Running Blind
Viewing comments for Chapter 18 "Running Blind~Chapter Eighteen"The Blind Girl's toughest cold case.
28 total reviews
Comment from estory
You are the master of these multiple viewpoint stories, and here you did another great job giving us the view from the detectives, the criminal, and the victim. Nice attention to detail setting the scenes, the people eating the delicious pancakes, in that laid back moment, kind of pondering the facts of the case, chewing it all over, so to speak. I liked the scene in the woods, nice and mysterious, a bit eerie. estory
reply by the author on 21-Sep-2021
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You are the master of these multiple viewpoint stories, and here you did another great job giving us the view from the detectives, the criminal, and the victim. Nice attention to detail setting the scenes, the people eating the delicious pancakes, in that laid back moment, kind of pondering the facts of the case, chewing it all over, so to speak. I liked the scene in the woods, nice and mysterious, a bit eerie. estory
Comment Written 21-Sep-2021
reply by the author on 21-Sep-2021
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Thank you very much for the wonderful review and generous reading. I really appreciate you stopping by and for your review. It means so much to me. Sending all my very best to you and yours as always, Sally XOs
Comment from Judy Lawless
It's a relief to know that Jackson made it back and is ready to take a rest from law enforcement for a time. I'm also happy that Agent Washburn is also on the mend. I'm sure Eugene will be discovered soon. Well done, Sally
reply by the author on 21-Sep-2021
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It's a relief to know that Jackson made it back and is ready to take a rest from law enforcement for a time. I'm also happy that Agent Washburn is also on the mend. I'm sure Eugene will be discovered soon. Well done, Sally
Comment Written 21-Sep-2021
reply by the author on 21-Sep-2021
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Thank you very much for the wonderful review of my book chapter. I am so very blessed. Sending along my very best as always, Sally XOs
Comment from MAMONIA
This book has held my interest all the way through. I am looking forward to the next chapter.
I must say that you have a fantastic imagination and are a great novelist, for sure. I just finished reading your novella, What the Blind Girl Saw, and enjoyed it thoroughly.
God bless and keep you well, dear girl. You are such a blessing to our world.
My best,
Marie
reply by the author on 21-Sep-2021
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This book has held my interest all the way through. I am looking forward to the next chapter.
I must say that you have a fantastic imagination and are a great novelist, for sure. I just finished reading your novella, What the Blind Girl Saw, and enjoyed it thoroughly.
God bless and keep you well, dear girl. You are such a blessing to our world.
My best,
Marie
Comment Written 21-Sep-2021
reply by the author on 21-Sep-2021
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Thank you very much for the wonderful review and kind compliments. I?m so glad you?re enjoying the book as well as my book chapter. Sending along my very best with love and blessings always, Sally XOs?xo ?
Comment from Mary Kay Bonfante
Oh, Sal, this was an awesome write! You're moving the story forward, and at the same time, you've given us a tender and romantic moment between Detectives Sal and Jackson. And where would we be without some Southern cuisine in the story? You even make hospital food sound good.
I found some areas you may want to consider for revisions:
She let go of a long sigh at the sight of me and my overnight guests.
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She let go of a long sigh, at the sight of me and my overnight guests.
Everyone sat up at once as she threw open the blinds with a jerk.
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Everyone sat up at once, as she threw open the blinds with a jerk.
So what is it, kind nurse, pancakes or the rack?"
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So what is it, kind nurse; pancakes, or the rack?"
not realizing he had left his DNA and link to his flagitious crimes.
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not realizing he had left his DNA and a link to his flagitious crimes. [I always love learning a new word, Sal!]
only to see the backside of a middle age nurse
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only to see the backside of a middle-aged nurse
pulling at the gauze for a looksee.
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pulling at the gauze for a look-see.
"Now see here! Does the word "infection" ring a bell?"
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"Now see here! Does the word 'infection' ring a bell?"
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I'm glad Analiese is safe. And I see a certain criminal has left his DNA behind. Would that be Tony Alfanzi?
reply by the author on 21-Sep-2021
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Oh, Sal, this was an awesome write! You're moving the story forward, and at the same time, you've given us a tender and romantic moment between Detectives Sal and Jackson. And where would we be without some Southern cuisine in the story? You even make hospital food sound good.
I found some areas you may want to consider for revisions:
She let go of a long sigh at the sight of me and my overnight guests.
-->
She let go of a long sigh, at the sight of me and my overnight guests.
Everyone sat up at once as she threw open the blinds with a jerk.
-->
Everyone sat up at once, as she threw open the blinds with a jerk.
So what is it, kind nurse, pancakes or the rack?"
-->
So what is it, kind nurse; pancakes, or the rack?"
not realizing he had left his DNA and link to his flagitious crimes.
-->
not realizing he had left his DNA and a link to his flagitious crimes. [I always love learning a new word, Sal!]
only to see the backside of a middle age nurse
-->
only to see the backside of a middle-aged nurse
pulling at the gauze for a looksee.
-->
pulling at the gauze for a look-see.
"Now see here! Does the word "infection" ring a bell?"
-->
"Now see here! Does the word 'infection' ring a bell?"
***
I'm glad Analiese is safe. And I see a certain criminal has left his DNA behind. Would that be Tony Alfanzi?
Comment Written 21-Sep-2021
reply by the author on 21-Sep-2021
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Thank you for the lovely review and generous compliments. The critique and helpful input is so greatly appreciated. Eugene is the assassin; Tony Alfanzi hired Eugene from prison. Remember the note with his meal? It said: What can I do for you? Eugene. More and it?s a tanker.
