Football - A Novel
Viewing comments for Chapter 53 "Football Chapter 27 part 1"A mother faces life's struggles.
26 total reviews
Comment from AJ McCall
Awww, this was such a sweet chapter!! I've been trying to keep up but am currently in the process of moving and I can kinda relate to Katherine's situation. The boys are sooo sweet in this chapter I wish it were happening to me, lol. You have a great visit with your family. I'm actually trying to visit family out of state, too, but they have internet, lol. Don't rush with Kathrine and Gabriel, I like where this is going! Sorry I haven't been reviewing much, I'll try to do more in the upcoming days!!
reply by the author on 26-Sep-2021
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Awww, this was such a sweet chapter!! I've been trying to keep up but am currently in the process of moving and I can kinda relate to Katherine's situation. The boys are sooo sweet in this chapter I wish it were happening to me, lol. You have a great visit with your family. I'm actually trying to visit family out of state, too, but they have internet, lol. Don't rush with Kathrine and Gabriel, I like where this is going! Sorry I haven't been reviewing much, I'll try to do more in the upcoming days!!
Comment Written 26-Sep-2021
reply by the author on 26-Sep-2021
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My vacation was cut short. I'll explain when I post today, Thank you for the kind review.
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Okay...You're welcome!
Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
I don't know what has been happening to my sixes, I'll make sure you get one next time. Your lovely romantic story with the threat of Frost and the in-laws hanging over them like acid rain, is so well written. This warm family scene really shows how close the family have become, and how they easily accept Gabe. Well done, my friend, and have a wonderful holiday with your family, and I know you're excited at seeing them and the new granddaughter! :)) Sandra xx
reply by the author on 23-Sep-2021
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I don't know what has been happening to my sixes, I'll make sure you get one next time. Your lovely romantic story with the threat of Frost and the in-laws hanging over them like acid rain, is so well written. This warm family scene really shows how close the family have become, and how they easily accept Gabe. Well done, my friend, and have a wonderful holiday with your family, and I know you're excited at seeing them and the new granddaughter! :)) Sandra xx
Comment Written 23-Sep-2021
reply by the author on 23-Sep-2021
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Thank you for the kind review. Don't worry about the sixes.
Comment from RPSaxena
Hello Barbara.Wilkey,
Nice piece of Romance Fiction in continuation having lucid as well as perfectly matching the theme phraseology, captivating flow throughout from the beginning to the end, and depicting the whole journey/story from kitchen, breakfast, grocery store, dinner, movie etc. in a VERY interesting way.
Description of amicable family atmosphere in and outside the house is particularly noteworthy.
Flawless in all respects!
reply by the author on 23-Sep-2021
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Hello Barbara.Wilkey,
Nice piece of Romance Fiction in continuation having lucid as well as perfectly matching the theme phraseology, captivating flow throughout from the beginning to the end, and depicting the whole journey/story from kitchen, breakfast, grocery store, dinner, movie etc. in a VERY interesting way.
Description of amicable family atmosphere in and outside the house is particularly noteworthy.
Flawless in all respects!
Comment Written 22-Sep-2021
reply by the author on 23-Sep-2021
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Thank you for the kind review and the encouragement.
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Barbara.Wilkey, Most Welcome!
With best wishes,
~ RP
Comment from tfawcus
You have handled the relationship between Gabriel and Katherine with great sensitivity in this chapter, showing what a good team they would make bringing up the boys.
I hope you enjoy your vacation and visiting family.
All good wishes, Tony
reply by the author on 22-Sep-2021
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You have handled the relationship between Gabriel and Katherine with great sensitivity in this chapter, showing what a good team they would make bringing up the boys.
I hope you enjoy your vacation and visiting family.
All good wishes, Tony
Comment Written 22-Sep-2021
reply by the author on 22-Sep-2021
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Thank you for the kind review and well wishes.
Comment from amahra
I love the restraint Gabriel has towards sex with Katherine. It's so romantic the way they steal kisses when no one's looking. You're making us all wait for that big night. It's lovely. Great chapter.
reply by the author on 22-Sep-2021
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I love the restraint Gabriel has towards sex with Katherine. It's so romantic the way they steal kisses when no one's looking. You're making us all wait for that big night. It's lovely. Great chapter.
Comment Written 21-Sep-2021
reply by the author on 22-Sep-2021
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Paul McFarland
Very smooth writing and as interesting story. There's one place when they grocery shopping that I think you have a misplaced word. He put his hand on the small of "her" back. Please check.
reply by the author on 22-Sep-2021
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Very smooth writing and as interesting story. There's one place when they grocery shopping that I think you have a misplaced word. He put his hand on the small of "her" back. Please check.
Comment Written 21-Sep-2021
reply by the author on 22-Sep-2021
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Thank you for the kind review. I will recheck. I have a bad habit of misplaces words or leaving them out all together and it's always the small words.
Comment from estory
This chapter shows Katherine and Gabriel settling into family life, dealing with the typical kids' problems, figuring out the food and the movies. I liked the scene in the grocery store with all the people from the town watching them, surmising they are a couple, watching them from behind their backs. That added an element of the tension of this situation. Very realistic, and it complicates things, but it also shows how much dedicated to each other they are becoming. estory
reply by the author on 21-Sep-2021
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This chapter shows Katherine and Gabriel settling into family life, dealing with the typical kids' problems, figuring out the food and the movies. I liked the scene in the grocery store with all the people from the town watching them, surmising they are a couple, watching them from behind their backs. That added an element of the tension of this situation. Very realistic, and it complicates things, but it also shows how much dedicated to each other they are becoming. estory
Comment Written 21-Sep-2021
reply by the author on 21-Sep-2021
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Thank you for the understanding. I appreciate it.
Comment from Sanku
A very happy domestic scene .it is good that the boys like their coach.
have a good holiday with your grandchildren .I have not seen mine for about two years .They are in Singapore.
have a peaceful time with your mother too.
reply by the author on 21-Sep-2021
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A very happy domestic scene .it is good that the boys like their coach.
have a good holiday with your grandchildren .I have not seen mine for about two years .They are in Singapore.
have a peaceful time with your mother too.
Comment Written 21-Sep-2021
reply by the author on 21-Sep-2021
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I can't wait to see my grandchildren. I has been two years. Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Ric Myworld
It's nice to read a story that even makes pancakes and grocery shopping fun. Where the best of intentions are always being shared by two people who should and hopefully will become a couple. LOL. Thanks for sharing and have a wonderful vacation!
reply by the author on 20-Sep-2021
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It's nice to read a story that even makes pancakes and grocery shopping fun. Where the best of intentions are always being shared by two people who should and hopefully will become a couple. LOL. Thanks for sharing and have a wonderful vacation!
Comment Written 20-Sep-2021
reply by the author on 20-Sep-2021
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I am pretty sure they will become a couple, but there are still problems ahead. Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Ben Colder
Good one, Barb. Glad you are getting to see your granddaughter. Stay safe out there. I have enjoyed reading your work and look forward in reading more. My blessings to you.
reply by the author on 20-Sep-2021
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Good one, Barb. Glad you are getting to see your granddaughter. Stay safe out there. I have enjoyed reading your work and look forward in reading more. My blessings to you.
Comment Written 20-Sep-2021
reply by the author on 20-Sep-2021
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Thank you for the well wishes.
