The Walkers
Viewing comments for Chapter 6 "The Dangers of the Spirit Realm"The Final Gabriel Hope Journey
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Comment from Carlos' girl
This scares me to death! What a great story. I'm still nervous from reading it. Love the Jack Nicholson quote " Honey, I'm home" from "The Shining". It's perfect lol. You really did a good job here.
reply by the author on 12-Sep-2021
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This scares me to death! What a great story. I'm still nervous from reading it. Love the Jack Nicholson quote " Honey, I'm home" from "The Shining". It's perfect lol. You really did a good job here.
Comment Written 11-Sep-2021
reply by the author on 12-Sep-2021
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Hello, my friend! Thank you for your kind words and shiny six stars. They are deeply appreciated!
Have a great day, and God bless.
mike
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U R Welcome
Comment from country ranch writer
Everyone beware on their journey from place to place evil lurks everywhere they go. It will try to catch them unawares to get 5hem in a skinny minute. The battle of wits is never ending.
reply by the author on 12-Sep-2021
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Everyone beware on their journey from place to place evil lurks everywhere they go. It will try to catch them unawares to get 5hem in a skinny minute. The battle of wits is never ending.
Comment Written 09-Sep-2021
reply by the author on 12-Sep-2021
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Hello, my friend. Thank you for your kind words!
Have a great day, and God bless.
mike
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Hugs to you all my friends😎🐕🐎🐾🐕🐾🐎
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Hugs to you all my friends😎🐕🐎🐾🐕🐾🐎
Comment from royowen
You describe the supernatural very well Mike, and although we don't have a real clue how they operate, you've brought them to a level coherence for the human mind. I wrote a song some years ago called "I hear an army marching" this reminds a little of that. Beautifully written Mike, blessings Roy
reply by the author on 08-Sep-2021
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You describe the supernatural very well Mike, and although we don't have a real clue how they operate, you've brought them to a level coherence for the human mind. I wrote a song some years ago called "I hear an army marching" this reminds a little of that. Beautifully written Mike, blessings Roy
Comment Written 07-Sep-2021
reply by the author on 08-Sep-2021
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Hi, Roy. Thank you for your kind words!
Have a great day, and God bless.
mike
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You too
Comment from estory
I think you have a very sci fi approach here to this battle between good and evil, and this style might appeal to teens. I can't help thinking of the Lord of the Rings when you described the demons in their skeletal forms, marching in the steel boots, and the demon king in the multi horned crown, like the king of the Orcs in Battle of the Five Armies. the detailed descriptions of the wrecked cars with the hoods torn off, the darkness, and the small but powerful point of light that brightens the faces of the angels from the star in heaven, really placed us in the middle of this scene. There were also some lighthearted puns in the dialogue that allowed for some comic relief, and made these angels seem all the more human. Great contrast between that and the evil demons. estory
reply by the author on 08-Sep-2021
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I think you have a very sci fi approach here to this battle between good and evil, and this style might appeal to teens. I can't help thinking of the Lord of the Rings when you described the demons in their skeletal forms, marching in the steel boots, and the demon king in the multi horned crown, like the king of the Orcs in Battle of the Five Armies. the detailed descriptions of the wrecked cars with the hoods torn off, the darkness, and the small but powerful point of light that brightens the faces of the angels from the star in heaven, really placed us in the middle of this scene. There were also some lighthearted puns in the dialogue that allowed for some comic relief, and made these angels seem all the more human. Great contrast between that and the evil demons. estory
Comment Written 07-Sep-2021
reply by the author on 08-Sep-2021
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Hello, my friend. Thank you for your kind words!
Have a great day, and God bless.
mike
Comment from Ric Myworld
Your characters and scenery creations give an old boy who isn't normally afraid of anything the willies. You can fight big, mean, and ugly, but soldiers that are all ready skeletons and demons leave us at the mercy of whatever. LOL. Thanks for sharing another fine chapter. I get tired of saying it, and I know you get tired of reading it. But I wish I had a six.
reply by the author on 08-Sep-2021
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Your characters and scenery creations give an old boy who isn't normally afraid of anything the willies. You can fight big, mean, and ugly, but soldiers that are all ready skeletons and demons leave us at the mercy of whatever. LOL. Thanks for sharing another fine chapter. I get tired of saying it, and I know you get tired of reading it. But I wish I had a six.
Comment Written 07-Sep-2021
reply by the author on 08-Sep-2021
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Hi, Ric. Thank you for your kind words and thought of a six!
