Comment from Pantygynt

Exceptional

I love this, made up of a splendid choice of words the tactile feeling is described and then exceeded creating an imagery of the sixth sense in the sixth sense in the last three lines.

 Comment Written 10-Sep-2021

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reply by the author on 10-Sep-2021

Sooo glad you liked it, Jim. Thank you!!!!

Melissa

Comment from Katie Mae Dead

Excellent

I like your free verse style Melissa. Your word placing, spacing, subtle internal rhymes
and nice descriptors.
I really love your ending. I think the spaces between words are just as important as the words themselves.
Your imagery is awesome and I felt right there with you.

1 sugg: Start a new stanza on the line "Contentment fills my lungs"

I'm sure Jim would like this.
See you in class.
Katie

 Comment Written 10-Sep-2021

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reply by the author on 10-Sep-2021

Hello Katie. Thank you... yes, I was imagining myself walking along the edge of the foam... so glad you like it!! I took your suggestion and edited it to add the space. Much appreciated!

Melissa

Comment from Chrissy710

Excellent

Hi Melissa I know what you mean i feel like that when I sunbake to stretch out under the suns rays I go to my other place and feel alive and whole
Nice words in your sea poem
Cheers Chris

 Comment Written 10-Sep-2021

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reply by the author on 10-Sep-2021

Hello Chris. Thank you... yes, I was imagining myself walking along the edge of the foam... so glad you like it!!

Melissa

Comment from pookietoo

Excellent

Very nice and very thoughtful. Keep up the great work writing your poetry. Keep smiling always and best wishes to you. Good luck to you. I enjoyed reading this poem

 Comment Written 10-Sep-2021

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reply by the author on 10-Sep-2021

Hello Pookie. Thank you... yes, I was imagining myself walking along the edge of the foam... so glad you like it!!

Melissa

Comment from lyenochka

Excellent

Loved this! I feel like you captured that moment of contentment in being oneself in the whole order of the universe between "warm sand and briny froth." That's such a godly attribute "contentment" and a humble acceptance of being God's creation.
Your placement of repetition ("edge") and rhymes ("bind me, define me,") and alliteration of 's' sounds are artfully done!

 Comment Written 10-Sep-2021

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reply by the author on 10-Sep-2021

Hello Helen and good morning. I am delighted you liked it, my friend. Thank you... yes, I was imagining myself walking along the edge of the foam... so glad you like it!!

Melissa

Comment from Dolly'sPoems

Excellent

Walking along the shore and feeling the wet sand and briny sea between your toes heightens our senses and makes us feel alive and free in your free-write here Melissa, a moment in time to enjoy, love Dolly x

 Comment Written 10-Sep-2021

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reply by the author on 10-Sep-2021

Hello there Dolly. Thank you... yes, I was imagining myself walking along the edge of the foam... so glad you like it!!

Melissa

Comment from June Sargent

Excellent

What a refreshing poem with great imagery! The beach can be so soothing when we feel the sand and frothy, foamy sea. Take me away! Let me break free!

 Comment Written 09-Sep-2021

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reply by the author on 10-Sep-2021

Thank you for a lovely review, June. I was imagining myself walking along the edge of the foam ~ one of my happy places :)

Melissa

Comment from Jasmine Girl

Excellent

I love the emotion hidden in this poem. The way you express happiness is very unique. It makes me think about your lines and wonder its emotional depth.

Well done.

 Comment Written 09-Sep-2021

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reply by the author on 10-Sep-2021

Thank you for a lovely review, Lisa. I was imagining myself walking along the edge of the foam ~ one of my happy places :)

Melissa

Comment from Midi O'Rourke

Excellent

Nicely written - very insightful. It sounds like you are talking about being in the present which is a wonderful place to be considering where you were. Great poem and good artwork.

 Comment Written 09-Sep-2021

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reply by the author on 10-Sep-2021

Thank you for a lovely review, Midi. I was imagining myself walking along the edge of the foam ~ one of my happy places :)

Melissa

Comment from country ranch writer

Excellent

Must be careful of the foam in the water dye to bacteria out breaks and such. You never know who pt is in the water these days, love the water wish I was there to surf fish I miss it so much.

 Comment Written 09-Sep-2021

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reply by the author on 09-Sep-2021

Thank you Barbara. I wish I were there too!! I miss the ocean and the never-ending sound of the waves. :)

Melissa

reply by country ranch writer on 09-Sep-2021

I love the sound too of the waves going in a d out!🦩🦩