Secrets in the Wind
Viewing comments for Chapter 34 "Secrets in the Wind - Chap 34"A story of loss, deceit, murder and crime
21 total reviews
Comment from Leann DS
Oh, the action and excitement! I can't stop reading. I hope I'm done before it's time to leave for work.
Check out the first sentence. I think "Annie" should be "Mary."
A whirlwind of debris whipped around the yard, bashing against Annie's fort and the shed. The trees moaned and swayed like Tahitians dancing to the thunderous beating drums. Torrents of rain pounded against the cottage walls.
reply by the author on 12-Sep-2021
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Oh, the action and excitement! I can't stop reading. I hope I'm done before it's time to leave for work.
Check out the first sentence. I think "Annie" should be "Mary."
A whirlwind of debris whipped around the yard, bashing against Annie's fort and the shed. The trees moaned and swayed like Tahitians dancing to the thunderous beating drums. Torrents of rain pounded against the cottage walls.
Comment Written 12-Sep-2021
reply by the author on 12-Sep-2021
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Thanks - corrected and appreciated!
Like I said, I am thrilled beyond words that you are enjoying the story and I appreciate it so very much.
Hugs, Carol
Comment from karenina
The impossible has happened. I feel bad for Michael. (Who knew?)
Mr. "Land Rover" is speeding away...
Is Faith alone and vulnerable now? Why....yes.
I hope Sebastian watched old reruns of "Lassie!"
This is deliciously excruciating!
Karenina
reply by the author on 06-Sep-2021
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The impossible has happened. I feel bad for Michael. (Who knew?)
Mr. "Land Rover" is speeding away...
Is Faith alone and vulnerable now? Why....yes.
I hope Sebastian watched old reruns of "Lassie!"
This is deliciously excruciating!
Karenina
Comment Written 02-Sep-2021
reply by the author on 06-Sep-2021
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thank you for your kindness and enjoyment of the story. I love your phrase "deliciously excruciating". Sebastian might only be a puppy but he's had good training. Smiles!
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It IS deliciously excruciating! I love to lean left and right and back and forth with my emotions! You're awesome-sauce!
Karenina
Comment from robyn corum
Carol,
Okay - awesome. So Michael is going to support the good guys. I'm happy about that. There's a good chance that more - LOTS more will come out that way. Wow. Exciting to think of it.
Moving on!
reply by the author on 29-Aug-2021
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Carol,
Okay - awesome. So Michael is going to support the good guys. I'm happy about that. There's a good chance that more - LOTS more will come out that way. Wow. Exciting to think of it.
Moving on!
Comment Written 29-Aug-2021
reply by the author on 29-Aug-2021
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You have done an outstanding job of reading. My thanks are small compared to how I feel about you. I am blessed and thrilled that you have enjoyed the story. smiles and hugs as always, Carol
Comment from Mary Kay Bonfante
So Michael plays a role that may lead to Annie's rescue? I'm glad a guy named Michael in your story isn't a bad guy, after all! They have to get Annie back, they just have to! And Faith, as sick as she is, came out looking for her little girl and got herself muddied up.
Errors and suggestions:
like Tahitians dancing to the thunderous beating drums.
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like Tahitians dancing to the thunderous, beating drums.
Take my life, but give us back, Annie."
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Take my life, but give us back Annie!"
and where can I get help.
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and where can I get help?
Micheal adjusted himself and moaned
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Michael adjusted himself and moaned,
The mysterious woman (Faith) is dying from cancer and lives in a secret cottage with her daughter, Annie, Sebastion, and Mary.
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The mysterious woman (Faith) is dying from cancer and lives in a secret cottage with her daughter, Annie, Sebastian, and Mary.
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Sebastian is a very good dog!
reply by the author on 06-Sep-2021
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So Michael plays a role that may lead to Annie's rescue? I'm glad a guy named Michael in your story isn't a bad guy, after all! They have to get Annie back, they just have to! And Faith, as sick as she is, came out looking for her little girl and got herself muddied up.
Errors and suggestions:
like Tahitians dancing to the thunderous beating drums.
-->
like Tahitians dancing to the thunderous, beating drums.
Take my life, but give us back, Annie."
-->
Take my life, but give us back Annie!"
and where can I get help.
-->
and where can I get help?
Micheal adjusted himself and moaned
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Michael adjusted himself and moaned,
The mysterious woman (Faith) is dying from cancer and lives in a secret cottage with her daughter, Annie, Sebastion, and Mary.
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The mysterious woman (Faith) is dying from cancer and lives in a secret cottage with her daughter, Annie, Sebastian, and Mary.
***
Sebastian is a very good dog!
Comment Written 28-Aug-2021
reply by the author on 06-Sep-2021
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Please forgive me for being so far behind on answering reviews, fixing suggestions, and thanking everyone for the kindness. Good thing a birthday only comes once a year. I posted to my family that I was cooking and for the first time in years, by house was over flowing for two days after two days of cooking. Now in three days, Matthew starts filming again and I must cook for them. This woman is tired. Thank you for all your support and kindness.
