Shape Shifter
Viewing comments for Chapter 11 "Shape Shifter Part Eleven"A Detective John Dutton Novellette
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Comment from Liz O'Neill
And sadly, none of his victims will have learned that: "Figuring out when someone is turning dangerous ought to be the first thing you do," Dutton stated. He struggled to comprehend why none of Adler's victims seemed to grasp that concept." I like the relationship developing between Dutton and Ballister. This will draw the reader in to eaves drop.
reply by the author on 27-Apr-2022
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And sadly, none of his victims will have learned that: "Figuring out when someone is turning dangerous ought to be the first thing you do," Dutton stated. He struggled to comprehend why none of Adler's victims seemed to grasp that concept." I like the relationship developing between Dutton and Ballister. This will draw the reader in to eaves drop.
Comment Written 19-Apr-2022
reply by the author on 27-Apr-2022
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Awesome review. Much appreciated.
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***smile***
Comment from BethShelby
It seems Adler is leaving these clues delibertlly in order to get Dutton in a position to where he might be able to kill him. I figure Dutton is going to be too smart to let that happen but I'm getting a bit anxious. I'm looking forward to more.
reply by the author on 23-Sep-2021
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It seems Adler is leaving these clues delibertlly in order to get Dutton in a position to where he might be able to kill him. I figure Dutton is going to be too smart to let that happen but I'm getting a bit anxious. I'm looking forward to more.
Comment Written 10-Sep-2021
reply by the author on 23-Sep-2021
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Appreciate your insights, comments, and the review.
Comment from Judy Lawless
I like the way you are introducing a little bit of possible new evidence, and sharing the thoughts of Dutton and Ballister with this conversation between them. We'll have to wait to see if they are right about Adler. A good read, and excellent writing, Brett.
reply by the author on 23-Sep-2021
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I like the way you are introducing a little bit of possible new evidence, and sharing the thoughts of Dutton and Ballister with this conversation between them. We'll have to wait to see if they are right about Adler. A good read, and excellent writing, Brett.
Comment Written 10-Sep-2021
reply by the author on 23-Sep-2021
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Glad you enjoyed this part. Appreciate your insights and the review.
Comment from country ranch writer
Looking forward tot you writing the next chapter to find out if he gets caught or not in his hate by getting sloppy in leaving clues for them to follow.
reply by the author on 10-Sep-2021
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Looking forward tot you writing the next chapter to find out if he gets caught or not in his hate by getting sloppy in leaving clues for them to follow.
Comment Written 10-Sep-2021
reply by the author on 10-Sep-2021
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Glad you enjoyed this portion of the story. Appreciate the review.
Comment from Ric Myworld
I'd give anything to have a multidimensional vocabulary like yours. Not just traditional words, but accents of seldom used slangs, which by the way, would suit my limited stock well. I only wish your posts didn't always come late in the week, so I could reward them properly with a chartreuse plus sign that I never have by now. Thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 10-Sep-2021
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I'd give anything to have a multidimensional vocabulary like yours. Not just traditional words, but accents of seldom used slangs, which by the way, would suit my limited stock well. I only wish your posts didn't always come late in the week, so I could reward them properly with a chartreuse plus sign that I never have by now. Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 10-Sep-2021
reply by the author on 10-Sep-2021
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You are too kind, but really appreciate all the support.
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Thanks to you, and the curiosity you ignited about the Seal of Approval, or whatever it's called. I read up on it a bit to learn that a short story needs to be 2000 words, which mine isn't. But I don't guess it would take long to expand it forty words. But then, if they turn me down, I'd be disappointed. :-) LOL. Thanks for the heads up!
Comment from barbara.wilkey
Again, I am sorry I don't have a six left. I hope somebody does and places it on this post. It is six worthy. Thank you for sharing. I really like this story.
Ten o ' clock am without his morning java left Dutton in a scowl. (a suggestion, I don't think you need 'am' I think 'his morning java' is enough to let the reader know it's morning, my writing reference book says either A.M. it prefers or a.m. as a second choice.)
Cucumber cool, Dutton pocketed a bauble and said, "Never in a hundred thousand (I don't think you need 'and said" I think you can put a period after 'bauble and call it quits.)
. Bagging the weapon, he handed it to his assistant for safekeeping and asked, "Did Adler intend for us to find this so conveniently?" (Again, I would put a period after safekeeping and go straight into the dialogue)
reply by the author on 10-Sep-2021
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Again, I am sorry I don't have a six left. I hope somebody does and places it on this post. It is six worthy. Thank you for sharing. I really like this story.
Ten o ' clock am without his morning java left Dutton in a scowl. (a suggestion, I don't think you need 'am' I think 'his morning java' is enough to let the reader know it's morning, my writing reference book says either A.M. it prefers or a.m. as a second choice.)
Cucumber cool, Dutton pocketed a bauble and said, "Never in a hundred thousand (I don't think you need 'and said" I think you can put a period after 'bauble and call it quits.)
. Bagging the weapon, he handed it to his assistant for safekeeping and asked, "Did Adler intend for us to find this so conveniently?" (Again, I would put a period after safekeeping and go straight into the dialogue)
Comment Written 10-Sep-2021
reply by the author on 10-Sep-2021
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Appreciate your insights and thoughtful review.
Comment from Jasmine Girl
I enjoy reading your book. It's good that they found the knife that killed the victim, Sondra Schmidt. I agree that it is too easy. I'm looking forward to most plot twists.
Well done.
reply by the author on 10-Sep-2021
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I enjoy reading your book. It's good that they found the knife that killed the victim, Sondra Schmidt. I agree that it is too easy. I'm looking forward to most plot twists.
Well done.
Comment Written 10-Sep-2021
reply by the author on 10-Sep-2021
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Glad you enjoyed this part of the story. Appreciate the review.
Comment from Trevor Holden
I enjoyed this installment for your novelette very much, there is interesting narration and nice character development and the storyline beckons you to read on. It is for the main part easily followable although a very minor point for me was that I did not understand what the bauble was or the significance of it in the story. But everything else was explained and developed beautifully..
thank you for sharing Brett
reply by the author on 10-Sep-2021
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I enjoyed this installment for your novelette very much, there is interesting narration and nice character development and the storyline beckons you to read on. It is for the main part easily followable although a very minor point for me was that I did not understand what the bauble was or the significance of it in the story. But everything else was explained and developed beautifully..
thank you for sharing Brett
Comment Written 10-Sep-2021
reply by the author on 10-Sep-2021
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Glad you enjoyed this portion of the story. Appreciate the review.
Comment from lancellot
This is well written. Your crime mystery is moving along.
His expectations not high, Dutton discovered a hard object underneath the dipsty dumpster. He reached over and retrieved a serrated knife with a heavy handle. Darkness stained the blade.
-Very fortunate occurrence.
reply by the author on 10-Sep-2021
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This is well written. Your crime mystery is moving along.
His expectations not high, Dutton discovered a hard object underneath the dipsty dumpster. He reached over and retrieved a serrated knife with a heavy handle. Darkness stained the blade.
-Very fortunate occurrence.
Comment Written 10-Sep-2021
reply by the author on 10-Sep-2021
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Glad you enjoyed this part of the story. Appreciate the review.
