The Chronicals Of Bethica: The Rise
Viewing comments for Chapter 16 "The Chronicles Of Bethica"Abram must defeat a deadly humanoid race of beings
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Comment from robyn corum
A.,
I don't read much fantasy, but I was able to understand everything I read here and fell right in. Nice work! It sounds like these guys (and women) and in for a pretty serious task ahead. There is no easy solution and regardless of the path they choose, there will be death and destruction, pain and sadness. It's gonna get ugly... I like it! hahaha
Good job!
reply by the author on 30-Aug-2021
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A.,
I don't read much fantasy, but I was able to understand everything I read here and fell right in. Nice work! It sounds like these guys (and women) and in for a pretty serious task ahead. There is no easy solution and regardless of the path they choose, there will be death and destruction, pain and sadness. It's gonna get ugly... I like it! hahaha
Good job!
Comment Written 30-Aug-2021
reply by the author on 30-Aug-2021
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LOL! Your review is too cute. Thank you, Robyn.
Comment from lancellot
Well this is just how a classic fantasy journey should be and should go. Facing the beast, boss, or Dragon should be a choice and their should be a tangible reward for doing so. I land to live is a good one.
notes:
"I sure hope you know what you're doing."
-famous last words.
reply by the author on 30-Aug-2021
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Well this is just how a classic fantasy journey should be and should go. Facing the beast, boss, or Dragon should be a choice and their should be a tangible reward for doing so. I land to live is a good one.
notes:
"I sure hope you know what you're doing."
-famous last words.
Comment Written 30-Aug-2021
reply by the author on 30-Aug-2021
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Thank you so much for your review.
Comment from irishauthorme
Went back and read several chapters to get oriented. Found out who and what Haymen and his countrymen were. Your story moves forward well and the geographical references lend authority. Good physical description of Lord Gangus but didn't see physicals on his sons, maybe in a chapter I didn't read?
Good opponent in the dragon and looking forward to more on Drake, is his passion just for destroying, or does he have another motive?
Good story,
irish
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reply by the author on 30-Aug-2021
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Went back and read several chapters to get oriented. Found out who and what Haymen and his countrymen were. Your story moves forward well and the geographical references lend authority. Good physical description of Lord Gangus but didn't see physicals on his sons, maybe in a chapter I didn't read?
Good opponent in the dragon and looking forward to more on Drake, is his passion just for destroying, or does he have another motive?
Good story,
irish
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Comment Written 30-Aug-2021
reply by the author on 30-Aug-2021
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Thank you so much, Irish, for going back a bit before your review. I really appreciate that. Yes, descriptions are detailed in earlier chapters.
Comment from Judy Lawless
This is another excellent chapter, Amahra. The challenge will be difficult, but Gangus and his crew are determined. I worry about the Domarian women though.
Note: Missing quotation marks at the beginning of this,
I sure hope you know what you're doing."
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reply by the author on 30-Aug-2021
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This is another excellent chapter, Amahra. The challenge will be difficult, but Gangus and his crew are determined. I worry about the Domarian women though.
Note: Missing quotation marks at the beginning of this,
I sure hope you know what you're doing."
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Comment Written 30-Aug-2021
reply by the author on 30-Aug-2021
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Thank you, Judy, for your review and for catching that.
