Secrets in the Wind
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Comment from karenina
Sniffling here. Oh Dear God... Speaking of which? Jon is soooooo not dead. Shockwaves are fracturing the foundation of many lives!
This next chapter is pulling me. So much more to say!
Annie's counting on me!
Gotta run. Great story!
Karenina
reply by the author on 06-Sep-2021
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Sniffling here. Oh Dear God... Speaking of which? Jon is soooooo not dead. Shockwaves are fracturing the foundation of many lives!
This next chapter is pulling me. So much more to say!
Annie's counting on me!
Gotta run. Great story!
Karenina
Comment Written 02-Sep-2021
reply by the author on 06-Sep-2021
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I'm feeling bad about Annie, but there's so much I need to get out there before we can find out where she is and who has her.... and that won't be an easy walk in the park either. Sorry!
Smiles and hugs, Carol
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I"m only kidding. I KNOW you wouldn't kill off a child...it's just fun to needle you now and then! Annie is in the best hands...YOURS!
Karenina
Comment from Mary Kay Bonfante
Finding Cassidy is a very momentous discovery for Mary. I'm wondering how the various ages of these characters line up? Mary is already a grandmother (albeit of a young child), and I thought Cassidy was on the young side, so unless there was a substantial age difference between Jon and Cassidy, there could be an age discrepancy between some of these characters, in relation to the general timeline of the backstory. Or maybe not? You might have it all mapped out somewhere, very nicely.
My grammatical suggestions:
Off-roading isn't one of my Mercedes finer points."
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Off-roading isn't one of my Mercedes' finer points."
"And you know, I'm carrying you to the Jeep"
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"And you know, I'm carrying you to the Jeep."
She spun around and yanked Hanks's arm violently.
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She spun around and yanked Hank's arm violently.
"Cassidy and her brother's name was Jon.
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"Cassidy, and her brother's name was Jon.
I lived on the streets until a wonderful woman took me and changed my life."
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I lived on the streets until a wonderful woman took me in, and changed my life."
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It will certainly be a shock, when Mary realizes that Jon never died in an auto accident. And where is little Annie? I hope she's being well cared for, and isn't overly traumatized by Cynthia, Mason or whoever took her.
reply by the author on 06-Sep-2021
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Finding Cassidy is a very momentous discovery for Mary. I'm wondering how the various ages of these characters line up? Mary is already a grandmother (albeit of a young child), and I thought Cassidy was on the young side, so unless there was a substantial age difference between Jon and Cassidy, there could be an age discrepancy between some of these characters, in relation to the general timeline of the backstory. Or maybe not? You might have it all mapped out somewhere, very nicely.
My grammatical suggestions:
Off-roading isn't one of my Mercedes finer points."
-->
Off-roading isn't one of my Mercedes' finer points."
"And you know, I'm carrying you to the Jeep"
-->
"And you know, I'm carrying you to the Jeep."
She spun around and yanked Hanks's arm violently.
-->
She spun around and yanked Hank's arm violently.
"Cassidy and her brother's name was Jon.
-->
"Cassidy, and her brother's name was Jon.
I lived on the streets until a wonderful woman took me and changed my life."
-->
I lived on the streets until a wonderful woman took me in, and changed my life."
***
It will certainly be a shock, when Mary realizes that Jon never died in an auto accident. And where is little Annie? I hope she's being well cared for, and isn't overly traumatized by Cynthia, Mason or whoever took her.
Comment Written 31-Aug-2021
reply by the author on 06-Sep-2021
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Sorry for the cut and paste but I am now currently 158 responses behind. I want to make the changes, thank everyone and start fresh. Wishing you a great day.
Please forgive me for being so far behind on answering reviews, fixing suggestions, and thanking everyone for their kindness. Good thing a birthday only comes once a year. I posted to my family that I was cooking and for the first time in years, my house was over flowing for two days after two days of cooking. Now in three days, Matthew starts filming again and I must cook for them. This woman is tired. Thank you for all your support and kindness.
Smiles, Carol
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Wow! 158 responses behind... hope you're catching up. Please don?t reply to this, it's okay! Love you!
Comment from robyn corum
Carol,
And JON (the rat?) gave birth to those precious twins? Loved this woman? I suppose that's where his life went so terribly wrong, then. Oh, my. More and more and more surprises.
WWWWOOOOWWWWWWW.
A note:
--> "And you know, I'm carrying you to the Jeep(.)" They were
Very awesomeness.
