Blue Velvet Sky
Contemplating the sky49 total reviews
Comment from Katie Mae Dead
Beautiful job here on this free verse.
Exceptional descriptors...
Tingles with unknowns.
Mantle of mysterious.
Inhale the wonderous sight.
Sug: the only thing I tripped over a bit was using the word "flat"
to describe "iceberg".
Icebergs are peaked and somewhat jagged both above and below the water. Perhaps something along those lines.
I love the ending btw.
Take care,
Katiemae Dead
reply by the author on 01-Sep-2021
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Beautiful job here on this free verse.
Exceptional descriptors...
Tingles with unknowns.
Mantle of mysterious.
Inhale the wonderous sight.
Sug: the only thing I tripped over a bit was using the word "flat"
to describe "iceberg".
Icebergs are peaked and somewhat jagged both above and below the water. Perhaps something along those lines.
I love the ending btw.
Take care,
Katiemae Dead
Comment Written 01-Sep-2021
reply by the author on 01-Sep-2021
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Thank you so much for your awesome comments, dear friend.
Comment from JennStar
I liked the poem. It paints a beautiful picture in the mind.
I tend to like poems formatted more into shorter lines and stanzas like
"Draped in blue velvet
the sky shines tonight.
Deep and silent,
it tingles with unknowns...."
But really that is just a personal thing.
My favorite line "I just inhale the wondrous sight"
reply by the author on 01-Sep-2021
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I liked the poem. It paints a beautiful picture in the mind.
I tend to like poems formatted more into shorter lines and stanzas like
"Draped in blue velvet
the sky shines tonight.
Deep and silent,
it tingles with unknowns...."
But really that is just a personal thing.
My favorite line "I just inhale the wondrous sight"
Comment Written 01-Sep-2021
reply by the author on 01-Sep-2021
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Thank you for your awesome comments to my poetry.
Comment from Janetsue
The sky has always fascinated me and I have loved clouds ever since I can remember. There are so many moods to the sky, day and night, and experiencing them appreciatively is a joy. I am even fond of thunderstorms...as long as nothing is hurt or damaged.
reply by the author on 01-Sep-2021
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The sky has always fascinated me and I have loved clouds ever since I can remember. There are so many moods to the sky, day and night, and experiencing them appreciatively is a joy. I am even fond of thunderstorms...as long as nothing is hurt or damaged.
Comment Written 01-Sep-2021
reply by the author on 01-Sep-2021
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Thank you so much for your awesome comments.
Comment from artisart4u
It is breath taking to look at the sky and see the awesome cloud formations. Sometimes the sun shines through them and that is breath taking, I think of glory.
I like the way you centered your poem and the ellipsis marks.
Good luck with it.
reply by the author on 01-Sep-2021
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It is breath taking to look at the sky and see the awesome cloud formations. Sometimes the sun shines through them and that is breath taking, I think of glory.
I like the way you centered your poem and the ellipsis marks.
Good luck with it.
Comment Written 01-Sep-2021
reply by the author on 01-Sep-2021
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Wow, thank you so much...
Comment from Ric Myworld
As I've often said, when it comes to poetry, I wouldn't know a sonnet from sorbet. But even my simple mind can appreciate your picture and poem combination. Thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 01-Sep-2021
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As I've often said, when it comes to poetry, I wouldn't know a sonnet from sorbet. But even my simple mind can appreciate your picture and poem combination. Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 01-Sep-2021
reply by the author on 01-Sep-2021
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Thank you ao muxh doe youe awesome comments Ric.
Comment from dragonpoet
This is a well done free verse poem that tells of the calming effects of the night sky. It tells how simple beauty gives solace.
Keep writing and stay healthy
Joan
reply by the author on 01-Sep-2021
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This is a well done free verse poem that tells of the calming effects of the night sky. It tells how simple beauty gives solace.
Keep writing and stay healthy
Joan
Comment Written 01-Sep-2021
reply by the author on 01-Sep-2021
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Thank you for reading my wor, Joan.
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Any time, Amada
Joan
Comment from Patty Palmer
An intriguing poem about the night sky that tingles makes me think of the Northern Lights. The night sky can bring comfort and at times it can look scary. I enjoy the night sky as long as there aren't any flying saucers! LOL
Patty
reply by the author on 01-Sep-2021
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An intriguing poem about the night sky that tingles makes me think of the Northern Lights. The night sky can bring comfort and at times it can look scary. I enjoy the night sky as long as there aren't any flying saucers! LOL
Patty
Comment Written 01-Sep-2021
reply by the author on 01-Sep-2021
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Thank you for your awesome comments,Patty.
Comment from l.raven
HI amada, there is just something about the sky at night...it either shines from the moon...or the stars...
or it is just quiet...sometimes seeming cold and dark...
either way...there is a beauty that the sky holds every night...
I love your poem my sweet friend..and love your picture...so nicely written sweet girl...love you...Linda xxoo
reply by the author on 01-Sep-2021
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HI amada, there is just something about the sky at night...it either shines from the moon...or the stars...
or it is just quiet...sometimes seeming cold and dark...
either way...there is a beauty that the sky holds every night...
I love your poem my sweet friend..and love your picture...so nicely written sweet girl...love you...Linda xxoo
Comment Written 01-Sep-2021
reply by the author on 01-Sep-2021
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Thank you so much for reading my poem.
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your so very welcome...love xxoo
Comment from Elizabeth Emerald
Gorgeous and powerful--vivid velvet imagery is spot-on--startling phrasing--tingles with unknowns--heartless iceberg--alliteration--mantle of mysteries.
reply by the author on 01-Sep-2021
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Gorgeous and powerful--vivid velvet imagery is spot-on--startling phrasing--tingles with unknowns--heartless iceberg--alliteration--mantle of mysteries.
Comment Written 31-Aug-2021
reply by the author on 01-Sep-2021
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Thank you so much for reading my work.
Comment from Midi O'Rourke
First - did you mean mingle or tingle in the second line?
Very well written poem. I enjoyed reading it because it has layers of imagery. It still flows well when you say - the truth is cold and flat...Nice.
reply by the author on 01-Sep-2021
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First - did you mean mingle or tingle in the second line?
Very well written poem. I enjoyed reading it because it has layers of imagery. It still flows well when you say - the truth is cold and flat...Nice.
Comment Written 31-Aug-2021
reply by the author on 01-Sep-2021
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Thank you much for your awesome review.