Sending you my best today as always,
Sal XOs?xo?
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You're very welcome, dear Sally. Yes! Thank you for refreshing my memory. Tony the (nasty) Tiger did hire Eugene. Tromping through swamplands, spitting wads of tobacco doesn't seem like old Tony's style, anyway ... he's a more sophisticated kind of thug. But I'm sure he'll get his comeuppance!
Love and prayers,
Mary Kay xoxo xoxo
Comment from WalkerMan
This is another fine chapter. (Do you know that the Hebrew characters for the number eighteen spell the word "life"?)
Jackson's decision to stay close to you until you fully recover is certainly in keeping with his personality and the true nature of your relationship. The sincere love you include in ALL your stories is a major factor in readers' delight, whether they realize it consciously or not.
Even Eugene is still alive, which answers that question while maintaining suspense, as he is still a threat. Yes, "flagitous" crimes -- a useful new term to know.
I like the banter between Jackson and Ken, and am especially pleased to realize what "A safe house in the Arkansas Plateau" means. Ana will be well watched-over while there. Clever.
Superb, and aptly illustrated.
reply by the author on 21-Sep-2021
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This is another fine chapter. (Do you know that the Hebrew characters for the number eighteen spell the word "life"?)
Jackson's decision to stay close to you until you fully recover is certainly in keeping with his personality and the true nature of your relationship. The sincere love you include in ALL your stories is a major factor in readers' delight, whether they realize it consciously or not.
Even Eugene is still alive, which answers that question while maintaining suspense, as he is still a threat. Yes, "flagitous" crimes -- a useful new term to know.
I like the banter between Jackson and Ken, and am especially pleased to realize what "A safe house in the Arkansas Plateau" means. Ana will be well watched-over while there. Clever.
Superb, and aptly illustrated.
Comment Written 21-Sep-2021
reply by the author on 21-Sep-2021
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Thank you for the superb review and insightful comments. I'm always glad to learn and teach a new word. A few reviewers have mentioned it.
The kind stars leave me blessed once again. Thank you! :))
Sending along my very best,
Sal :)
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You are most welcome, Sal. Your consistently superb chapters consistently earn those stars. :)) -- Mike
Comment from damommy
Ahhh, bringing Arkansas into it. Please don't make us hillbillies in the story. That's what everyone thinks of Arkansas. lol. Good chapter. Certainly keeping the nurses busy. 8-)
reply by the author on 22-Sep-2021
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Ahhh, bringing Arkansas into it. Please don't make us hillbillies in the story. That's what everyone thinks of Arkansas. lol. Good chapter. Certainly keeping the nurses busy. 8-)
Comment Written 20-Sep-2021
reply by the author on 22-Sep-2021
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Thank you for the excellent review and insightful comments. Blessings always,
Sal XOs....
Comment from Liz O'Neill
This is a great image. I wonder if other readers act it out, like do??? "I curled my lower lip in false contrition." Did your Maple syrup come from Vermont or the local grocery store?? I'm a little suspect of them telling where the safe house. This is turning another corner. Good job.
reply by the author on 22-Sep-2021
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This is a great image. I wonder if other readers act it out, like do??? "I curled my lower lip in false contrition." Did your Maple syrup come from Vermont or the local grocery store?? I'm a little suspect of them telling where the safe house. This is turning another corner. Good job.
Comment Written 20-Sep-2021
reply by the author on 22-Sep-2021
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Vermont maple syrup. There is no other.... So glad you enjoyed this chapter. Both men are law enforcement and working the case. The Law's have connections in Arknsas if you remember from my book, 'Double Blind' (Just a hint.)
Sending you my best today as always,
Sal XOs...
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Comment from Sankey
You are fortunate, I still had a SIX! Glad you finally turned up. Had me worried. A great chapter, again. can't wait for next week and don't be later, next time ya hea? No spags.
reply by the author on 22-Sep-2021
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You are fortunate, I still had a SIX! Glad you finally turned up. Had me worried. A great chapter, again. can't wait for next week and don't be later, next time ya hea? No spags.
Comment Written 20-Sep-2021
reply by the author on 22-Sep-2021
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Thank you for the stellar review and super stars! Geoff, it means so much to me! Blessings to you both always,
Sal XOs...
Comment from Wendy G
Good chapter, less action but a few lead-ins to the next. Should he have disclosed anything about the whereabouts of Analiese? Even general ones? Glad that Jackson's priority is his wife, probably unusual these days, especially with such a high pressure job.
Wendy
reply by the author on 21-Sep-2021
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Good chapter, less action but a few lead-ins to the next. Should he have disclosed anything about the whereabouts of Analiese? Even general ones? Glad that Jackson's priority is his wife, probably unusual these days, especially with such a high pressure job.
Wendy
Comment Written 20-Sep-2021
reply by the author on 21-Sep-2021
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Thank you for the excellent review and insightful comments. Stay tuned. Sending you my best today as always,
Sal XOs...
Comment from BethShelby
I'm enjoying this chapter and look forward to a new one each week.I keep waiting for the BLind lady to be well enough to leave the hospital. It sounds like she is being treated well there and has Jackson not wanting to leave her.
reply by the author on 21-Sep-2021
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I'm enjoying this chapter and look forward to a new one each week.I keep waiting for the BLind lady to be well enough to leave the hospital. It sounds like she is being treated well there and has Jackson not wanting to leave her.
Comment Written 20-Sep-2021
reply by the author on 21-Sep-2021
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Thank you for the lovely review and generous stars! Blessings to you and yours,
Sal XOs
