Kids' ABC's Of Life
Kids Rules Of Life7 total reviews
Comment from Paul McFarland
A very good job with a difficult prompt. Your rhyme scheme is very good except in the second stanza. Very good advice for children - and adults, too.
reply by the author on 14-Sep-2021
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A very good job with a difficult prompt. Your rhyme scheme is very good except in the second stanza. Very good advice for children - and adults, too.
Comment Written 14-Sep-2021
reply by the author on 14-Sep-2021
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Thank you, will you review my Jessica's year of seeing nature story?
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If I can Find it.
Comment from Mary Shifman
This is a very interesting poem and you've managed to give credible examples for each letter, which isn't always easy. I've never been very good at what the children call 'ABC' poems. Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 14-Sep-2021
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This is a very interesting poem and you've managed to give credible examples for each letter, which isn't always easy. I've never been very good at what the children call 'ABC' poems. Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 14-Sep-2021
reply by the author on 14-Sep-2021
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Thanks. am in last place. Tears tears.
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I know the feeling; been there many times. Still, I liked your poem and there's always a next time!
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A next time for the poem? Unless I can find another place to enter it. I have a story in last place too. :(
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There are a lot of places on line that you can enter poetry. Even contests if you're interested. Just be careful and read reviews of the sites.Some are more legit than others. Reedsy is a good one.
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I am in 2nd to last place.
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Ok
Comment from Joanne Gill-Maddick
This is a beautifully written poem. It's very well put together it has a great flow and rhyme. Very wise words to live by. I love it. Nice photo to compliment your words. Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 13-Sep-2021
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This is a beautifully written poem. It's very well put together it has a great flow and rhyme. Very wise words to live by. I love it. Nice photo to compliment your words. Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 13-Sep-2021
reply by the author on 13-Sep-2021
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Thank you. So far I am not doing well.
Comment from royowen
I think this is incredible advice for those that feel rejected themselves, not only kids, but adults can have an "orphan" spirit, feeling rejected all the time. Human need badly to be "accepted" and can be a rare commodity, beautifully written my friend, in great verse, and you successfully worked your way through the alphabet in a most delightful way. So well done, good luck, blessings Roy
reply by the author on 13-Sep-2021
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I think this is incredible advice for those that feel rejected themselves, not only kids, but adults can have an "orphan" spirit, feeling rejected all the time. Human need badly to be "accepted" and can be a rare commodity, beautifully written my friend, in great verse, and you successfully worked your way through the alphabet in a most delightful way. So well done, good luck, blessings Roy
Comment Written 13-Sep-2021
reply by the author on 13-Sep-2021
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Thanks. I hope the poem fades better than it is now.
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Don?t be disappointed, it?s a battle competing. But it builds character, I know. You did fine.
Comment from SHABAMO
"Instead of saying the words I can't say I will"
Words that need to be impressed upon every child, for life is hard and we most rise above.
Great narrative and children's poem.
reply by the author on 13-Sep-2021
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"Instead of saying the words I can't say I will"
Words that need to be impressed upon every child, for life is hard and we most rise above.
Great narrative and children's poem.
Comment Written 13-Sep-2021
reply by the author on 13-Sep-2021
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Thank you. I hope it gets some votes in the contest.
Comment from Vangma
A wonderful poem for the kids. Life is experiential and one learns the nuances of living as one grows from a child to an adult. This poem is an excellent advice to the children.
reply by the author on 11-Sep-2021
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A wonderful poem for the kids. Life is experiential and one learns the nuances of living as one grows from a child to an adult. This poem is an excellent advice to the children.
Comment Written 11-Sep-2021
reply by the author on 11-Sep-2021
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Thank you.
Comment from Pantygynt
They don't come more didactic than this. Virtually every line is a separate instruction on how to live life, do this, do that, so there is little flow merely a series of hammer blows to the brain. These alphabetical things often end up like that. They may be useful in fashioning an approach to lifestyle but they do little for poetry.
It is always interesting to see how contestants hand the problem of X. This, like most, cheats, but what else can one do?
reply by the author on 11-Sep-2021
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They don't come more didactic than this. Virtually every line is a separate instruction on how to live life, do this, do that, so there is little flow merely a series of hammer blows to the brain. These alphabetical things often end up like that. They may be useful in fashioning an approach to lifestyle but they do little for poetry.
It is always interesting to see how contestants hand the problem of X. This, like most, cheats, but what else can one do?
Comment Written 11-Sep-2021
reply by the author on 11-Sep-2021
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Only four stars?
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Yes . As I explained the poem has little flow and would be improved by adding some, probably by not making most lines an independent instruction.
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Say what you want to. I worked very hard on this poem.
