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My Specter, My Shadow

Defeating negative emotions requires acknowledging them.

16 total reviews 
Comment from giraffmang
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Hi there,

This saddened me a little. it deserves to be a much longer piece. i think there's a whole idea here to be exploited and built upon.

As a story in its own write it lacks something. It doesn't go anywhere. You have a great premise though and I would urge you to develop something from this.

All the best
GMG

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 Comment Written 04-Sep-2021


reply by the author on 04-Sep-2021
    Hi thank you for your feedback. Ultimately I was constrained by the word limit. I will consider fleshing it out into a longer piece.

    Sorry you didn?t think it went anywhere it was supposed to show I?m my own worst enemy; but that I also know that and won?t give in to the evil inside.
Comment from Midi O'Rourke
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Oh, very good and very true. We all have "monsters." Monstrous thoughts, deeds and, of course, the seven deadly sins. This is a very creative horror story. I like your description: this monster, translucent and yet disgustingly full of filth and evil. The hate, self-deprecation, jealousy, and vice are physically manifest in this specter of my past.

Scary. Keep it up!

 Comment Written 03-Sep-2021


reply by the author on 03-Sep-2021
    Thank you!
Comment from royowen
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This is a very convincing short story about a haunting by an unwelcome and familiar spirit, but more than that, a great entry in this contest. An excellent post that would make a great story around a campfire or a darkened room. Beautifully written, blessings Roy

 Comment Written 03-Sep-2021


reply by the author on 03-Sep-2021
    Thanks Roy!
reply by royowen on 03-Sep-2021
    Most welcome
Comment from Bill Schott
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This horror story, My Spector, My Shadow, is one that takes on the formatting of a memoir which brings the idea of our haunting past as the scary ghost to be feared.

 Comment Written 03-Sep-2021


reply by the author on 03-Sep-2021
    You nailed it. Thanks!
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
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Although this is a work of fiction, it has a ring of truth to it and it is indeed terrifying as fact is often more terrifying than fiction and we all have an evil streak in us, love Dolly x

 Comment Written 01-Sep-2021


reply by the author on 02-Sep-2021
    Thanks! It?s honestly more truth than fiction.
Comment from J.R. Michael
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A thought provoking piece to be sure. The reveal that the ghost is in the mirror was well written. The way you laid the story left the reader with their own haunting. Well done.

 Comment Written 01-Sep-2021


reply by the author on 02-Sep-2021
    Thank you much!
Comment from karenina
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A most personal and emotional outpouring here. Anyone who has suffered from depression or lack of self esteem will feel this familiar horror and recognize that familiar "ghost." It's impossible to outrun ourselves. I like the unique theme for this "horror" story contest. Sometimes we have to stop looking for monsters UNDER the bed and take stock of the one living inside of us.

Karenina

 Comment Written 01-Sep-2021


reply by the author on 01-Sep-2021
    Thanks for the feedback!
reply by karenina on 01-Sep-2021
    Hope you win, whoever you are!

    Karenina
Comment from Liz O'Neill
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If you've actually had experiences, I have more I could say on the subject. If not, you certainly have created a strong setting to support the plot. Overall, you will draw the reader in with the creepy tone and mood. Well done.

 Comment Written 01-Sep-2021


reply by the author on 01-Sep-2021
    Thank you very much :)
Comment from Elizabeth Emerald
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Brilliant take on the monster within theme--ingenious to render it in the form of a horror story--devious twist is a stunner. Title is spot on for the theme--a fine entry for the contest!

 Comment Written 31-Aug-2021


reply by the author on 31-Aug-2021
    Thank you for the kind feedback Elizabeth!
Comment from amahra
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Well, I seem to have discovered you as you have discovered me. Your writing is quite haunting and as terrifying as the ghost in your character's dreams. It had an element of everything most people have experienced. It reminded me of The Twilight Zone.

 Comment Written 31-Aug-2021


reply by the author on 31-Aug-2021
    Thank you for your kind feedback. It was meant to be universal, I am glad it was!