Lucy Furr
fomented frustration6 total reviews
Comment from strandregs
Very interesting take Katharine
Because you are the vile malicious Narcissist.
Which could be called
The devil in disguise.
A pleasure to read with a soft ending. :-))Z.
reply by the author on 29-Aug-2021
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Very interesting take Katharine
Because you are the vile malicious Narcissist.
Which could be called
The devil in disguise.
A pleasure to read with a soft ending. :-))Z.
Comment Written 29-Aug-2021
reply by the author on 29-Aug-2021
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Thanks, Z, but hopefully, I'm not the vile, malicious Narcissist. I just thought it was a different take on a disguise.
Comment from Mary Shifman
I liked the story--I didn't like Lucy Furr. You have clever word play, too. Poor Allen--he should never have rubbed the Furr the wrong way! Oh well, that's a really bad pun, I know. I didn't realize who Lucy was so I didn't catch the play on words until the end. I was thinking Furr as in an animal of some sort. Good job;.
reply by the author on 24-Aug-2021
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I liked the story--I didn't like Lucy Furr. You have clever word play, too. Poor Allen--he should never have rubbed the Furr the wrong way! Oh well, that's a really bad pun, I know. I didn't realize who Lucy was so I didn't catch the play on words until the end. I was thinking Furr as in an animal of some sort. Good job;.
Comment Written 24-Aug-2021
reply by the author on 24-Aug-2021
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no, I like your pun, plus I'm glad I fooled you until the end.
Thanks for reading and for your comments!
Comment from nor84
I don't see anyone "in" a disguise, which I take to mean wearing one, but I could have missed it. Otherwise the story is good. Best of luck in the Disguised Contest.
reply by the author on 24-Aug-2021
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I don't see anyone "in" a disguise, which I take to mean wearing one, but I could have missed it. Otherwise the story is good. Best of luck in the Disguised Contest.
Comment Written 24-Aug-2021
reply by the author on 24-Aug-2021
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Lucy Furr was Lucifer in disguise.
Comment from NABattaglia
I agree the disguise was obvious! Well done! Some little edits I'd make are just adding a space after the ellipses where you sometimes have the three-period pause and the word starts right away. I would add a space like at the end: "the owners are asking...you have?" I would make it "the owners are asking... you have?" There are a few of those. Otherwise this is a really solid entry into the contest--good luck!!!!
reply by the author on 23-Aug-2021
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I agree the disguise was obvious! Well done! Some little edits I'd make are just adding a space after the ellipses where you sometimes have the three-period pause and the word starts right away. I would add a space like at the end: "the owners are asking...you have?" I would make it "the owners are asking... you have?" There are a few of those. Otherwise this is a really solid entry into the contest--good luck!!!!
Comment Written 23-Aug-2021
reply by the author on 23-Aug-2021
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thank you for your comments. Headed out the door, but will correct them later. I appreciate the suggestion. I wasn't sure where the space went - as you can see.
also, welcome to Fan Story!
Comment from Benjamin Clayton
Very nice and naughty at the same time. I have never dated Lucifer or a girl named Lucy Furr for that matter. But, I know those who have the devil inside them, that's for sure.
I think this will make for a very competitive piece in the contest. Excellent job.
reply by the author on 23-Aug-2021
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Very nice and naughty at the same time. I have never dated Lucifer or a girl named Lucy Furr for that matter. But, I know those who have the devil inside them, that's for sure.
I think this will make for a very competitive piece in the contest. Excellent job.
Comment Written 22-Aug-2021
reply by the author on 23-Aug-2021
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thanks, Benjamin! I appreciate your very nice comments!
Comment from dellsworthpoet
A nice story with a twist. I fully enjoyed it.
The pacing is good. The dialogue is believable. The read is smooth without any obvious bumps.
A good read. Thank you for sharing.
reply by the author on 23-Aug-2021
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A nice story with a twist. I fully enjoyed it.
The pacing is good. The dialogue is believable. The read is smooth without any obvious bumps.
A good read. Thank you for sharing.
Comment Written 22-Aug-2021
reply by the author on 23-Aug-2021
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And thank you for your very nice comments!
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You are welcome.