And on--
reply by the author on 29-Aug-2021
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Carol,
And JON (the rat?) gave birth to those precious twins? Loved this woman? I suppose that's where his life went so terribly wrong, then. Oh, my. More and more and more surprises.
WWWWOOOOWWWWWWW.
A note:
--> "And you know, I'm carrying you to the Jeep(.)" They were
Very awesomeness.
And on--
Comment Written 29-Aug-2021
reply by the author on 29-Aug-2021
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That was the first chapter of the book, and I tried to stress to people how important it was to know those characters. I think you will be blown away...not figurately, of course, with the emotions in the upcoming ones. Now I am on pins and needles to see how you will react. LOL Smiles, Carol
Comment from Patty Palmer
Boy, all kinds of scenarios are running around in my head. The plot thickens. Another great chapter. You kept my interest the whole new
(HUGS)
Patty
reply by the author on 29-Aug-2021
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Boy, all kinds of scenarios are running around in my head. The plot thickens. Another great chapter. You kept my interest the whole new
(HUGS)
Patty
Comment Written 29-Aug-2021
reply by the author on 29-Aug-2021
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thanks Patty...hope you get a chance to read the blockbusters this weekend. Big emotional impact.
smiles and hugs, CArol
Comment from Elizabeth Emerald
If I'd bought this in a bookstore I'd have pulled an all-nighter. You're weaving the plot strings brilliantly. Stupendous dialog and vivid descriptions.
sugg:
"Do you think that's why they took Annie? They want the property [.=>?]
Cassidy [COMMA] and her brother's name was Jon.
reply by the author on 06-Sep-2021
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If I'd bought this in a bookstore I'd have pulled an all-nighter. You're weaving the plot strings brilliantly. Stupendous dialog and vivid descriptions.
sugg:
"Do you think that's why they took Annie? They want the property [.=>?]
Cassidy [COMMA] and her brother's name was Jon.
Comment Written 28-Aug-2021
reply by the author on 06-Sep-2021
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I thank you for the review and your time. My apoligies for being so far behind on answering everyone. It was a busy weekend for me (and one I am thankful for, of course) but I can't neglect my friends and their thoughtfulness as well. You flatter me so much with your kindness.
Smiles, Carol
Suggestions done - Thx
Comment from barbara.wilkey
OH MY!!!! The you know what's about to hit the fan. OH MY!! I loved this post. Now, all the players will be out in the open and maybe we can get the bad guys. We already know Mason is the bad guy and found out about Annie from Cynthia. I can't wait for more. I found one 'down' but it was in dialogue so I left it alone. LOL
reply by the author on 29-Aug-2021
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OH MY!!!! The you know what's about to hit the fan. OH MY!! I loved this post. Now, all the players will be out in the open and maybe we can get the bad guys. We already know Mason is the bad guy and found out about Annie from Cynthia. I can't wait for more. I found one 'down' but it was in dialogue so I left it alone. LOL
Comment Written 28-Aug-2021
reply by the author on 29-Aug-2021
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Thank you so much... I fell so far behind and tried to keep up today with all the reviews. People went crazy over Mary and Cassidy. I couldn't get to Liz...but never fear I will.
Smiles, Carol
Comment from Ric Myworld
Wow, this is one of those chapters that brings together many years in their lives to that one moment of realization. To learn that everything you have believed was true, wasn't. Thanks for sharing another fantastic chapter. Wish I had a six.
reply by the author on 29-Aug-2021
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Wow, this is one of those chapters that brings together many years in their lives to that one moment of realization. To learn that everything you have believed was true, wasn't. Thanks for sharing another fantastic chapter. Wish I had a six.
Comment Written 28-Aug-2021
reply by the author on 29-Aug-2021
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You probably are getting tired of seeing my face pop up today and telling you how great you are.... Too bad!
I just wanted to say thanks and hope you are doing well. I'm not too fond of this heat and humidity interspersed with rain.
smiles, Carol
Comment from Susan Newell
Sorry I had to give you a four on this one. The whole Hank and Mary scene has problems. I don't recall Mary telling anyone that she was Faith's mother and Annie's grandmother. (Hank hasn't seen her since he dropped off the boxes of tell-all papers.) Plus, Hank has no knowledge of Jon, or that Cassidy even has a brother. I had been surprised that Garth was investigating Caldwell's wife's murder and the framing of Cassidy, but apparently had no knowledge of her brother, a local priest who was close enough to her to access her makeup. I think Mary is going to have to confess to motherhood (shocking Hank) before all the other pieces come out. I did like the fact that she saw Cassidy, not Liz, of whom I still don't know whether or not is an identical twin to Faith.
