Football - A Novel
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Comment from Sankey
What a great chapter and glad the locals believe in her. Just a couple of spags or suggestions. and the town seems to think[s] so
The only way they can(be better set up??)
reply by the author on 12-Sep-2021
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What a great chapter and glad the locals believe in her. Just a couple of spags or suggestions. and the town seems to think[s] so
The only way they can(be better set up??)
Comment Written 12-Sep-2021
reply by the author on 12-Sep-2021
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I have made the corrections. Thank you.
Comment from amahra
You're doing great with the lawyer: Lawyers don't like surprises, so if there's dirt, they want to know so they can build a defense. So, bravo on the lawyer scene. Just a couple of things below:
"Yea." I think you mean, "Yeah" for "yes" "Yea is more a celebration sound, Yaaaa.
Gabriel glanced at his watch. "We really don't have time. My parents and the boys will be here in about twenty minutes. Besides I never did get home and shower." [I don't know who's talking here.]
reply by the author on 12-Sep-2021
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You're doing great with the lawyer: Lawyers don't like surprises, so if there's dirt, they want to know so they can build a defense. So, bravo on the lawyer scene. Just a couple of things below:
"Yea." I think you mean, "Yeah" for "yes" "Yea is more a celebration sound, Yaaaa.
Gabriel glanced at his watch. "We really don't have time. My parents and the boys will be here in about twenty minutes. Besides I never did get home and shower." [I don't know who's talking here.]
Comment Written 12-Sep-2021
reply by the author on 12-Sep-2021
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Gabriel glanced at this watch and there's not a paragraph so Gabriel's speaking. I used an action tag, not a speech tag. I'll go back and make sure. I made the other correction. thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Begin Again
Gabriel and Katherine make a good pair, especially since she needs such a strong support system right now. She's extremely fragile it seems. I am glad the lawyer introduced her to things she is most likely going to be confronted with when they go to trial. And Gabriel truly has her back.
Nice job! Smiles, Carol
reply by the author on 12-Sep-2021
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Gabriel and Katherine make a good pair, especially since she needs such a strong support system right now. She's extremely fragile it seems. I am glad the lawyer introduced her to things she is most likely going to be confronted with when they go to trial. And Gabriel truly has her back.
Nice job! Smiles, Carol
Comment Written 12-Sep-2021
reply by the author on 12-Sep-2021
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Yes, Gabriel does have her back. Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from royowen
So, Gabriel has hired an attorney, Troy, to handle the case of the boy's grandparents having custody ofbthe boys, and from his thorough examination, believes they should win the case. Of course that was true, it's tough to wrest kids away from good parents. Well done Barbara, great write, blessings Roy.
Typo : She('s) hurting and needs me.
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reply by the author on 12-Sep-2021
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So, Gabriel has hired an attorney, Troy, to handle the case of the boy's grandparents having custody ofbthe boys, and from his thorough examination, believes they should win the case. Of course that was true, it's tough to wrest kids away from good parents. Well done Barbara, great write, blessings Roy.
Typo : She('s) hurting and needs me.
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Comment Written 12-Sep-2021
reply by the author on 12-Sep-2021
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Thank you for the catch. I have made the correction.
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Most welcome
Comment from Jay Squires
So, at long last, everything I've been supposing (since you've quite adroitly been suggesting) is about to actualize. Katherine and her kids will have their day in court, and Troy promises Gabriel that she will not lose her children. This chapter had everything I expected. Katherine is still emotionally injured, but Gabriel is a needed balm.
reply by the author on 12-Sep-2021
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So, at long last, everything I've been supposing (since you've quite adroitly been suggesting) is about to actualize. Katherine and her kids will have their day in court, and Troy promises Gabriel that she will not lose her children. This chapter had everything I expected. Katherine is still emotionally injured, but Gabriel is a needed balm.
Comment Written 12-Sep-2021
reply by the author on 12-Sep-2021
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Yes, Katherine needs Gabriel. Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from BethShelby
This is and great story. Gabriel is a very decent person and she is fortunate to have him in her corner. The in-laws who plan to sue to get the kids shouldn't have much luck since they have never been interested in thim. I glad they decided to wait about the sex because they might be a means they would use to get the children.
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reply by the author on 12-Sep-2021
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This is and great story. Gabriel is a very decent person and she is fortunate to have him in her corner. The in-laws who plan to sue to get the kids shouldn't have much luck since they have never been interested in thim. I glad they decided to wait about the sex because they might be a means they would use to get the children.
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Comment Written 12-Sep-2021
reply by the author on 12-Sep-2021
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It sure would. Thank you for the kind review.
