Blue Velvet Sky
Contemplating the sky49 total reviews
Comment from Gert sherwood
Contemplating the sky
Blue Velvet Sky
amada You are right its a mystery when you look at the night skies; there could be a sky filled with brilliant stars. I like how you envision the evening skies, Draped in blue to me black velvet draped the sky without the moon and stars
Smiles you have a great line saying, the truth is cold and flat like a heartless iceberg.
Gert
reply by the author on 31-Aug-2021
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Contemplating the sky
Blue Velvet Sky
amada You are right its a mystery when you look at the night skies; there could be a sky filled with brilliant stars. I like how you envision the evening skies, Draped in blue to me black velvet draped the sky without the moon and stars
Smiles you have a great line saying, the truth is cold and flat like a heartless iceberg.
Gert
Comment Written 30-Aug-2021
reply by the author on 31-Aug-2021
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Oh, thank you so much, dear friend.
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You are welcome amada
Gert
Comment from Pam (respa)
-Very nice image, amada.
-You wrote a very good poem
with effective imagery and rhyme.
-I like how you contemplate
the mysteries of the night.
-"draped in blue velvet" is
a very good image.
-I like the contrast with "the truth..."
-But you bring it back to the
lure of "the spell of this mystery, tonight."
-Nicely done!
reply by the author on 31-Aug-2021
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-Very nice image, amada.
-You wrote a very good poem
with effective imagery and rhyme.
-I like how you contemplate
the mysteries of the night.
-"draped in blue velvet" is
a very good image.
-I like the contrast with "the truth..."
-But you bring it back to the
lure of "the spell of this mystery, tonight."
-Nicely done!
Comment Written 30-Aug-2021
reply by the author on 31-Aug-2021
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Thank you so much, such a delight ...
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You are very welcome.
Comment from Jesse James Doty
I read your Bio to reacquaint myself with you as a writer and I noticed you have visual problems. Well, I have low vision and also noticed that the font of your print on this screen is too small to be read easily. So, in keeping with awareness of things such as this, I suggest you try to make the font larger so as to be more easily read. I thought your poem was excellent and offers a look see into your feelings and emotions. A most interesting and heartfelt piece. Please, know that I do not want to offend. Rather I am looking out for those of us who have difficulty reading.
Take care and be well,
Jesse
reply by the author on 31-Aug-2021
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I read your Bio to reacquaint myself with you as a writer and I noticed you have visual problems. Well, I have low vision and also noticed that the font of your print on this screen is too small to be read easily. So, in keeping with awareness of things such as this, I suggest you try to make the font larger so as to be more easily read. I thought your poem was excellent and offers a look see into your feelings and emotions. A most interesting and heartfelt piece. Please, know that I do not want to offend. Rather I am looking out for those of us who have difficulty reading.
Take care and be well,
Jesse
Comment Written 30-Aug-2021
reply by the author on 31-Aug-2021
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Hi Jesse, I am so honored by your comments, I have problems with perception as well, large letters sort of shut at my eyes. Pm me if you have comments.
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Okay, Amada, I will private message you with my comments from now on.
Please, remind me if I forget.
Take care,
Jesse
Comment from tfawcus
A most evocative poem, Amada. You've created a lovely atmosphere with your words. Thoughts often seem to turn to the mysteries and wonder of the universe when we contemplate the skies. They tend to put our own lives in perspective. I enjoyed this poem very much.
reply by the author on 01-Sep-2021
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A most evocative poem, Amada. You've created a lovely atmosphere with your words. Thoughts often seem to turn to the mysteries and wonder of the universe when we contemplate the skies. They tend to put our own lives in perspective. I enjoyed this poem very much.
Comment Written 30-Aug-2021
reply by the author on 01-Sep-2021
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Thank you for reading and commenting.
Comment from karenina
You rocked me from comfort to disquiet with your jarring line: "the truth is cold and flat like a heartless iceberg" /// Life is so like this sometimes. We are left to isolate and enjoy the solitude of the sky... It's melancholy,
it's real!
Karenina
reply by the author on 31-Aug-2021
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You rocked me from comfort to disquiet with your jarring line: "the truth is cold and flat like a heartless iceberg" /// Life is so like this sometimes. We are left to isolate and enjoy the solitude of the sky... It's melancholy,
it's real!
Karenina
Comment Written 30-Aug-2021
reply by the author on 31-Aug-2021
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Thank you for reading my lines, Karenina.
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My pleasure...
Karenina
Comment from LisaMay
I really like how you make the night sky be such a source of comfort and wonder with its blue blanket, 'a mantle of mysteries' (lovely phrase), and it's an enthralling, wondrous sight... then a jarring note is introduced: "the truth is cold and flat like a heartless iceberg". How sadly true. Let us dreamers continue to "soak in the spell of this mystery".
reply by the author on 31-Aug-2021
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I really like how you make the night sky be such a source of comfort and wonder with its blue blanket, 'a mantle of mysteries' (lovely phrase), and it's an enthralling, wondrous sight... then a jarring note is introduced: "the truth is cold and flat like a heartless iceberg". How sadly true. Let us dreamers continue to "soak in the spell of this mystery".
Comment Written 30-Aug-2021
reply by the author on 31-Aug-2021
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Thank you for this honor, thank you so much, Lisa.
Comment from dellsworthpoet
An interesting poem. Somewhat sad, somewhat lonely, but not uncomfortable. Most of all mysterious and powerful. The flow is good. The poetry form fits the subject well. I like the imagery which is all reality based.
I have no suggestions.
Thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 31-Aug-2021
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An interesting poem. Somewhat sad, somewhat lonely, but not uncomfortable. Most of all mysterious and powerful. The flow is good. The poetry form fits the subject well. I like the imagery which is all reality based.
I have no suggestions.
Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 30-Aug-2021
reply by the author on 31-Aug-2021
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Thank you for reading my work.
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You are welcome.
Comment from royowen
I think you're absolutely right about the darkness. As a child I used to have all sorts of imaginary things going on in my mind. Our 4 year old grandson, has us hide in the dark because he doesn't want to go, he's a normal little boy by all intents and purposes, but it's really funny, doesn't like the darkness. Beautifully written, and a most theme, blessings Amada, Roy
reply by the author on 01-Sep-2021
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I think you're absolutely right about the darkness. As a child I used to have all sorts of imaginary things going on in my mind. Our 4 year old grandson, has us hide in the dark because he doesn't want to go, he's a normal little boy by all intents and purposes, but it's really funny, doesn't like the darkness. Beautifully written, and a most theme, blessings Amada, Roy
Comment Written 30-Aug-2021
reply by the author on 01-Sep-2021
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Thank you, Roy.
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Most welcome
Comment from Mary Shifman
This is an enchanting poem. It captures the beauty and solitude of a night sky. It is mysterious and I think all humanity feel drawn to it at one time or another.
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reply by the author on 01-Sep-2021
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This is an enchanting poem. It captures the beauty and solitude of a night sky. It is mysterious and I think all humanity feel drawn to it at one time or another.
This rating does not count towards story rating or author rank.
The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 30-Aug-2021
reply by the author on 01-Sep-2021
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Thank you for such a beautiful review, Mary.
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You are welcome.
