ABC say it with ME
An Abecedarian Contest entry9 total reviews
Comment from Mimi Linny
This is a wonderful children's poem with so much good advise wrapped in
up in Abecedarian style. In concert, the rhyme is so much fun for children to learn through. And I love the artwork you've chosen to go write along with the ABC's... Great job!
reply by the author on 27-Sep-2021
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This is a wonderful children's poem with so much good advise wrapped in
up in Abecedarian style. In concert, the rhyme is so much fun for children to learn through. And I love the artwork you've chosen to go write along with the ABC's... Great job!
Comment Written 26-Sep-2021
reply by the author on 27-Sep-2021
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Hi Mimi thank you for your review, Perhaps my poem isa little old fashioned ha ha but I enjoyed having a go
Cheers Chris
Comment from Frances Jean
Truly delightful, colourful and beautifully presented. I loved this poem with all its hidden messages of life and love. Good luck in the competition. Franky
reply by the author on 13-Sep-2021
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Truly delightful, colourful and beautifully presented. I loved this poem with all its hidden messages of life and love. Good luck in the competition. Franky
Comment Written 13-Sep-2021
reply by the author on 13-Sep-2021
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Hi Frances.
Many Thanks for your lovely review and comments it was fun to write and so glad you enjoyed this
Cheers
Comment from Karen Estep
Awesome writing and rhyming, my friend! The bright green color was a little hard to physically read, but I'm old and probably need new glasses! Good luck!
reply by the author on 14-Sep-2021
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Awesome writing and rhyming, my friend! The bright green color was a little hard to physically read, but I'm old and probably need new glasses! Good luck!
Comment Written 13-Sep-2021
reply by the author on 14-Sep-2021
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Hi Karen Thanks for your review yes grren was a little harsh ,sorry a bot late to change it now voting has started hovever I am pleased you liked it despite the eye strain
Cheers Chris
Comment from Gloria ....
Author what fun this is and I really got a charge out of the line, friends should include your sister and brother. lol. So true.
One typo here:
Xylophones make music, therfore (therefore) play some tunes.
A most original entry into this contest. Best of luck with the voters. :))
Gloria
reply by the author on 11-Sep-2021
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Author what fun this is and I really got a charge out of the line, friends should include your sister and brother. lol. So true.
One typo here:
Xylophones make music, therfore (therefore) play some tunes.
A most original entry into this contest. Best of luck with the voters. :))
Gloria
Comment Written 11-Sep-2021
reply by the author on 11-Sep-2021
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Hi Gloria Thanks so much I have fixed the therefore so now I can play mores lol . I didn't want to be too Nannarish (is that a word, it is now, ha ha) with my advice so I hope the children would enjoy this anyway.
Cheers my friend Chris
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
A lesson in manners here in your ABC poem filled with advice for children and the playful scenes of their activity, childhood played such a small part of our life, yet we never forget it, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 11-Sep-2021
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A lesson in manners here in your ABC poem filled with advice for children and the playful scenes of their activity, childhood played such a small part of our life, yet we never forget it, love Dolly x
Comment Written 11-Sep-2021
reply by the author on 11-Sep-2021
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Hi Dolly Thank you for your review much appreciated and yes one is always a child in spirit
Cheers
Comment from giraffmang
Hi there,
I liked this piece very much. There's a lovely rhythm to it and the content is a joy. There are a few little bits & pieces I noted as I read through-
Being polite, make's asking an ease.
- makes shouldn't have the apostrophe here.
Courtesy,good manners,is my advice - should be spaces after both commas.
Polite caring children shows - perhaps insert a comma after Polite.
Umbrella's are handy if you're caught in rains, - umbrellas is just a plural here, so no apostrophe needed.
All the best
GMG
reply by the author on 09-Sep-2021
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Hi there,
I liked this piece very much. There's a lovely rhythm to it and the content is a joy. There are a few little bits & pieces I noted as I read through-
Being polite, make's asking an ease.
- makes shouldn't have the apostrophe here.
Courtesy,good manners,is my advice - should be spaces after both commas.
Polite caring children shows - perhaps insert a comma after Polite.
Umbrella's are handy if you're caught in rains, - umbrellas is just a plural here, so no apostrophe needed.
All the best
GMG
Comment Written 09-Sep-2021
reply by the author on 09-Sep-2021
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Hi GMG Thanks do much for your great review and helpful suggestion I have fixed them all as you advised
Glad you like where I am coming from with this
much appreciated
Cheers
Comment from Nubian Queen Shyt
I like this because I could definitely see myself using this to teach my children about morality and values. And it would be easy to do a letter daily to help commit it to memory. Beautiful job!
reply by the author on 09-Sep-2021
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I like this because I could definitely see myself using this to teach my children about morality and values. And it would be easy to do a letter daily to help commit it to memory. Beautiful job!
Comment Written 09-Sep-2021
reply by the author on 09-Sep-2021
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Hi Nubian Queen Shyt Thank you very much What a nice comment I though rhymes might be a good way to do this
I hope your children learn this way. Many Cheers
Comment from Katie Mae Dead
Excellent job on this admittedly tough prompt!! Great rhyming couplets and a colorful presentation. Your "X" and "E" lines are difficult to read. You might try a darker color.
Nice sayings for children. I like the one about the pets and the xylophones. You have a great mixture of advise covering all areas of life.
Typo in your "W" line with the word writing.
Awesome job and best wishes in the contest!
Katiemae Dead
reply by the author on 09-Sep-2021
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Excellent job on this admittedly tough prompt!! Great rhyming couplets and a colorful presentation. Your "X" and "E" lines are difficult to read. You might try a darker color.
Nice sayings for children. I like the one about the pets and the xylophones. You have a great mixture of advise covering all areas of life.
Typo in your "W" line with the word writing.
Awesome job and best wishes in the contest!
Katiemae Dead
Comment Written 09-Sep-2021
reply by the author on 09-Sep-2021
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Hi Katiemae
Thank you for your positive review for this contest it is quite a challenge and I have made some changes and have taken your advice to fix a few colours.
With Cheers
Comment from Trevor Holden
I appreciate the effort that has gone into this piece and its presentation. but for me, I feel it drifts from its target audience in the beginning (2-5 yo) in trying to teach what is considered good behaviour to by the end targeting (5-10 yo) an older audience with concepts like - 'Umpire with fairness' Valuable lessons' and 'Your childhood is so precious'. So I feel the language and understanding of the target audience needs to be set and maintained throughout. Also for me, the changing of colour of each line is not so easy to read. Thankyou for sharing
reply by the author on 08-Sep-2021
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I appreciate the effort that has gone into this piece and its presentation. but for me, I feel it drifts from its target audience in the beginning (2-5 yo) in trying to teach what is considered good behaviour to by the end targeting (5-10 yo) an older audience with concepts like - 'Umpire with fairness' Valuable lessons' and 'Your childhood is so precious'. So I feel the language and understanding of the target audience needs to be set and maintained throughout. Also for me, the changing of colour of each line is not so easy to read. Thankyou for sharing
Comment Written 08-Sep-2021
reply by the author on 08-Sep-2021
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Ok fair enough didn?t realise their was a children??s age stipulated in the contest rules
