Astatula Twinkle
Who Shot Sheriff Daniels13 total reviews
Comment from Elizabeth Emerald
Intense interactions ring true--Good character development with Cody!
"Should have known. And you came alone," the [petit=>PETITE] brunette
"Still got your own warped, unique, humor after all these years since we graduated [SUGG OMIT together--sounds forced into the conversation] from Astatula High.
Fond memories of another time flashed [thtough=>THROUGH] her mind.
reply by the author on 10-Sep-2021
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Intense interactions ring true--Good character development with Cody!
"Should have known. And you came alone," the [petit=>PETITE] brunette
"Still got your own warped, unique, humor after all these years since we graduated [SUGG OMIT together--sounds forced into the conversation] from Astatula High.
Fond memories of another time flashed [thtough=>THROUGH] her mind.
Comment Written 08-Sep-2021
reply by the author on 10-Sep-2021
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Appreciate the review and catches.
Comment from dellsworthpoet
An interesting scene.
There is a lot of foreshadowing here. The flow is good. The dialogue seems natural. The narrative moves at a good pace.
A good read. Thanks for sharing.
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reply by the author on 10-Sep-2021
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An interesting scene.
There is a lot of foreshadowing here. The flow is good. The dialogue seems natural. The narrative moves at a good pace.
A good read. Thanks for sharing.
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Comment Written 07-Sep-2021
reply by the author on 10-Sep-2021
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Appreciate your insights and the review.
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You are welcome.
Comment from lancellot
Interesting. I guess this a part of a larger story for you.
notes:
The nurse paused, then began, "There are many of us who believed you were innocent..."
-Why would the nurse say this, after asking where Cody had been for the last five years.
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reply by the author on 10-Sep-2021
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Interesting. I guess this a part of a larger story for you.
notes:
The nurse paused, then began, "There are many of us who believed you were innocent..."
-Why would the nurse say this, after asking where Cody had been for the last five years.
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Comment Written 07-Sep-2021
reply by the author on 10-Sep-2021
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Appreciate your insights and the review.
