Comment from Bonnie Seach

Excellent

An attractive presentation for this poem.
The photo fits admirably.
The rhythm and rhyme schemes are a little out of synch. This can be improved by reducing the number of syllables in a line.
Thank you for sharing.
Best wishes

 Comment Written 16-Sep-2021

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reply by the author on 16-Sep-2021

Thank you Bonnie for the review, and yes, I went over this thing so many times before I submitted it and still wasn?t 100% satisfied. I cleaned it up a little bit again. Thanks for pointing that out.

reply by Bonnie Seach on 16-Sep-2021

Thanks for your friendly response.
I have to adjust my poems regularly.
I simply reduce syllables and it works quite well. 👌👍🏻😊🌹

Comment from pookietoo

Excellent

You described being a couch potato very well. Keep up the great work writing your poems. Good luck to you in this contest. I enjoyed reading this poem. Best wishes to you, and keep smiling.

 Comment Written 15-Sep-2021

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reply by the author on 15-Sep-2021

Thank You so much for your sweet review!

reply by pookietoo on 15-Sep-2021

You are welcome. I would appreciate it if you would read and review my Jessica's Year of seeing nature story.

reply by pookietoo on 15-Sep-2021

You are welcome. I would appreciate it if you would read and review my Jessica's Year of seeing nature story.

Comment from Wendy G

Excellent

This is a clever one, and also very humorous! The fifth stanza needs to have the fourth line re-positioned, and that will improve the look and flow. I really like it. Best wishes for the contest
Wendy.

 Comment Written 15-Sep-2021

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reply by the author on 15-Sep-2021

Thank you Wendy and Thank you for pointing that out, I fixed it.