Astatula Twinkle
Who Shot Sheriff Daniels13 total reviews
Comment from Liz O'Neill
You have great strength in your character development through gestures and appearances. This sets the plot well: "Cody believed the answers could be found tied somewhere to his past." A subplot: "I know you well. You're going to wind up in big trouble again, Cody," We get even more of a picture of Cody: ""You're no Ordinary Joe, and that's what I'm afraid of. You've got a fire in you and you'll die if you have to."
reply by the author on 13-Jun-2022
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You have great strength in your character development through gestures and appearances. This sets the plot well: "Cody believed the answers could be found tied somewhere to his past." A subplot: "I know you well. You're going to wind up in big trouble again, Cody," We get even more of a picture of Cody: ""You're no Ordinary Joe, and that's what I'm afraid of. You've got a fire in you and you'll die if you have to."
Comment Written 09-Jun-2022
reply by the author on 13-Jun-2022
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Thanks.
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Well done
Comment from SHABAMO
I think you've built an exceptional world and do an excellent job of explaining it in this!
I would say there seem to be an almost distracting number of descriptors, so maybe turn those down a bit, but all in all a fun read!
reply by the author on 23-Sep-2021
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I think you've built an exceptional world and do an excellent job of explaining it in this!
I would say there seem to be an almost distracting number of descriptors, so maybe turn those down a bit, but all in all a fun read!
Comment Written 11-Sep-2021
reply by the author on 23-Sep-2021
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Glad you enjoyed this chapter. Appreciate the review.
Comment from BethShelby
I wondered what happened with this story, I don't remember that Cody was in prison. Most of what I remember was stories the sheriff was relating to the boy, Cody. Cody had driven back into town after having been away but most of the story after that was about the cases his adopted dad was relating. This is interesing and I'd like to read more about Cody.
reply by the author on 10-Sep-2021
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I wondered what happened with this story, I don't remember that Cody was in prison. Most of what I remember was stories the sheriff was relating to the boy, Cody. Cody had driven back into town after having been away but most of the story after that was about the cases his adopted dad was relating. This is interesing and I'd like to read more about Cody.
Comment Written 09-Sep-2021
reply by the author on 10-Sep-2021
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This was a draft of some ideas. Perhaps surprisingly, the review response has been in favor of continuing Cody's story. So, perhaps I will?
Comment from Mary Shifman
Well, I certainly hope that there's going to be more. This is so well written, and mysterious with an underlying sense of dread of what might be coming. I want to know what happens. So please, please!
reply by the author on 10-Sep-2021
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Well, I certainly hope that there's going to be more. This is so well written, and mysterious with an underlying sense of dread of what might be coming. I want to know what happens. So please, please!
Comment Written 08-Sep-2021
reply by the author on 10-Sep-2021
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Appreciate your support. Glad you enjoyed this posting. Also appreciate the review.
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You are quite welcome.
Comment from Ric Myworld
Wee doggie! as Jed Clampett would have said, this here's some mighty fine writing. The flow of your sentences combined with your massive vocabulary create an "Over hill, over dale / Thorough bush, thorough briar . . ." voyage that picks up on all the flowers and landscape without forgetting about the weeds. A Shakespearian "Mid Summer's Night Dream." LOL. Thanks for sharing another fine post!
reply by the author on 10-Sep-2021
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Wee doggie! as Jed Clampett would have said, this here's some mighty fine writing. The flow of your sentences combined with your massive vocabulary create an "Over hill, over dale / Thorough bush, thorough briar . . ." voyage that picks up on all the flowers and landscape without forgetting about the weeds. A Shakespearian "Mid Summer's Night Dream." LOL. Thanks for sharing another fine post!
Comment Written 08-Sep-2021
reply by the author on 10-Sep-2021
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Like the Beverly Hillbillies review. You never cease to amaze me with your reviews.
Comment from Judy Lawless
I'm not sure if I finished reading all of your previous stories about Cody and Sheriff Daniels, I like what you've written here, Brett. Your imagery is stupendous and you've developed the characters through strong dialogue. Well done. I would read more.
reply by the author on 10-Sep-2021
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I'm not sure if I finished reading all of your previous stories about Cody and Sheriff Daniels, I like what you've written here, Brett. Your imagery is stupendous and you've developed the characters through strong dialogue. Well done. I would read more.
Comment Written 08-Sep-2021
reply by the author on 10-Sep-2021
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Glad you enjoyed this posting. Appreciate your supportive input.
Comment from barbara.wilkey
I need to know who shot the sheriff. I like Cody. He's a great character. I sure hope you decide to develop this into a novel. I promise to follow.
You're going to wind up in big trouble again Cody," Ronnie stated. (comma needed after again, because you're addressing Cody.)
He sat down in a chair that stood in the corner of the quaint room and watched the nurse leave. (you can omit 'down' it's extra and not needed)
reply by the author on 10-Sep-2021
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I need to know who shot the sheriff. I like Cody. He's a great character. I sure hope you decide to develop this into a novel. I promise to follow.
You're going to wind up in big trouble again Cody," Ronnie stated. (comma needed after again, because you're addressing Cody.)
He sat down in a chair that stood in the corner of the quaint room and watched the nurse leave. (you can omit 'down' it's extra and not needed)
Comment Written 08-Sep-2021
reply by the author on 10-Sep-2021
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Appreciate the catches and the supportive review.
Comment from nancy_e_davis
Why not, Brett? I enjoyed your story about Cody and the Sheriff before. I was fond of them. I would probably follow it to the end. I lost out on the story the last time. Don't know what happened. I probably became ill. I always try to stick with a story. Write on. Nancy:)
reply by the author on 10-Sep-2021
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Why not, Brett? I enjoyed your story about Cody and the Sheriff before. I was fond of them. I would probably follow it to the end. I lost out on the story the last time. Don't know what happened. I probably became ill. I always try to stick with a story. Write on. Nancy:)
Comment Written 08-Sep-2021
reply by the author on 10-Sep-2021
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Appreciate your supportive input and the review.
Comment from royowen
Cody is justifiably anger, and no wonder his beloved adoptive father Sherrif Daniels was suffering and it looks like someone has tried to kill him, or at least beat him to within an inch of his life. So I think Cody would like revenge like nothing else, well done Brett, blessings Roy
reply by the author on 10-Sep-2021
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Cody is justifiably anger, and no wonder his beloved adoptive father Sherrif Daniels was suffering and it looks like someone has tried to kill him, or at least beat him to within an inch of his life. So I think Cody would like revenge like nothing else, well done Brett, blessings Roy
Comment Written 08-Sep-2021
reply by the author on 10-Sep-2021
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Glad you enjoyed this posting. Appreciate the input and the review.
Comment from Pearl Edwards
It seems like there may be quite a lot of this story to pursue if you decide to go on with it. I enjoyed this scene between Cody and Nurse Ronnie at Sherriff Daniel's hospital bed.
cheers,
valda
reply by the author on 10-Sep-2021
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It seems like there may be quite a lot of this story to pursue if you decide to go on with it. I enjoyed this scene between Cody and Nurse Ronnie at Sherriff Daniel's hospital bed.
cheers,
valda
Comment Written 08-Sep-2021
reply by the author on 10-Sep-2021
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Appreciate the review and your insights.