Smiles, Carol
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God bless you, my friend.
Comment from ShirleyT1
You've written another spell-binding chapter, leaving this reader wanting more! Great follow-up of the question of who took Annie, and I can't wait to see what happens next!
reply by the author on 27-Aug-2021
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You've written another spell-binding chapter, leaving this reader wanting more! Great follow-up of the question of who took Annie, and I can't wait to see what happens next!
Comment Written 27-Aug-2021
reply by the author on 27-Aug-2021
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Hurrah! I am back on and can at least try to thank you for taking the time to read and enjoy. I appreciate your time and the review.
smiles, Carol
Comment from Patty Palmer
Another great chapter of your book. I enjoyed it immensely. The characters are so real now that I've gotten to know them. One murder to another.
Good job!
xxoo
Patty
reply by the author on 27-Aug-2021
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Another great chapter of your book. I enjoyed it immensely. The characters are so real now that I've gotten to know them. One murder to another.
Good job!
xxoo
Patty
Comment Written 27-Aug-2021
reply by the author on 27-Aug-2021
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So sorry... I answered a whole page of reviews, hit save, and they vanished with the crash of my computer. Just know that I appreciate your review and enjoyment of the story.
Smiles, Carol
Comment from Elizabeth Emerald
I'm a bit behind schedule because something I was writing yesterday took priority. Hope you can forgive me. This is another stunner--glad that Michael has recovered his conscience. I thought he'd be in Mason's camp. Brilliant work!
reply by the author on 27-Aug-2021
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I'm a bit behind schedule because something I was writing yesterday took priority. Hope you can forgive me. This is another stunner--glad that Michael has recovered his conscience. I thought he'd be in Mason's camp. Brilliant work!
Comment Written 26-Aug-2021
reply by the author on 27-Aug-2021
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Thank you again for your extreme kindness. I am deeply appreciative. I think he discovered he was in over his head with Cynthia. At least I hope so. Thanks again.
smiles and hugs, Carol
Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
Where's the next part??? Will Mary recognise Liz? I'm glad she's going to the ranch to get help, Hank and Garth will be right there for her. OMG, Carol, my heart is racing! That was so exciting, but I need the next chapter! Well done again, for nearly giving me palpitations! Hugs and love, Sandra xxxx
reply by the author on 27-Aug-2021
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Where's the next part??? Will Mary recognise Liz? I'm glad she's going to the ranch to get help, Hank and Garth will be right there for her. OMG, Carol, my heart is racing! That was so exciting, but I need the next chapter! Well done again, for nearly giving me palpitations! Hugs and love, Sandra xxxx
Comment Written 26-Aug-2021
reply by the author on 27-Aug-2021
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I am writing as fast as I can and as long as the internet will cooperate. i hate getting kicked off and losing everything I have posted - reviews, thank yous, responses to other writers. Ugh!
I am off to try and write some more. The stories starting to roll downhill now... Hurrah for the good guys and Sebastian.
smiles, Carol
Comment from GregoryCody
Wow. This was scary to read. You captured the scene perfectly.
Great descriptions. Mud on pajamas, scenery, etc.
And Really good dialogue. It's not "forced". Not at all.
And whoa you got my attention right away and this is the first chapter I've read! Hard to do my friend.
Well done and well deserved :)
reply by the author on 27-Aug-2021
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Wow. This was scary to read. You captured the scene perfectly.
Great descriptions. Mud on pajamas, scenery, etc.
And Really good dialogue. It's not "forced". Not at all.
And whoa you got my attention right away and this is the first chapter I've read! Hard to do my friend.
Well done and well deserved :)
Comment Written 26-Aug-2021
reply by the author on 27-Aug-2021
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Awesome! Thank you for your thoughtfulness and the gracious review and stars. I am thrilled you enjoyed the chapter. It's a story filled with many twists and turns.
smiles, Carol
Comment from barbara.wilkey
Good! This shows Michael wants to do good. He's not as evil as Cynthia. I like that. I am pretty sure because of Cynthia, Mason has Annie. I hope Garth and Hank can get to her before she's hurt. I enjoyed reading this. Thank you for sharing.
reply by the author on 27-Aug-2021
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Good! This shows Michael wants to do good. He's not as evil as Cynthia. I like that. I am pretty sure because of Cynthia, Mason has Annie. I hope Garth and Hank can get to her before she's hurt. I enjoyed reading this. Thank you for sharing.
Comment Written 26-Aug-2021
reply by the author on 27-Aug-2021
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So sorry... I answered a whole page of reviews, hit save, and they vanished with the crash of my computer. Just know that I appreciate your review and enjoyment of the story.
Smiles, Carol