The waterfall
haiku and 5-7-528 total reviews
Comment from Janice Canerdy
These are very expressive, descriptive pieces that make excellent use of all syllables, conveying an appealing message about the full effects of the waterfall on the observer.
reply by the author on 06-Sep-2021
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These are very expressive, descriptive pieces that make excellent use of all syllables, conveying an appealing message about the full effects of the waterfall on the observer.
Comment Written 01-Sep-2021
reply by the author on 06-Sep-2021
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Thank you very much .
Comment from Joanne Gill-Maddick
This is a beautifully written haiku and 5-7-5. Beautiful peaceful looking photo of the waterfall compliments your words well. Lovely overall presentation.
reply by the author on 06-Sep-2021
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This is a beautifully written haiku and 5-7-5. Beautiful peaceful looking photo of the waterfall compliments your words well. Lovely overall presentation.
Comment Written 01-Sep-2021
reply by the author on 06-Sep-2021
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Thank you very much.
Comment from Seshadri_Sreenivasan
Reading this wonderfully penned poem with a lovely painting accompanying it, I can see that you are from the "God's Own land'.:):) What more can I say! Same subject. Two different views!
reply by the author on 06-Sep-2021
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Reading this wonderfully penned poem with a lovely painting accompanying it, I can see that you are from the "God's Own land'.:):) What more can I say! Same subject. Two different views!
Comment Written 01-Sep-2021
reply by the author on 06-Sep-2021
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Thank you very much for dropping in and reviewing. I am sorry my reply is a bit late..
Comment from Tarekwrites
Really good! Ties nature to feeling very well. The two poems are the same but different which is nice. The first poem last line only has three syllables which kinda throws it off from being a haiku
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reply by the author on 06-Sep-2021
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Really good! Ties nature to feeling very well. The two poems are the same but different which is nice. The first poem last line only has three syllables which kinda throws it off from being a haiku
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Comment Written 01-Sep-2021
reply by the author on 06-Sep-2021
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Thank you very much.the last line has 4 syllables. Deviation was allowed. I thought 'soothes' would be better than 'pacify'.
Comment from Alcreator Litt Dear
This Haiku speaks the thunderous sound of waterfalls shuts down your thoughts, though downfall of water upon stony surface is mystic that soothes you (******); well said, well done; thanks for sharing this. ALCREATOR 01092021 WL Day
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This Haiku speaks the thunderous sound of waterfalls shuts down your thoughts, though downfall of water upon stony surface is mystic that soothes you (******); well said, well done; thanks for sharing this. ALCREATOR 01092021 WL Day
Comment Written 01-Sep-2021
reply by the author on 06-Sep-2021
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Thank you very much for these lovely stars.
Comment from royowen
Water has always had a propensity to minister a peaceful aura, and you've certainly deftly formed a most deftly and skilfully kept this post beautifully written, well done, Sanku, blessings Roy
reply by the author on 06-Sep-2021
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Water has always had a propensity to minister a peaceful aura, and you've certainly deftly formed a most deftly and skilfully kept this post beautifully written, well done, Sanku, blessings Roy
Comment Written 01-Sep-2021
reply by the author on 06-Sep-2021
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Thank you very much for your lovely remarks.
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Most welcome
Comment from Pam (respa)
-Very nice artwork
and presentation, Sanku.
-An interesting prompt
for the club and you did
a good job with both.
-Effective nature and
seasonal imagery in the haiku
and a good concluding line.
(It soothes me) You have Its.
-You also have a very good
5-7-5 with effective imagery
comparing the sound of water
to those in our thoughts.
-A good concluding line, too.
-Good job on both poems!!
reply by the author on 06-Sep-2021
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-Very nice artwork
and presentation, Sanku.
-An interesting prompt
for the club and you did
a good job with both.
-Effective nature and
seasonal imagery in the haiku
and a good concluding line.
(It soothes me) You have Its.
-You also have a very good
5-7-5 with effective imagery
comparing the sound of water
to those in our thoughts.
-A good concluding line, too.
-Good job on both poems!!
Comment Written 01-Sep-2021
reply by the author on 06-Sep-2021
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thank you very much .I preferred 'soothes' to 'pacifies' though the latter would make the last line five syllables.I am happy you liked the word.What is your opinion?
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You are welcome. I think it is good the way you have it. You can have 5 syllables, but I wouldn't change it.
Comment from Mary Shifman
This is a beautiful poem and the picture is perfect for it. There is something life-affirming about a waterfall, especially the larger ones with swiftly flowing water. They are so full of energy, one can't help but absorb a bit of it. Nicely done.
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This is a beautiful poem and the picture is perfect for it. There is something life-affirming about a waterfall, especially the larger ones with swiftly flowing water. They are so full of energy, one can't help but absorb a bit of it. Nicely done.
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Comment Written 01-Sep-2021
reply by the author on 06-Sep-2021
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thank you very much for dropping in and reviewing .I know their energy is simply awe inspiring.
