Saving others may save oneself
I overcome depression by trying to help others21 total reviews
Comment from Mia Twysted
I love your last line "Helping is healing." There is so much truth to that statement. If people would only think the same the world would be a better place.
reply by the author on 02-Sep-2021
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I love your last line "Helping is healing." There is so much truth to that statement. If people would only think the same the world would be a better place.
Comment Written 02-Sep-2021
reply by the author on 02-Sep-2021
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Thank you for the kind feedback and 6 stars
Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose
Interesting entry for the Haiku contest. It's not a haiku but it's not your fault, the contest doesn't give the right instructions or definition. Good syllables count. You have grammatical problems...
Waking up (despaired,)
Getting up to fix the world,
Helping is healing
What I mean..
waking up desperate
and ready to fix the world--
helping is healing
Good luck in the contest.
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reply by the author on 02-Sep-2021
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Interesting entry for the Haiku contest. It's not a haiku but it's not your fault, the contest doesn't give the right instructions or definition. Good syllables count. You have grammatical problems...
Waking up (despaired,)
Getting up to fix the world,
Helping is healing
What I mean..
waking up desperate
and ready to fix the world--
helping is healing
Good luck in the contest.
This rating does not count towards story rating or author rank.
The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 02-Sep-2021
reply by the author on 02-Sep-2021
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Thank you for the feedback.
I waived some grammar rules so I could keep a rhyme scheme.
I know some folks view haikus as having to deal with nature in the traditional Japanese sense and I respect that, it was just never taught to me as a hard and fast requirement. Cheers!
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Haiku don't rhyme
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Congratulations on winning the contest. Your poem is a fine 5/7/5 but not a haiku. You followed the rules of the contest so it's not your fault. You used some powerful wording. Cheers
Comment from Bill Schott
This haiku, Saving Others May Save Oneself, presented with a 5-7-5 formatting, brings the message that helping others helps us. Doing good does us good as well.
reply by the author on 02-Sep-2021
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This haiku, Saving Others May Save Oneself, presented with a 5-7-5 formatting, brings the message that helping others helps us. Doing good does us good as well.
Comment Written 01-Sep-2021
reply by the author on 02-Sep-2021
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Thank you kindly
Comment from tempeste
Ciao mystery poet, you now have 3 votes!
In my books it's called Karma.
No need for any artwork here, your words and message are crystal clear.
All the good one does returns sooner or later to that person.
Just helping someone helps a person feel good inside.
reply by the author on 01-Sep-2021
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Ciao mystery poet, you now have 3 votes!
In my books it's called Karma.
No need for any artwork here, your words and message are crystal clear.
All the good one does returns sooner or later to that person.
Just helping someone helps a person feel good inside.
Comment Written 01-Sep-2021
reply by the author on 01-Sep-2021
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Thank you very much!
Comment from Wendy G
Yes, helping is indeed healing and every little action of care for others is a blessing to all. Your black and white presentation is a good choice. Best wishes for your entry in the contest.
Wendy
reply by the author on 01-Sep-2021
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Yes, helping is indeed healing and every little action of care for others is a blessing to all. Your black and white presentation is a good choice. Best wishes for your entry in the contest.
Wendy
Comment Written 01-Sep-2021
reply by the author on 01-Sep-2021
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Thank you Wendy, for the kind feedback
Comment from harmony13
The first two lines flow and connect well. The last line says it all!
The poem flows and connects well. Great way to overcome depression.
I really found the last line to be very meaningful.
Have a great day!.....Maria
reply by the author on 01-Sep-2021
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The first two lines flow and connect well. The last line says it all!
The poem flows and connects well. Great way to overcome depression.
I really found the last line to be very meaningful.
Have a great day!.....Maria
Comment Written 01-Sep-2021
reply by the author on 01-Sep-2021
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Thank you Maria :)
Comment from Pam (respa)
-I appreciate your description
about trying to help others.
-A good presentation and
syllable count.
-You show the contrast between
how you feel when waking up,
but you have a good goal for the day.
-A good concluding line, too.
-Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 01-Sep-2021
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-I appreciate your description
about trying to help others.
-A good presentation and
syllable count.
-You show the contrast between
how you feel when waking up,
but you have a good goal for the day.
-A good concluding line, too.
-Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 01-Sep-2021
reply by the author on 01-Sep-2021
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Thank you for the kind feedback
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You are welcome.
Comment from Seshadri_Sreenivasan
A very thought-provoking poem that tells about the importance of human values in 17 syllables. part of being a person, to feel happy and to be of value to the community is to help other less fortunate people. Good luck in the contest.
If I may suggest> Please use a picture and increase the font size to 18 for a good impact of this poem. Thanks.
reply by the author on 01-Sep-2021
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A very thought-provoking poem that tells about the importance of human values in 17 syllables. part of being a person, to feel happy and to be of value to the community is to help other less fortunate people. Good luck in the contest.
If I may suggest> Please use a picture and increase the font size to 18 for a good impact of this poem. Thanks.
Comment Written 01-Sep-2021
reply by the author on 01-Sep-2021
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Thanks for the feedback, I will look at increasing the font and adding pictures :)
Comment from Patty Palmer
There are so many people out there that are needing something because there is so much devastation right now. The fires, people need help. The Biden administration is making mess after mess. The world is ready to explodel
Patty
Patty
reply by the author on 01-Sep-2021
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There are so many people out there that are needing something because there is so much devastation right now. The fires, people need help. The Biden administration is making mess after mess. The world is ready to explodel
Patty
Patty
Comment Written 01-Sep-2021
reply by the author on 01-Sep-2021
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Thanks for the kind feedback
Comment from karenina
I do like this thought... You've wrapped it in a very nice haiku. Often the best way to lift our own spirits is to lift up others! A double blessing...
Karenina
reply by the author on 01-Sep-2021
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I do like this thought... You've wrapped it in a very nice haiku. Often the best way to lift our own spirits is to lift up others! A double blessing...
Karenina
Comment Written 01-Sep-2021
reply by the author on 01-Sep-2021
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Thank you :)
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Thank YOU! A thought we all ought to keep in mind!
Karenina