimsical feeling all throughout, so maybe just try and sharpen up the connections from one thing to the next, & I think you've definitely got some potential. I wish you nothing but the best of luck, & thank you for sharing!
reply by the author on 20-Sep-2021
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This was a very interesting read, just a bit difficult for me to follow, as it jumped around somewhat excessively, many times, to something that seems completely unrelated. There were a fair amount of grammatical errors & a spelling mistake or two, all of which can easily be avoided in the future by taking some extra time to proofread before deciding on a final draft. The jumping around did offer a nice whimsical feeling all throughout, so maybe just try and sharpen up the connections from one thing to the next, & I think you've definitely got some potential. I wish you nothing but the best of luck, & thank you for sharing!
Comment Written 20-Sep-2021
reply by the author on 20-Sep-2021
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I thank you so very much for your wonderful two store review on something that has gotten five and six.
I have rechecked my work and have not found one grammar issue.
Of course when there are grammar issues and the reviewer wants you to learn from your mistakes they normally post them.
There Are Young writers here.
Bichon has just started her second year of college and has finished one book.
She always gets five and six star reviews from me.
I do not chastise or take away for grammar issues.
I review based on the content only I could care less if they make a mistake on the word
To, too, or Two.
I've been on this site for going on 14 years I have posted hundreds of thousands of poems and over 400 books.
I have competed with the international Society of poetry and been World ranked twice by two who's who's for my ability to write and create which is a gift from above based on tragedy.
It's very nice for you to comment but not actually here.
I have very rarely given less than five stars.
My review to your work is fair.
You did not include any editor's notes to explain what you were talking about in that contest entry that was your first error.
Your second error was basically bringing religion into it and putting the religion down.
I already explained that in my review.
Each and every Sabbath Sunday I write religiously since I'm a Latter-Day Saint priest with the Church of Jesus Christ.
I'm going to sell a representative for the gift of life out of Philadelphia Pennsylvania.
Since my 18-year-old was killed 18 years ago in a car accident and we donated his organs.
You had given me no choice but to block you.
And then the cruelty of what you had said about me afterwards?
Based on what was basically a poorly written contest entry?
Doctor Ricky 1024
Comment from Humble Bill Beucher
Ok I am now smarter than I was before I read your post. But it was very interesting how you just kept me intrigued by the way it was jumping. I never could turn my eyes off it.
Im not sure about how it would be poetry, but I am learning that there is lots different styles of art.
Another lesson taught and learned. Good job
reply by the author on 20-Sep-2021
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Ok I am now smarter than I was before I read your post. But it was very interesting how you just kept me intrigued by the way it was jumping. I never could turn my eyes off it.
Im not sure about how it would be poetry, but I am learning that there is lots different styles of art.
Another lesson taught and learned. Good job
Comment Written 20-Sep-2021
reply by the author on 20-Sep-2021
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Used to be a short strip specialist here but I changed off when I started producing a lot of books.
A person who's into short script you'll notice it's a piece of conversation between individuals.
This I could have turned into a short script very easily but it would have been a little bit more work.
Normally I post in a book so you don't have much choices on here when you go into the writing mode.
Just click on the main menu button above and then you'll notice that.
Thanks,
Ricky
"Still Preaching the Choir Here at Fanstory"