Have a great day, and God bless.
mike
Comment from damommy
Omigosh! It's getting more tense by the moment. You seem to know a lot about the Memphis/Arkansas area. 8-) Let's hope this bunch bypasses my home and gets on with their work elsewhere. Good story.
reply by the author on 08-Sep-2021
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Omigosh! It's getting more tense by the moment. You seem to know a lot about the Memphis/Arkansas area. 8-) Let's hope this bunch bypasses my home and gets on with their work elsewhere. Good story.
Comment Written 07-Sep-2021
reply by the author on 08-Sep-2021
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Hello, my friend. Thank you for your kind words!
Comment from nancy_e_davis
Mike , I do enjoy your stories about Gabriel Hope and his fight against evil. We need someone like him in this world. I believe in guardian Angels and I guess he would be classified as one. We need all the help we can get because it feels like evil is gaining ground every day. Well done. Nancy:)
reply by the author on 08-Sep-2021
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Mike , I do enjoy your stories about Gabriel Hope and his fight against evil. We need someone like him in this world. I believe in guardian Angels and I guess he would be classified as one. We need all the help we can get because it feels like evil is gaining ground every day. Well done. Nancy:)
Comment Written 07-Sep-2021
reply by the author on 08-Sep-2021
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Hi, Nancy. Thank you for your kind words!
Have a great day, and God bless.
mike
Comment from barbara.wilkey
I really enjoyed reading your story, but you really need to take a look at how to write dialogue so it moves the story along.
"To know that heaven and God exist," Cris smiles.
"We'll avoid that place," Michael frowns.
"Oh, thanks," Cal laughs.
"At least the demons don't use body parts for decoration," Gabe nods.
"Bring them on," Cal smiles.
"That's fine," Gabe smiles. "But let's get going."
(None of these are speech tags. You need a period inside the quotation mark, example - I'm sorry." Cal shakes her head. ALSO you need to very your sentences, this is very redunit to read.
Cris speaks up. "That was the Legions and a super- demon general, so who are the Familiars again?" ( This is a speech tag, you need a comma after up)
reply by the author on 08-Sep-2021
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I really enjoyed reading your story, but you really need to take a look at how to write dialogue so it moves the story along.
"To know that heaven and God exist," Cris smiles.
"We'll avoid that place," Michael frowns.
"Oh, thanks," Cal laughs.
"At least the demons don't use body parts for decoration," Gabe nods.
"Bring them on," Cal smiles.
"That's fine," Gabe smiles. "But let's get going."
(None of these are speech tags. You need a period inside the quotation mark, example - I'm sorry." Cal shakes her head. ALSO you need to very your sentences, this is very redunit to read.
Cris speaks up. "That was the Legions and a super- demon general, so who are the Familiars again?" ( This is a speech tag, you need a comma after up)
Comment Written 07-Sep-2021
reply by the author on 08-Sep-2021
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Hi, Barbara. Thank you for your kind words and help with this chapter!
Have a great day, and God bless.
mike
Comment from BethShelby
I'm enjoying your story of spiritual warfare. That is quite a group of characters and it is good one of them is an angel. The picture you paint scary with the horrible landscape and it sounds like you are still inTennessee. The demons are terrible creatures and make this sound horror story but with God's blessing they have nothing to fear.
reply by the author on 08-Sep-2021
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I'm enjoying your story of spiritual warfare. That is quite a group of characters and it is good one of them is an angel. The picture you paint scary with the horrible landscape and it sounds like you are still inTennessee. The demons are terrible creatures and make this sound horror story but with God's blessing they have nothing to fear.
Comment Written 07-Sep-2021
reply by the author on 08-Sep-2021
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Hi, Beth. Thank you for your kind words!
Have a great day, and God bless.
mike
Comment from Sherry Asbury
This is so well-written and captivating. Stories with a religious bent are harder to write, I think...but you have done a splendid job and I look forward to more! Your cast is lengthy, but each is described so well. A really fine piece of work!!
reply by the author on 08-Sep-2021
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This is so well-written and captivating. Stories with a religious bent are harder to write, I think...but you have done a splendid job and I look forward to more! Your cast is lengthy, but each is described so well. A really fine piece of work!!
Comment Written 07-Sep-2021
reply by the author on 08-Sep-2021
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Hi, Sherry. Thank you for your kind words!
Have a great day, and God bless.
mike
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and God bless you, dear man!
