Winter Desert
Alliteration16 total reviews
Comment from dragonpoet
Melissa,
This is a wonderful use of personification and alliteration in this two line poem that describes the artwork succinctly. I like the name you chose for this piece. It almost sounds like an oxymoron.
Keep writing and stay healthy
Joan
reply by the author on 23-Nov-2021
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Melissa,
This is a wonderful use of personification and alliteration in this two line poem that describes the artwork succinctly. I like the name you chose for this piece. It almost sounds like an oxymoron.
Keep writing and stay healthy
Joan
Comment Written 21-Nov-2021
reply by the author on 23-Nov-2021
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Thank you very much Joan for your lovely words and comments!!
Melissa
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You are most kindly welcome, Melissa.
Joan
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Thank you very much Joan for your lovely words and comments!!
Melissa
Comment from l.raven
Hi Melissa, very well use of the letter "s"...
can you imagine they to walk on the sand???...you
would sink...with an "s"...
your really writing some awesome poems my sweet friend...
and I love reading them...I wish I had some sixes to give...
******...I love your poem you...and love the picture...soooo very well written...love you...Linda xxoo
reply by the author on 12-Sep-2021
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Hi Melissa, very well use of the letter "s"...
can you imagine they to walk on the sand???...you
would sink...with an "s"...
your really writing some awesome poems my sweet friend...
and I love reading them...I wish I had some sixes to give...
******...I love your poem you...and love the picture...soooo very well written...love you...Linda xxoo
Comment Written 10-Sep-2021
reply by the author on 12-Sep-2021
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Hi Linda. Thank you for your wonderful review. You always encourage me so much!!! I really appreciate your time to comment on this one. I have not written an alliterative piece in a long time and wanted to practice. :). Hugs!
Melissa
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I have so much going on I my life right now...
every time I say...this is it...I'm going to write...something comes up...
still dealing with the mold in my laundry room...they put sheet medal duct in...but now They have to put my furnace, my wash tub, my washing machine, and the floors have to go back in the laundry room...it's crazy...
I hope you are ok and doing well...love to you...big hugs back at you and tons of smiles...Linda xxoo
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Oh, Linda... It all sounds so topsy turvy. I hope it all goes back together smoothly and efficiently!! Hugs, my sweet friend.
Melissa
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it will...I have God on my side...I'm sure he loves hearing me complain...LOL...LOL...many hugs back at you...
and you have a wonderful day...love xoo
Comment from Jasmine Girl
This is a fun tongue twister. I like it. I like how you twist the picture of sand and shadow into this alliterated tongue twister. How did you decide to write this poem? Was it inspired by this picture? It is an amazing piece of art.
Well done.
reply by the author on 12-Sep-2021
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This is a fun tongue twister. I like it. I like how you twist the picture of sand and shadow into this alliterated tongue twister. How did you decide to write this poem? Was it inspired by this picture? It is an amazing piece of art.
Well done.
Comment Written 10-Sep-2021
reply by the author on 12-Sep-2021
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Hi Lisa. Thank you for your wonderful review. You always encourage me so much!!! I really appreciate your time to comment on this one. I have not written an alliterative piece in a long time and wanted to practice. :). Hugs!
Melissa
Comment from lyenochka
How cool to have so many 'sh' words altogether to describe that picture so perfectly. I see the shadow-covered shallow bowl of sand and I like the personification of it shivering!
reply by the author on 10-Sep-2021
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How cool to have so many 'sh' words altogether to describe that picture so perfectly. I see the shadow-covered shallow bowl of sand and I like the personification of it shivering!
Comment Written 10-Sep-2021
reply by the author on 10-Sep-2021
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Thank you Helen. Some of the fellas that have commented have likened it to a tongue twister and they are so so fans of this one. Haha... the gals are ok with it. So fun.. I am enjoying the different forms and I haven't written a solid alliterative verse in a long time. :).
