The Mayor of Sweet-Town
(And the moral of the story is...)10 total reviews
Comment from Rosemary Everson1
This is a very cute poem about children and Halloween. The mayor can be a little mysterious sometimes. The one in your poem was like the Scrooge, that we hear about at Christmas time.
reply by the author on 22-Sep-2021
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This is a very cute poem about children and Halloween. The mayor can be a little mysterious sometimes. The one in your poem was like the Scrooge, that we hear about at Christmas time.
Comment Written 22-Sep-2021
reply by the author on 22-Sep-2021
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Yes, he was, but a toothache can definitely make you grouchy! Ha! Ha! Thank you so much for the great review of The Mayor of Sweet-Town... I'm so happy that you enjoyed! Have a wonderful evening!
Comment from Bill Schott
This children's poem, The Mayor of Sweet-Town, is a fun romp with the mean mayor through the haunted evening on his way to his Halloween miracle. Neat.
reply by the author on 22-Sep-2021
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This children's poem, The Mayor of Sweet-Town, is a fun romp with the mean mayor through the haunted evening on his way to his Halloween miracle. Neat.
Comment Written 21-Sep-2021
reply by the author on 22-Sep-2021
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Hi, Bill! Thank you so much for reviewing The Mayor of Sweet-Town! I'm so happy you enjoyed! Have a wonderful day!
Comment from Katie Mae Dead
Yay! It ends with a health lesson. That's always good for children! This is so delightful and would work well as a children's story-in-a-poem. The characters are engaging and the poem moves along well. I love the picture you found by the way.
Best wishes in the contest.
Katiemae Dead
reply by the author on 21-Sep-2021
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Yay! It ends with a health lesson. That's always good for children! This is so delightful and would work well as a children's story-in-a-poem. The characters are engaging and the poem moves along well. I love the picture you found by the way.
Best wishes in the contest.
Katiemae Dead
Comment Written 21-Sep-2021
reply by the author on 21-Sep-2021
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Hi, Katie Mae! Thank you so much for the wonderful review; I'm so happy that you enjoyed and thought it would be a good one for a children's story-in-a-poem... with lesson at the end! Thank you so much and have a beautiful evening!
Comment from Mary Shifman
I enjoyed your clever children's poem. It rhymes nicely and has great imagery. I'm sure that children will love it. It reminds me a little of the story about the lion with a thorn in it's paw. Well done. Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 20-Sep-2021
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I enjoyed your clever children's poem. It rhymes nicely and has great imagery. I'm sure that children will love it. It reminds me a little of the story about the lion with a thorn in it's paw. Well done. Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 20-Sep-2021
reply by the author on 20-Sep-2021
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Hi, Mary! Thanks so much for the wonderful review - I'm so happy that you enjoyed! Have a beautiful day!
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You are welcome.
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
You made me smile here with this children's write and you used just the right amount of horror for a child to enjoy, a fun post and a pleasure to read this inventive story, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 20-Sep-2021
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You made me smile here with this children's write and you used just the right amount of horror for a child to enjoy, a fun post and a pleasure to read this inventive story, love Dolly x
Comment Written 20-Sep-2021
reply by the author on 20-Sep-2021
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Thank you so much, Dolly, for the lovely review! I'm so happy it made you smile and that you felt that children would enjoy! Thanks again and have a wonderful week!
Comment from Paul McFarland
Nice children's poem with a nice ending and message about dental care. I thought "contemptuous" was a little too much for the young kiddies. but you should do okay in the contest.
reply by the author on 19-Sep-2021
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Nice children's poem with a nice ending and message about dental care. I thought "contemptuous" was a little too much for the young kiddies. but you should do okay in the contest.
Comment Written 19-Sep-2021
reply by the author on 19-Sep-2021
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I do need to go back and re-write that line... totally agree with you on that! Thanks so much for your feedback and I'm so happy you enjoyed The Mayor of Sweet-Town!
Comment from Carol Hillebrenner
This is a really sweet story and told quite well with a nice surprise ending. If you mean it to be read by children, the (. . .) isn't a good idea. The only line I question if the "who" in line 4. It just doesn't work. Good job and it might get published if you pick your market carefully.
reply by the author on 19-Sep-2021
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This is a really sweet story and told quite well with a nice surprise ending. If you mean it to be read by children, the (. . .) isn't a good idea. The only line I question if the "who" in line 4. It just doesn't work. Good job and it might get published if you pick your market carefully.
Comment Written 19-Sep-2021
reply by the author on 19-Sep-2021
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Thanks so much for your feedback! I'm so happy you enjoyed The Mayor of Sweet-Town! I'll definitely go back and take a look at your suggestions!
Comment from LisaMay
I bet you had fun writing this reimagined tale of the misguided grinchy mayor. i'm glad we got past his bad mood and a violent attack to the fun times and the moral of the story, which tied it together well.
reply by the author on 19-Sep-2021
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I bet you had fun writing this reimagined tale of the misguided grinchy mayor. i'm glad we got past his bad mood and a violent attack to the fun times and the moral of the story, which tied it together well.
Comment Written 19-Sep-2021
reply by the author on 19-Sep-2021
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Thanks so much for the great review, LisaMay! It was fun to write and I'm so happy that you enjoyed! Thanks again!
Comment from SHABAMO
This is a very clever and well written redux of the original grinch, put into the terminology and time of Halloween instead of Christmas. Best of luck in the contest!
reply by the author on 19-Sep-2021
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This is a very clever and well written redux of the original grinch, put into the terminology and time of Halloween instead of Christmas. Best of luck in the contest!
Comment Written 19-Sep-2021
reply by the author on 19-Sep-2021
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Thanks so much for the wonderful review; I'm so happy that you enjoyed my take on the Grinch Who Stole Christmas! It was a fun piece to write... Thank you once more and have a wonderful evening!
Comment from Eternal Muse
This was so adorable. Good for children 5 to 80 (smile). Amazing Halloween imagery, visuals and presentation.
Nice occasional rhyming.
It was a pleasure to read .
Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 19-Sep-2021
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This was so adorable. Good for children 5 to 80 (smile). Amazing Halloween imagery, visuals and presentation.
Nice occasional rhyming.
It was a pleasure to read .
Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 19-Sep-2021
reply by the author on 19-Sep-2021
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Thanks so much for the great review and am so happy it made you smile :) Thanks again and have a wonderful evening!
