Traditions
Had to use certain words and a potlatch entry17 total reviews
Comment from Pearl Edwards
You did well Joan combining your words list and the swap quatrain into a poem about the value of traditions in the family, passing them down to the next generation. All your swap lines work well to create a good read.
cheers,
valda
reply by the author on 23-Sep-2021
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You did well Joan combining your words list and the swap quatrain into a poem about the value of traditions in the family, passing them down to the next generation. All your swap lines work well to create a good read.
cheers,
valda
Comment Written 23-Sep-2021
reply by the author on 23-Sep-2021
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Thank you, Valda, for your continures support.
Joan
Comment from royowen
Oh yes indeed, God's law wasn't given to judge us or condemn, it was given as a guide to help us to fit, and for society to work in close collaboration and harmony, as supposedly are the laws of the land. God didn't invent tradition, man did. Well done, Joan, beautifully written my friend, blessings Roy
reply by the author on 22-Sep-2021
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Oh yes indeed, God's law wasn't given to judge us or condemn, it was given as a guide to help us to fit, and for society to work in close collaboration and harmony, as supposedly are the laws of the land. God didn't invent tradition, man did. Well done, Joan, beautifully written my friend, blessings Roy
Comment Written 22-Sep-2021
reply by the author on 22-Sep-2021
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Thanks a lot, Roy. These words mean a lot coming from you.
Joan
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Bless you
Comment from Sherry Asbury
Very nicely crafted work here. You used the word list so intricately that the reader would not know which words were mandatory. It is a lovely poem about tradition and family. I have another form to learn now in the potlatch. Good luck in your competition!
reply by the author on 22-Sep-2021
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Very nicely crafted work here. You used the word list so intricately that the reader would not know which words were mandatory. It is a lovely poem about tradition and family. I have another form to learn now in the potlatch. Good luck in your competition!
Comment Written 22-Sep-2021
reply by the author on 22-Sep-2021
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Thank you for the kind comments and the good luck wishes
Joan
Comment from Hitcher
Wow, that is definitely a list and then some to have to try and squeeze into a poem. I have never tried the potlatch form but have read a few on site. Your rhymes were good, the swap quatrains worked well here and I think you did an excellent job of incorporating all the words.
reply by the author on 22-Sep-2021
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Wow, that is definitely a list and then some to have to try and squeeze into a poem. I have never tried the potlatch form but have read a few on site. Your rhymes were good, the swap quatrains worked well here and I think you did an excellent job of incorporating all the words.
Comment Written 22-Sep-2021
reply by the author on 22-Sep-2021
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Thanks, Hithcer, for the thorough and encouraging review.
Joan
Comment from Pam (respa)
-You did a good job
with all of the things
you had to include, Joan.
-A good topic, effective
imagery, rhyme, and swaps.
-I like the opening two lines
to set the scene and tone of the poem.
-Good examples of customs,
and a good concluding verse.
-Well done.
reply by the author on 21-Sep-2021
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-You did a good job
with all of the things
you had to include, Joan.
-A good topic, effective
imagery, rhyme, and swaps.
-I like the opening two lines
to set the scene and tone of the poem.
-Good examples of customs,
and a good concluding verse.
-Well done.
Comment Written 21-Sep-2021
reply by the author on 21-Sep-2021
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Thanks for the thorough and encouraging review, Jan.
Joan
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You are very welcome, Joan.
Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose
Traditions
by dragonpoet
Hello, Joan, excellent entry for the Swap Quatrain event in the Potlatch Poetry Club. You incorporated all the required words in a natural way. The manner parents teach at home last a lifetime. Well done!
reply by the author on 21-Sep-2021
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Traditions
by dragonpoet
Hello, Joan, excellent entry for the Swap Quatrain event in the Potlatch Poetry Club. You incorporated all the required words in a natural way. The manner parents teach at home last a lifetime. Well done!
Comment Written 21-Sep-2021
reply by the author on 21-Sep-2021
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Thanks for your encouraging comments.
Glad you liked it
Joan
Comment from barbara.wilkey
I enjoyed reading your club entry. I believe the best part of these clubs is that us reviewers get to read good work. Yours is very good. I enjoyed the use of rhyming words. Thank you for sharing.
reply by the author on 21-Sep-2021
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I enjoyed reading your club entry. I believe the best part of these clubs is that us reviewers get to read good work. Yours is very good. I enjoyed the use of rhyming words. Thank you for sharing.
Comment Written 21-Sep-2021
reply by the author on 21-Sep-2021
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Thank you for reviewing. I appreciate your time and comments.
Joan
Comment from dellsworthpoet
An interesting poetry form.
The pace is good. The rhyme pattern is tight. The poem flows well. The language fits the message.
A good read. Thank you for sharing.
reply by the author on 21-Sep-2021
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An interesting poetry form.
The pace is good. The rhyme pattern is tight. The poem flows well. The language fits the message.
A good read. Thank you for sharing.
Comment Written 21-Sep-2021
reply by the author on 21-Sep-2021
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Thanks for the concise and thorough review.
Happy that you liked it.
dp
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You are welcome.
Comment from ElPoetry001
You have captured the philosophy of the Japanese.
A portion of the Japanese Society is engaged in the pursuit of technical development.
Another important part is devoted to the continuing of the use of traditional building, painting, and other trades, in order to create, by hand, the many important activities that involve the human hand and mind.
When we abandon history, customs, and traditional principles, we no longer have a safe path.
The Japanese culture does not allow disrespect.
We, in the West, promote an "in your face" confrontation posture.
Our culture needs to seek a return to a time when every person was respected.
Your story, reflecting your views, is the outline of someone who understands respect.
Thank you.
reply by the author on 20-Sep-2021
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You have captured the philosophy of the Japanese.
A portion of the Japanese Society is engaged in the pursuit of technical development.
Another important part is devoted to the continuing of the use of traditional building, painting, and other trades, in order to create, by hand, the many important activities that involve the human hand and mind.
When we abandon history, customs, and traditional principles, we no longer have a safe path.
The Japanese culture does not allow disrespect.
We, in the West, promote an "in your face" confrontation posture.
Our culture needs to seek a return to a time when every person was respected.
Your story, reflecting your views, is the outline of someone who understands respect.
Thank you.
Comment Written 20-Sep-2021
reply by the author on 20-Sep-2021
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Thanks for your generous rating and your informative comments. I am honored by the six star rating
Joan
Comment from Mary Shifman
Tradition is so important. Most of are of an age that we had strong family traditions and at least some knowledge of our heritage. So many younger people lead disjointed lives in which they experience family tradition or have any clues about their heritage or cultural customs. When I was teaching many of my students didn't have the day to day experience of sitting down at the table for a meal as a family. Many of them had to scramble to fix something for themselves. It's 2:30 in the morning and I guess I'm rambling. I like your poem and your message. Nicely done.
reply by the author on 20-Sep-2021
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Tradition is so important. Most of are of an age that we had strong family traditions and at least some knowledge of our heritage. So many younger people lead disjointed lives in which they experience family tradition or have any clues about their heritage or cultural customs. When I was teaching many of my students didn't have the day to day experience of sitting down at the table for a meal as a family. Many of them had to scramble to fix something for themselves. It's 2:30 in the morning and I guess I'm rambling. I like your poem and your message. Nicely done.
Comment Written 20-Sep-2021
reply by the author on 20-Sep-2021
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Thanks for the reive and comments.
dp
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You are very welcome.
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You are welcome.
