The Path Not Taken
Sometimes reunions are beginnnings31 total reviews
Comment from Jeff Watkins
I have but five stars to give you, but this story deserves ten times five. The metaphors of cave and fall meld brilliantly to create the passage of time and aging of the narrator/character. The tension or uncertainty combined with longing are palpable. Your sentence structure and word choice are superb. The conclusion warms my heart.
If romance fiction writers were all as good as you, my library would be stocked with their work.
I taught expository writing and literature, but I am a mediocre writer. I did not attempt to write fiction until recently. However, I know rare, outstanding writing when I see it; I see it here.
reply by the author on 11-Sep-2021
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I have but five stars to give you, but this story deserves ten times five. The metaphors of cave and fall meld brilliantly to create the passage of time and aging of the narrator/character. The tension or uncertainty combined with longing are palpable. Your sentence structure and word choice are superb. The conclusion warms my heart.
If romance fiction writers were all as good as you, my library would be stocked with their work.
I taught expository writing and literature, but I am a mediocre writer. I did not attempt to write fiction until recently. However, I know rare, outstanding writing when I see it; I see it here.
Comment Written 11-Sep-2021
reply by the author on 11-Sep-2021
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Thank you so much for your kind words. I appreciate your comments especially given your expertise. I will value any comments or advice you may have on anything you have time to read.
Comment from Pam (respa)
-Very nice image
and story to go with it.
-You definitely give a sense
of what autumn means to you
by using this relationship and
memories of it.
-The imagery is vivid and
creates a very good word
picture that allows us to
experience this with you.
-Even though it is fictional,
you make us believe it is real,
and for someone, it probably is.
-I really enjoyed the story and
the ending you created, too.
-Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 11-Sep-2021
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-Very nice image
and story to go with it.
-You definitely give a sense
of what autumn means to you
by using this relationship and
memories of it.
-The imagery is vivid and
creates a very good word
picture that allows us to
experience this with you.
-Even though it is fictional,
you make us believe it is real,
and for someone, it probably is.
-I really enjoyed the story and
the ending you created, too.
-Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 11-Sep-2021
reply by the author on 11-Sep-2021
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Thank you for your very kind words.
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You are very welcome. It is a very good story.
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:-)
Comment from RPSaxena
Hello Nancy V. Forrest,
Nice piece of Romance Fiction meeting the desired norms, having lucid as well as perfectly matching the theme phraseology, and beautifully treading through the path covered with Autumn's different colors to the desired destination - the lover's lovely kiss!
BEST OF LUCK in the contest.
reply by the author on 11-Sep-2021
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Hello Nancy V. Forrest,
Nice piece of Romance Fiction meeting the desired norms, having lucid as well as perfectly matching the theme phraseology, and beautifully treading through the path covered with Autumn's different colors to the desired destination - the lover's lovely kiss!
BEST OF LUCK in the contest.
Comment Written 11-Sep-2021
reply by the author on 11-Sep-2021
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Thank you so much.
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Hi Friend,Most Welcome!
With best wishes,
~ RP
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Comment from Gloria ....
This is a heartwarming story, with a slow build up that increases interest as the plot advances. I liked this very much, and was looking for a little more on the final resolution.
One nit in the subtitle: Sometimes reunions are beginnnings (beginnings)
Nicely done.:))
Gloria
reply by the author on 11-Sep-2021
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This is a heartwarming story, with a slow build up that increases interest as the plot advances. I liked this very much, and was looking for a little more on the final resolution.
One nit in the subtitle: Sometimes reunions are beginnnings (beginnings)
Nicely done.:))
Gloria
Comment Written 11-Sep-2021
reply by the author on 11-Sep-2021
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Thanks. I would have liked to slaborate on the ending, but 300 words is 300 words. Thanks, especially, for the typo note!
Comment from blondie560
This is a good story for the contest theme. Not only do you vividly describe the autumn scenery, but the metaphors of the "autumn" of life as well. Good luck in the contest!
reply by the author on 11-Sep-2021
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This is a good story for the contest theme. Not only do you vividly describe the autumn scenery, but the metaphors of the "autumn" of life as well. Good luck in the contest!
Comment Written 11-Sep-2021
reply by the author on 11-Sep-2021
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Thank you.
Comment from Giddy Nielsen-Sweep
Ooh, what a lovely ending to this romantic tale. A most enjoyable little story which really is a cheer up for readers, I enjoyed it a lot, especially, your autumn descriptions are beautiful, Giddy
reply by the author on 11-Sep-2021
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Ooh, what a lovely ending to this romantic tale. A most enjoyable little story which really is a cheer up for readers, I enjoyed it a lot, especially, your autumn descriptions are beautiful, Giddy
Comment Written 11-Sep-2021
reply by the author on 11-Sep-2021
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Thank you so much.
Comment from Nubian Queen Shyt
I liked how you intertwined the writing prompt with your topic. It made it feel all that more real though this may still be fiction. It was a story with great detail that places the reader in the moment. I feel you executed that quite well!
reply by the author on 11-Sep-2021
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I liked how you intertwined the writing prompt with your topic. It made it feel all that more real though this may still be fiction. It was a story with great detail that places the reader in the moment. I feel you executed that quite well!
Comment Written 11-Sep-2021
reply by the author on 11-Sep-2021
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Thank you. It is fiction--although he was real once.
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I could tell that somehow. Great job!
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:-)
Comment from C. Gale Burnett
Your first paragraph brought me directly into the sounds and colors of Autumn. I enjoyed the story of the 20 year reunion between old flames. I felt coming, and was not disappointed, you would mention the autumn of your years.
One of my favorite sentences was, 'The lithe eighteen year old had long ago changed, accepted the burdens and scars of life.'
Nice ending :)
reply by the author on 10-Sep-2021
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Your first paragraph brought me directly into the sounds and colors of Autumn. I enjoyed the story of the 20 year reunion between old flames. I felt coming, and was not disappointed, you would mention the autumn of your years.
One of my favorite sentences was, 'The lithe eighteen year old had long ago changed, accepted the burdens and scars of life.'
Nice ending :)
Comment Written 10-Sep-2021
reply by the author on 10-Sep-2021
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Thank you for the thoughtful review.
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You are so welcome.
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:-)
Comment from mermaids
I enjoyed reading your story and there is definitely an Autumn feel in your words. Excellent use of descriptive words that creates a clear scene and feelings come forth as the two people reunite.
reply by the author on 10-Sep-2021
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I enjoyed reading your story and there is definitely an Autumn feel in your words. Excellent use of descriptive words that creates a clear scene and feelings come forth as the two people reunite.
Comment Written 10-Sep-2021
reply by the author on 10-Sep-2021
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Thank you
Comment from nomi338
A very beautiful and romantic telling of a reunion of one's past. As I have been happily married for 48 years, i fear that if I were to reunite with one of my old loves, we would probably be horrified by the changes we would have gone through over some near 50 years of life.
reply by the author on 10-Sep-2021
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A very beautiful and romantic telling of a reunion of one's past. As I have been happily married for 48 years, i fear that if I were to reunite with one of my old loves, we would probably be horrified by the changes we would have gone through over some near 50 years of life.
Comment Written 10-Sep-2021
reply by the author on 10-Sep-2021
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Thank you. I suspect we are of an age, and it was a true piece of fiction.
