A Happy Home
Swap Quatrain10 total reviews
Comment from Paul McFarland
A great poem in a difficult form. A very detailed description of this house. It paints a very clear picture in such a way that you can visualize this building.
reply by the author on 21-Sep-2021
A great poem in a difficult form. A very detailed description of this house. It paints a very clear picture in such a way that you can visualize this building.
Comment Written 19-Sep-2021
reply by the author on 21-Sep-2021
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Hi Paul, Thanks for the great review! Much appreciated!
Comment from Sally Law
A sugar sweet delight in rhyming poetry, my dear. So good to see you. Beautifully penned and illustrated. Another FanStory masterpiece I will always cherish. Sending you and yours my very best, and blessings for always,
Sal XOs...
reply by the author on 21-Sep-2021
A sugar sweet delight in rhyming poetry, my dear. So good to see you. Beautifully penned and illustrated. Another FanStory masterpiece I will always cherish. Sending you and yours my very best, and blessings for always,
Sal XOs...
Comment Written 19-Sep-2021
reply by the author on 21-Sep-2021
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Hi Sally! Thanks for yet another awesome review!! I hope all is well with you!!
Comment from Mary Shifman
I really enjoyed this poem. It rhymes well and has good meter and lots of imagery. I absolutely love Victorian houses. It's my favorite style of architecture. You poem is well done. Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 19-Sep-2021
I really enjoyed this poem. It rhymes well and has good meter and lots of imagery. I absolutely love Victorian houses. It's my favorite style of architecture. You poem is well done. Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 19-Sep-2021
reply by the author on 19-Sep-2021
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I love Victorian homes too!...they are just stunning! Thank you for stopping by this morning and taking the time to review!!
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You are so welcome.
Comment from RGstar
Excellent. So good to see your name and this beautiful gift of this new day as I awake.
Softly it treads, beautiful invoking imagery as if all was meant to see.
A lovely Thing. Good rhymes, good rhythm, and an excellent poetic aura.
Bravo.
Have a great week.
My best wishes.
RG
reply by the author on 19-Sep-2021
Excellent. So good to see your name and this beautiful gift of this new day as I awake.
Softly it treads, beautiful invoking imagery as if all was meant to see.
A lovely Thing. Good rhymes, good rhythm, and an excellent poetic aura.
Bravo.
Have a great week.
My best wishes.
RG
Comment Written 19-Sep-2021
reply by the author on 19-Sep-2021
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6 shiny stars from one of the most talented writers here?? I am honored you thought so highly of this fun little write! ... I was just reading your " A Gentle fade" last night! Thank you so much! :-) Have a great weekend RG
Comment from WalkerMan
The two lovely vintage homes illustrated only hint at the real one in your neighborhood, which inspired this delightful Swap Quatrain poem with equally ornate vocabulary. Your vivid descriptions of the real home highlight features beyond what the illustrated houses have, so it must be a joy to walk past such a house so near to your own personally well-maintained residence.
From two to seven, each stanza highlights a different aspect of the house or yard, and the swap of phrases in the fourth line enhances the image painted by its corresponding first line.
It all flows smoothly in iambic tetrameter with flawless aabb rhymes.
Superb, and a welcome respite from all other events of the day.
reply by the author on 19-Sep-2021
The two lovely vintage homes illustrated only hint at the real one in your neighborhood, which inspired this delightful Swap Quatrain poem with equally ornate vocabulary. Your vivid descriptions of the real home highlight features beyond what the illustrated houses have, so it must be a joy to walk past such a house so near to your own personally well-maintained residence.
From two to seven, each stanza highlights a different aspect of the house or yard, and the swap of phrases in the fourth line enhances the image painted by its corresponding first line.
It all flows smoothly in iambic tetrameter with flawless aabb rhymes.
Superb, and a welcome respite from all other events of the day.
