Sailing Away
A Villanelle for kids20 total reviews
Comment from Boogienights
What a delightful children's poem. I throughly enjoyed it myself and since I'm going to be a grandma for the first time, it would be a lovely sing song verse to read. Thanks for sharing. :)
reply by the author on 25-Aug-2021
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What a delightful children's poem. I throughly enjoyed it myself and since I'm going to be a grandma for the first time, it would be a lovely sing song verse to read. Thanks for sharing. :)
Comment Written 25-Aug-2021
reply by the author on 25-Aug-2021
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Congratulations! I'm honored that you're want to read my little poem. Thank you so much!
Comment from Sugarray77
Soooo good, and it goes back to that childhood playtime that we spoke of earlier. The imagination is such a wonderful thing. I LOVED your Villanelle and it flowed along so nicely, like the roll of the sea :)
Melissa
reply by the author on 24-Aug-2021
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Soooo good, and it goes back to that childhood playtime that we spoke of earlier. The imagination is such a wonderful thing. I LOVED your Villanelle and it flowed along so nicely, like the roll of the sea :)
Melissa
Comment Written 24-Aug-2021
reply by the author on 24-Aug-2021
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Thank you. I wonder if children use their imagination like we did.
Comment from duchessofdrumborg
"Sailing Away", is an extremely well-written and deftly descriptive piece. Penned with craft and skill. This talented poet's work was a pleasure to both read and review. I look forward to seeing your next post.
reply by the author on 24-Aug-2021
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"Sailing Away", is an extremely well-written and deftly descriptive piece. Penned with craft and skill. This talented poet's work was a pleasure to both read and review. I look forward to seeing your next post.
Comment Written 24-Aug-2021
reply by the author on 24-Aug-2021
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Thank you.
You're welcome.
Comment from Pearl Edwards
Children's imagination has no limits now with all the movies and t v shows to use as their inspiration. Enjoyed your seafaring Villanelle Yvonne, tale well told. Cheers
Valda
reply by the author on 24-Aug-2021
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Children's imagination has no limits now with all the movies and t v shows to use as their inspiration. Enjoyed your seafaring Villanelle Yvonne, tale well told. Cheers
Valda
Comment Written 24-Aug-2021
reply by the author on 24-Aug-2021
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Thank you. Do children still play that way?
Comment from Robert Zimmerman
Hello Ivan.
Your Villanelle poem meets the style standard as I understand it. I think the poem will appeal to every little boy because every one of them probably wanted to be a pirate at one time or another during their childhood.
The only thing that ruined the pirate's voyage was hearing mother calling from the door. I'm sure all pirates dreaded that. HAHAHA
Robert
reply by the author on 24-Aug-2021
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Hello Ivan.
Your Villanelle poem meets the style standard as I understand it. I think the poem will appeal to every little boy because every one of them probably wanted to be a pirate at one time or another during their childhood.
The only thing that ruined the pirate's voyage was hearing mother calling from the door. I'm sure all pirates dreaded that. HAHAHA
Robert
Comment Written 23-Aug-2021
reply by the author on 24-Aug-2021
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Hahahaha. That put a damper on the trip. Thanks so much.
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You're very welcome.
Comment from judiverse
This really shows a child's imagination at work. I would warn the crew to take something besides bread and cheese to eat, to ward off scurvy. Great repeating lines. They make it seem so real for the boys, and they feel free to travel anywhere they please. I like that you got in that "and go were none have gone before." Of course reality in the form of Mom sets in. This is delightful. judi
reply by the author on 23-Aug-2021
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This really shows a child's imagination at work. I would warn the crew to take something besides bread and cheese to eat, to ward off scurvy. Great repeating lines. They make it seem so real for the boys, and they feel free to travel anywhere they please. I like that you got in that "and go were none have gone before." Of course reality in the form of Mom sets in. This is delightful. judi
Comment Written 23-Aug-2021
reply by the author on 23-Aug-2021
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Thank you so much. I never thought it would receive much attention. I was just piddling around with it. lol
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You're welcome, and children certainly could relate to it. judi
Comment from Dawn Munro
This is adorable! You should have entered it in a contest, IMHO -- I think it would win hands down. The Villanelle isn't the easiest of forms in the first place, and you've told a story with yours that's so charming -- that last stanza has me picturing the whole thing! Wonderful flow and choice of repeating lines, Yvonne.
reply by the author on 23-Aug-2021
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This is adorable! You should have entered it in a contest, IMHO -- I think it would win hands down. The Villanelle isn't the easiest of forms in the first place, and you've told a story with yours that's so charming -- that last stanza has me picturing the whole thing! Wonderful flow and choice of repeating lines, Yvonne.
Comment Written 23-Aug-2021
reply by the author on 23-Aug-2021
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Thank you so much for this wonderful review! I'm so happy you like it.
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It was a pleasure. I'm still grinning.
Comment from lyenochka
You always do so well with these repeating forms, Yvonne! Of course, I could guess that it was young boys with their great imaginations sailing the seas. How fun! Wish today's young ones could imagine like that.
reply by the author on 23-Aug-2021
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You always do so well with these repeating forms, Yvonne! Of course, I could guess that it was young boys with their great imaginations sailing the seas. How fun! Wish today's young ones could imagine like that.
Comment Written 23-Aug-2021
reply by the author on 23-Aug-2021
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I don't think they "play like" that anymore. What a shame. Thanks, Helen.
Comment from Janice Canerdy
Your villanelle is exceptional in every respect--skillfully and creatively composed and delightfully expressive, conveying a powerful message
about adventurous aspirations and the blessing of imagination.
reply by the author on 23-Aug-2021
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Your villanelle is exceptional in every respect--skillfully and creatively composed and delightfully expressive, conveying a powerful message
about adventurous aspirations and the blessing of imagination.
Comment Written 23-Aug-2021
reply by the author on 23-Aug-2021
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Thank you for such a wonderful review.
Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose
Villanelle for kids
Sailing Away
by damommy
This reminded me of Star Track "go where none have gone before." LoL good line.
The rhymes do not seem forced. Your poem flows well. It draws on emotions and it presents strong images.
reply by the author on 23-Aug-2021
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Villanelle for kids
Sailing Away
by damommy
This reminded me of Star Track "go where none have gone before." LoL good line.
The rhymes do not seem forced. Your poem flows well. It draws on emotions and it presents strong images.
Comment Written 23-Aug-2021
reply by the author on 23-Aug-2021
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Thank you. I appreciate your input.