Melissa
Comment from Mary Shifman
I like this very much. I smiled when I read it. It is amazing how cold the desert can be in the shadows. This is very well done and I like the picture, too. It goes well with the poem. I especially enjoyed the alliteration, one doesn't see it used all that much these days. Nice job.
reply by the author on 10-Sep-2021
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I like this very much. I smiled when I read it. It is amazing how cold the desert can be in the shadows. This is very well done and I like the picture, too. It goes well with the poem. I especially enjoyed the alliteration, one doesn't see it used all that much these days. Nice job.
Comment Written 10-Sep-2021
reply by the author on 10-Sep-2021
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Hi Mary. I had fun challenging myself with some alliteration. I haven't written with that form in a long time :). Thank you.
Melissa
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My pleasure, I enjoyed it.
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
I'm loving the alliteration here Melissa and those shifting sands certainly make magical circles and shapes as he sun sets, much enjoyed, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 10-Sep-2021
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I'm loving the alliteration here Melissa and those shifting sands certainly make magical circles and shapes as he sun sets, much enjoyed, love Dolly x
Comment Written 10-Sep-2021
reply by the author on 10-Sep-2021
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Thank you. Glad you liked this one, even though it is a bit heavy with the alliteration!
Melissa
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Not at all, this is delightful x x x
Comment from Jesse James Doty
This most certainly is alliterative! A little heavy on the alliteration, if you ask me. Saying this poem out loud gives the mouth a quiver when it uses the 'sh' sounds too often.
Yet, I get the point that alliteration is fun and appealing to the senses when used in moderation. Thank you for sharing this enjoyable read.
Have a great afternoon,
Jesse
reply by the author on 10-Sep-2021
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This most certainly is alliterative! A little heavy on the alliteration, if you ask me. Saying this poem out loud gives the mouth a quiver when it uses the 'sh' sounds too often.
Yet, I get the point that alliteration is fun and appealing to the senses when used in moderation. Thank you for sharing this enjoyable read.
Have a great afternoon,
Jesse
Comment Written 10-Sep-2021
reply by the author on 10-Sep-2021
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Haha, Jesse, you are the third male who has likened this to a tongue twister... all the gals seem fine with it. LOL. Ok, I get it that it is a bit too much, but it was a fun challenge for myself ;). Thank you.
Melissa
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Hello, Melissa...I see, so all the males, so far, have found it a bit much yet, all the gals are okay with it. I can see why this was fun to do.
I am glad you liked my review, anyway.
Jesse
Comment from judiverse
Great alliteration. Al the "S" sounds add an elegant touch. The imagery in "Shallow Bowls of sifted sand" is excellent. The picture seems to be always shifting from shadows cast on it. You might see how it sounds to you if you omit "the" in the second line. This is really beautiful. judi
reply by the author on 10-Sep-2021
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Great alliteration. Al the "S" sounds add an elegant touch. The imagery in "Shallow Bowls of sifted sand" is excellent. The picture seems to be always shifting from shadows cast on it. You might see how it sounds to you if you omit "the" in the second line. This is really beautiful. judi
Comment Written 10-Sep-2021
reply by the author on 10-Sep-2021
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Thank you very much Judi. So appreciate your comments. I will go over and give it a look and see about omitting that word. :)
Melisa
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You're very welcome. This was lovely. judi
Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose
Winter Desert
by Sugarray77
Excellent alliteration poem. It could be a contemporary haiku. Great desert imagery. The presentation is nice...I like the picture. Well done!
reply by the author on 10-Sep-2021
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Winter Desert
by Sugarray77
Excellent alliteration poem. It could be a contemporary haiku. Great desert imagery. The presentation is nice...I like the picture. Well done!
Comment Written 10-Sep-2021
reply by the author on 10-Sep-2021
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Hey Gypsy. Thank you for your comments. So glad you liked this one.
Melissa
Comment from Seshadri_Sreenivasan
OMG! This is an example of superb alliteration. Very well chosen subject. Very good imagery you create in the minds of the viewers. Thanks for sharing!
reply by the author on 10-Sep-2021
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OMG! This is an example of superb alliteration. Very well chosen subject. Very good imagery you create in the minds of the viewers. Thanks for sharing!
Comment Written 10-Sep-2021
reply by the author on 10-Sep-2021
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Thank you Seshadri. I had fun twisting the words about to see how to make it meaningful ~ appreciate your review.
Melissa
