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Songbirds

a contest entry

6 total reviews 
Comment from lyenochka
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Missed this contest entry. I like your "singing birds" ending up as "wake-up call" which makes for a haiku-like satori ending. Good use of alliteration of s-words (singing and sunrise) and onomatopoeia (chirping).

 Comment Written 13-Sep-2021

reply by the author on 15-Sep-2021
    Helen,

    I am very grateful for your detailed review and comments; your kindness and support mean a lot.

    Hugs...Portia
Comment from Kit Nongkhlaw
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I am happy that I live on the fringe of the city where I could still hear the chirping of birds early in the morning. All the very best for your contest in nature, Kit.

 Comment Written 12-Sep-2021

reply by the author on 15-Sep-2021
    Kit,

    Thanks so much for your review and best wishes; they are greatly appreciated.

    Blessings...Portia
reply by Kit Nongkhlaw on 16-Sep-2021
    You are welcome
Comment from Patty Palmer
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A cute entry for this contest. The chirping birds are surely a pleasant wake up call. The picture of them lined up for chirping is adorable. Can't you just hear them? I've not been around much lately eotherOO==

 Comment Written 11-Sep-2021

reply by the author on 15-Sep-2021
    Patty,

    Please forgive me for my delay in responding. My husband has been in the hospital; I am going through my health issues, but I trust God. I am also behind in my message box. I know I have missed a lot of your work. I need to get caught up on the wedding.
    Thanks so much for your review and comments; they are greatly appreciated.

    Hugs...Portia
Comment from l.raven
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this reminds me of when I lived with my grandmother...
she had a tree outside my bedroom window...every morning I would wake to birds sitting in the trees and singing their little hearts out...

I love your poem...and this picture is precious...priceless...very nicely written...love Linda xxoo

 Comment Written 08-Sep-2021

reply by the author on 09-Sep-2021
    Thanks so much for your review and very kind comments.

    Blessings...
reply by l.raven on 09-Sep-2021
    your so very welcome...love xxoo
Comment from LisaMay
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Oh look at those little darling birdies singing in four-part harmony. The dawn chorus is always lovely to hear and your poem reminded me of this. being under lockdown has stopped the traffic and now we can enjoy the birdsong.

 Comment Written 08-Sep-2021

reply by the author on 08-Sep-2021
    LisaMay,

    Thanks for your review, rating, and comments.

    Blessings...
Comment from Leximonee
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I Love that this was a piece that was connecting to nature but it can also be adapted into human life. The sun is rising, this is a wake up call and the start of our day. These 3-5-3 poems are truly warm ups that connect your mind to take juxtaposed things and make them correlate I would love to see a free form poem writing from this 3-5-3

 Comment Written 07-Sep-2021

reply by the author on 08-Sep-2021
    Leximonee.

    Thanks for your review, rating, and comments.

    Blessings...