City
a poem18 total reviews
Comment from Mary Vigasin
Just when I think I can recognize your sometimes quirky style, you blow me away with this poignant poem of difficult life in a one-room apartment most likely in poverty but having hope that things will get better.
Your talent shines here brightly and brilliantly.
Regards,
Mary
reply by the author on 01-Sep-2021
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Just when I think I can recognize your sometimes quirky style, you blow me away with this poignant poem of difficult life in a one-room apartment most likely in poverty but having hope that things will get better.
Your talent shines here brightly and brilliantly.
Regards,
Mary
Comment Written 01-Sep-2021
reply by the author on 01-Sep-2021
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You are very kind, Mary.
Comment from Jay Squires
This is a dark, but deep and satisfying poem, Bill. Wow! "A Sudden sawing light," and
My crazy eye snaps open
as if to catch a ride on a ray
out of this dark and lonely place.
What gave it a special deep dark turn was the use of the word "beatings" and yet the lingering glimmer of hope riding on the desire/need to see tomorrow.
Good stuff, man!
reply by the author on 01-Sep-2021
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This is a dark, but deep and satisfying poem, Bill. Wow! "A Sudden sawing light," and
My crazy eye snaps open
as if to catch a ride on a ray
out of this dark and lonely place.
What gave it a special deep dark turn was the use of the word "beatings" and yet the lingering glimmer of hope riding on the desire/need to see tomorrow.
Good stuff, man!
Comment Written 01-Sep-2021
reply by the author on 01-Sep-2021
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Thanks, Jay.
Comment from artisart4u
Your poem is nice about what someone sees when they get up and their mental and physical state gets them off and running or lay back down until another time.
The colors you used are bright and warm. Good luck with your poem.
reply by the author on 01-Sep-2021
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Your poem is nice about what someone sees when they get up and their mental and physical state gets them off and running or lay back down until another time.
The colors you used are bright and warm. Good luck with your poem.
Comment Written 01-Sep-2021
reply by the author on 01-Sep-2021
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Thanks, AisA4u
Comment from harmony13
The author's words are sad, descriptive, hopeful and creative. I pondered on the theme of this poem and I thought about how lonely life can be.
The poem flows and connects well. The artwork is great and goes well
with these words.
reply by the author on 01-Sep-2021
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The author's words are sad, descriptive, hopeful and creative. I pondered on the theme of this poem and I thought about how lonely life can be.
The poem flows and connects well. The artwork is great and goes well
with these words.
Comment Written 01-Sep-2021
reply by the author on 01-Sep-2021
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Thank you, Harmony
Comment from Janice Canerdy
This is a vividly descriptive poem--especially the "crazy eye" lines! I started to feel great sympaty for the severely roughed-up man--but I don't know what happened. :-)
reply by the author on 31-Aug-2021
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This is a vividly descriptive poem--especially the "crazy eye" lines! I started to feel great sympaty for the severely roughed-up man--but I don't know what happened. :-)
Comment Written 31-Aug-2021
reply by the author on 31-Aug-2021
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Thanks, Janice
Comment from Gert sherwood
a poem
City
Bill Schott your poem it seems that you don't know why a city is depressed, but hoping in the future ----
when the sun rises,
and the city wakes from its sleeplessness,
Gert
reply by the author on 31-Aug-2021
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a poem
City
Bill Schott your poem it seems that you don't know why a city is depressed, but hoping in the future ----
when the sun rises,
and the city wakes from its sleeplessness,
Gert
Comment Written 31-Aug-2021
reply by the author on 31-Aug-2021
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Thanks, Gert
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you are welcome Bill Schott
Gert
Comment from lyenochka
I was wondering why it was a "sudden sawing" light other than the alliteration. But as the poem progresses, it's clear that life in the city is hard and a full accurate depth perception of the future requires the "crazy eye's" optimism to be balanced by the beaten eye's reality.
reply by the author on 31-Aug-2021
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I was wondering why it was a "sudden sawing" light other than the alliteration. But as the poem progresses, it's clear that life in the city is hard and a full accurate depth perception of the future requires the "crazy eye's" optimism to be balanced by the beaten eye's reality.
Comment Written 31-Aug-2021
reply by the author on 31-Aug-2021
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Thank you, lyenochka
Comment from Sally Law
I rough week for American citizens and I'm feeling this way today. I dreaded getting up to read the Afghanistan report, and sure enough, it was as suspected. Americans left behind and betrayed. Those poor Afghans, too. Then the hurricane damage....
I have taken to prayer and hope to make a difference there and in my writing. Sending you my best today as always. I hope you and yours are well and safe.
Sal XO
reply by the author on 31-Aug-2021
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I rough week for American citizens and I'm feeling this way today. I dreaded getting up to read the Afghanistan report, and sure enough, it was as suspected. Americans left behind and betrayed. Those poor Afghans, too. Then the hurricane damage....
I have taken to prayer and hope to make a difference there and in my writing. Sending you my best today as always. I hope you and yours are well and safe.
Sal XO
Comment Written 31-Aug-2021
reply by the author on 31-Aug-2021
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Thanks, Sal. Prayers from here for you and yours too.
Comment from nancy_e_davis
I am impressed with this, Bill. So unusual for you. You have captured the depression of living in the city and walking the mean streets, afraid, but still hoping for a way out. Well done my friend. You should get serious more often. Nancy:)
reply by the author on 31-Aug-2021
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I am impressed with this, Bill. So unusual for you. You have captured the depression of living in the city and walking the mean streets, afraid, but still hoping for a way out. Well done my friend. You should get serious more often. Nancy:)
Comment Written 31-Aug-2021
reply by the author on 31-Aug-2021
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Thank you, Nancy.
Comment from nomi338
Sir, I do not know who you are, but you need to release my friend Bill Schott. You can not get away with trying to pass yourself off as my friend. Believe me, he is recognizable by his unique style of writing, and you will never convince any of his friends and cowriters that this came from him. Nice try, better luck next time. Now, please release our friend or else.
reply by the author on 31-Aug-2021
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Sir, I do not know who you are, but you need to release my friend Bill Schott. You can not get away with trying to pass yourself off as my friend. Believe me, he is recognizable by his unique style of writing, and you will never convince any of his friends and cowriters that this came from him. Nice try, better luck next time. Now, please release our friend or else.
Comment Written 31-Aug-2021
reply by the author on 31-Aug-2021
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Do not attempt to adjust your dial?