So few people even knew we lived there. -- suggest "know"
Mercedes finer points." ==> Mercedes'
"And you know, I'm carrying you to the Jeep" -- beginning quotes are backwards and sentence needs a period.
"I'm glad she's smiling, even if it's only temporary. -- You jumped scenes and we have no idea who's speaking.
"You'll always have a home as long as you want to stay there, Mary. No one can take it away from you." -- this is a huge leap from Faith owning it, particularly since he doesn't know she's anything more than a live-in caregiver.
The walkway consisted of enormous stones sunk deep into the ground. -- How could she know they were deep and not flat stones?
"Cassidy and her brother's name was Jon. -- could use a comma or ellipsis after Cassidy.
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Sorry I had to give you a four on this one. The whole Hank and Mary scene has problems. I don't recall Mary telling anyone that she was Faith's mother and Annie's grandmother. (Hank hasn't seen her since he dropped off the boxes of tell-all papers.) Plus, Hank has no knowledge of Jon, or that Cassidy even has a brother. I had been surprised that Garth was investigating Caldwell's wife's murder and the framing of Cassidy, but apparently had no knowledge of her brother, a local priest who was close enough to her to access her makeup. I think Mary is going to have to confess to motherhood (shocking Hank) before all the other pieces come out. I did like the fact that she saw Cassidy, not Liz, of whom I still don't know whether or not is an identical twin to Faith.
So few people even knew we lived there. -- suggest "know"
Mercedes finer points." ==> Mercedes'
"And you know, I'm carrying you to the Jeep" -- beginning quotes are backwards and sentence needs a period.
"I'm glad she's smiling, even if it's only temporary. -- You jumped scenes and we have no idea who's speaking.
"You'll always have a home as long as you want to stay there, Mary. No one can take it away from you." -- this is a huge leap from Faith owning it, particularly since he doesn't know she's anything more than a live-in caregiver.
The walkway consisted of enormous stones sunk deep into the ground. -- How could she know they were deep and not flat stones?
"Cassidy and her brother's name was Jon. -- could use a comma or ellipsis after Cassidy.
This rating does not count towards story rating or author rank.
The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 28-Aug-2021
Comment from ShirleyT1
What a chapter! The puzzle pieces are beginning to connect, and I'm so enjoying every line of your amazing story. You are such a creative writer. Your characters are well developed and you know how the attention of the reader!
reply by the author on 28-Aug-2021
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What a chapter! The puzzle pieces are beginning to connect, and I'm so enjoying every line of your amazing story. You are such a creative writer. Your characters are well developed and you know how the attention of the reader!
Comment Written 28-Aug-2021
reply by the author on 28-Aug-2021
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Thank you for putting a smile on my face this morning. I am thrilled you enjoy the story and understand all the twists and turns as they begin to connect.
Smiles, Carol
Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
Wow!!! What a turn-up for the books!!! It looks like Liz has a much bigger family than she realised, all on her doorstep! What will Jon do now? OMG! This really is your best book, even though your other other one was brilliant!! It's your fault that we can't wait for the next parts! What if Liz walks out now? Aww, wouldn't that be a shocker? No,it would probably give Mary a heart attack! Wonderful chapter, Carol, amazingly written. Love and hugs! Sandra xxx
reply by the author on 28-Aug-2021
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Wow!!! What a turn-up for the books!!! It looks like Liz has a much bigger family than she realised, all on her doorstep! What will Jon do now? OMG! This really is your best book, even though your other other one was brilliant!! It's your fault that we can't wait for the next parts! What if Liz walks out now? Aww, wouldn't that be a shocker? No,it would probably give Mary a heart attack! Wonderful chapter, Carol, amazingly written. Love and hugs! Sandra xxx
Comment Written 28-Aug-2021
reply by the author on 28-Aug-2021
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That is exactly the reaction I was hoping for... I raced to write the other chapters just so I could get to this part. So much relates back to the very first chapter of the book and I am thrilled I could carry it through. I hope to write another whopper of a chapter today and tomorrow. I'm excited to bring them together... and to catch the bad guys...though that might take a bit. Poor Annie! I'll keep her safe until we can find her.
Smiles, CArol