Comment Written 18-Sep-2021
reply by the author on 19-Sep-2021
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Mike Mike mike! Thank you so much for this outstanding review! It's a lovely little house...and as you know, that's what inspired this poem! thanks again Mike! :-)
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You are most welcome, Susan. I enjoyed reading it. :)) -- Mike
Comment from Jannypan (Jan)
You did a great job with your rhyming poem contest entry, Susan. I enjoyed reading it. Your words are we chosen, they are descriptive, and the flow is great. Your words are filled with great imagery of this beautiful Victorian home. Rather than the word pizzazz, perhaps you would consider splendor.
Best wishes in the contest.
Respectfully, Jan
reply by the author on 19-Sep-2021
You did a great job with your rhyming poem contest entry, Susan. I enjoyed reading it. Your words are we chosen, they are descriptive, and the flow is great. Your words are filled with great imagery of this beautiful Victorian home. Rather than the word pizzazz, perhaps you would consider splendor.
Best wishes in the contest.
Respectfully, Jan
Comment Written 18-Sep-2021
reply by the author on 19-Sep-2021
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That is a great suggestion Jan! My only hesitation is that I use that word A LOT lol. Just trying to expand my vocab! But, I will think about that... Thank you for reviewing! have an awesome weekend.
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
A cleverly described house and the joy within it immortalised in this swap quatrain Susan and I enjoyed every word. Fine rhymes and meter bring a melody to this poem that is magical, a joy to read, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 19-Sep-2021
A cleverly described house and the joy within it immortalised in this swap quatrain Susan and I enjoyed every word. Fine rhymes and meter bring a melody to this poem that is magical, a joy to read, love Dolly x
Comment Written 18-Sep-2021
reply by the author on 19-Sep-2021
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Sweet Dolly, thank you for stopping by and leaving me such a nice review to read this morning!! I love that you felt this poem had a magical feel to it!...so does this house :-))) have a great weekend Dolly!
Comment from Gloria ....
Susan, how good to read a poem from you. This is a fine swap quatrain with the reversed lines weaving in seamlessly to change ever so slightly to a further fullness.
Your iambic metre is pristine, and your rhymes fresh, and colourful.
Wishing you great luck with the Contest Committee. :))
Gloria
reply by the author on 19-Sep-2021
Susan, how good to read a poem from you. This is a fine swap quatrain with the reversed lines weaving in seamlessly to change ever so slightly to a further fullness.
Your iambic metre is pristine, and your rhymes fresh, and colourful.
Wishing you great luck with the Contest Committee. :))
Gloria
Comment Written 18-Sep-2021
reply by the author on 19-Sep-2021
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Ahh Gloria! Yet another poet I hold in such high regard! Thank you for this review. lol I especially like the "pristine" part! Iambics and me don't always get along! Ha
Comment from kahpot
Wow! Love the swap lines and the way you transform this house into a home, your descriptive words throughout are a pleasure to read, an exceptional work, very well written and presented, best wishes for your contest****kahpot
reply by the author on 19-Sep-2021
Wow! Love the swap lines and the way you transform this house into a home, your descriptive words throughout are a pleasure to read, an exceptional work, very well written and presented, best wishes for your contest****kahpot
Comment Written 18-Sep-2021
reply by the author on 19-Sep-2021
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Hello new friend! Thank you kindly for this review!!
Comment from Midi O'Rourke
I love it. This is a very well thought out rhyming poem. It tells a wonderful story about a beautiful stately home. I like your phrasing - Glass windows stained mosaic hues,
cast tantalizing spark'ling views. They are tantalizing.
In my opinion the use of the word pizazz - Victorian pizzazz ingrained - doesn't work well in describing a Victorian. To me they are more subdued. Good luck in the contest! Good job.
reply by the author on 19-Sep-2021
I love it. This is a very well thought out rhyming poem. It tells a wonderful story about a beautiful stately home. I like your phrasing - Glass windows stained mosaic hues,
cast tantalizing spark'ling views. They are tantalizing.
In my opinion the use of the word pizazz - Victorian pizzazz ingrained - doesn't work well in describing a Victorian. To me they are more subdued. Good luck in the contest! Good job.
Comment Written 18-Sep-2021
reply by the author on 19-Sep-2021
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Glass windows are sooo beautiful! Aren't they?? :-) Thank you for reading and for this lovely review!! Much appreciated.