Bending the Rules
Looking back in time....27 total reviews
Comment from Sandra Barlow
Oooo! Spooky. I don't know why, but I thought of Sarah Mclachlan's Angel.
So, where were the boys? Do the boys go to a different place because they are boys, or did they go to Hell? Just asking.
Does it end there? It could go on a bit longer.
I want my print to be as big as yours and as dark. How do I get it?
Sandra xxx
reply by the author on 30-Aug-2021
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Oooo! Spooky. I don't know why, but I thought of Sarah Mclachlan's Angel.
So, where were the boys? Do the boys go to a different place because they are boys, or did they go to Hell? Just asking.
Does it end there? It could go on a bit longer.
I want my print to be as big as yours and as dark. How do I get it?
Sandra xxx
Comment Written 30-Aug-2021
reply by the author on 30-Aug-2021
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It was a contest with limited words so yes it ends there. They were being questioned to determine where they will be going.
Thanks so much for reading.
Smiles, Carol
Comment from dragonpoet
What a horrible way to die. To be killed by a drunk driver who is your father. God would not let them remember that. Or if he did he would let them meet him and forgive him.
Interesting view of heaven as a movie set with wings as wardrobe.
Keep writing and stay healthy
Congrats on placing in the contest.
Joan
reply by the author on 29-Aug-2021
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What a horrible way to die. To be killed by a drunk driver who is your father. God would not let them remember that. Or if he did he would let them meet him and forgive him.
Interesting view of heaven as a movie set with wings as wardrobe.
Keep writing and stay healthy
Congrats on placing in the contest.
Joan
Comment Written 29-Aug-2021
reply by the author on 29-Aug-2021
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Thanks Joan... I didn't know if people would get what was happening, but I hoped my message would get across and of course, they will never remember any of the sadness. At lest, I hope Heaven works that way.
Thank you so much. Smiles and hugs, Carol
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Don't mention it, Carol. I believe they won't remember it either.
Joan
Comment from ShirleyT1
Wow! I didn't see the ending of the story coming like that! What a great job in holding the reader in suspense from start to finish. You did an excellent job with the fast pace of the story, and containing it all in flash fiction. Best wishes in the contest!
reply by the author on 23-Aug-2021
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Wow! I didn't see the ending of the story coming like that! What a great job in holding the reader in suspense from start to finish. You did an excellent job with the fast pace of the story, and containing it all in flash fiction. Best wishes in the contest!
Comment Written 22-Aug-2021
reply by the author on 23-Aug-2021
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Oh Shirley..how awesome of you to make my day with your review and the stars. I am thrilled you were surprised with the ending.
Smiles, Carol
Comment from Patty Palmer
Wonderful!! This is really good! The story moved very fast because of the fast fiction, but you got in every little detail so the reader can almost see the girls in the mansion. Great job! Good luck with the contest!
xxoo Patty
reply by the author on 23-Aug-2021
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Wonderful!! This is really good! The story moved very fast because of the fast fiction, but you got in every little detail so the reader can almost see the girls in the mansion. Great job! Good luck with the contest!
xxoo Patty
Comment Written 22-Aug-2021
reply by the author on 23-Aug-2021
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It appears I am falling further and further behind, please forgive me. I appreciate the kindness of your review and am thrilled that you continue to enjoy it. Sending my thanks and a smile, Carol
Comment from Mary Vigasin
This is a very well and interesting story. You keep your reader guessing until the end.
It is very creative and imaginative. I think your reader also experiences that out-of-body experience.
Good luck in the contest.
Regards,
Mary
reply by the author on 23-Aug-2021
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This is a very well and interesting story. You keep your reader guessing until the end.
It is very creative and imaginative. I think your reader also experiences that out-of-body experience.
Good luck in the contest.
Regards,
Mary
Comment Written 21-Aug-2021
reply by the author on 23-Aug-2021
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It appears I am falling further and further behind, please forgive me. I appreciate the kindness of your review and am thrilled that you continue to enjoy it. Sending my thanks and a smile, Carol
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no apology is needed. I get behind myself.
Have a good day
mary
Comment from Jesse James Doty
Whoa, this was very enjoyable to read. The dialogue was excellent and, I would give you a sixer if I had one to give. I don't usually go for this type of story but, I had fun reading this.
What a way to go, huh!? Being abused by her father who was drunk and, being molested by the boys, made their lives miserable while they were alive. Thank Heaven they have a chance to start over again! Thank you for taking me on this ride of a flash fiction story.
Have a wonderful weekend,
Jesse
reply by the author on 23-Aug-2021
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Whoa, this was very enjoyable to read. The dialogue was excellent and, I would give you a sixer if I had one to give. I don't usually go for this type of story but, I had fun reading this.
What a way to go, huh!? Being abused by her father who was drunk and, being molested by the boys, made their lives miserable while they were alive. Thank Heaven they have a chance to start over again! Thank you for taking me on this ride of a flash fiction story.
Have a wonderful weekend,
Jesse
Comment Written 21-Aug-2021
reply by the author on 23-Aug-2021
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It appears I am falling further and further behind, please forgive me. I appreciate the kindness of your review and am thrilled that you continue to enjoy it. Sending my thanks and a smile, Carol
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Good morning, Carol. No worries, I take plenty of time to answer my reviews when I post. I am glad you liked my review.
Smiles all around,
Jesse
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I was making sure I answered that day or the next, but now I am falling behind and I want to answer each one with a personal note and a thank you. Many just send a short Thanks and move on. Smiles and hugs, Carol
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You are so kind to add a personal touch to your thank yous. I try to do the very same thing.
Brava for taking the needed time!
Jesse
Comment from Susan Newell
I like the way you led us down another road with reference to the boys and loss of memory. I thought the girls might have been drugged and kidnapped by a weirdo due to the gowns. Nice switch at the end to having the father be an irresponsible drunkard and the girls becoming welcomed to heaven.
reply by the author on 21-Aug-2021
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I like the way you led us down another road with reference to the boys and loss of memory. I thought the girls might have been drugged and kidnapped by a weirdo due to the gowns. Nice switch at the end to having the father be an irresponsible drunkard and the girls becoming welcomed to heaven.
Comment Written 21-Aug-2021
reply by the author on 21-Aug-2021
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Good morning, Sue... I was worried something might be wrong since I missed you yesterday. Or is something not settled?
thanks for reading the story and glad that I was able to fool you until the end. Appreciate the review. Smiles, Carol
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Too much heat and humidity to function. Still bad this a.m., with thick fog.
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That hurricane won't make it up to you will it? We are in the 90s and lots of humidity.
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It could. We're inland, but they can still wreak havoc. I'm hoping it doesn't coincide with scheduled medical. procedure. It could make travel and electricity sketchy.
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Medical? You or Walt's?
Comment from royowen
Yes, this is not the first time this has happened, in fact a lot of people have born witness to this "out of body" experience. But no writer has ever described more perfectly than you Carol, oh yes indeed, an excellent work from the view point of that virtual uninterrupted passing from this "tent" to the the new one. Beautifully written dear Carol, good luck, you deserve it. Blessings Roy
reply by the author on 20-Aug-2021
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Yes, this is not the first time this has happened, in fact a lot of people have born witness to this "out of body" experience. But no writer has ever described more perfectly than you Carol, oh yes indeed, an excellent work from the view point of that virtual uninterrupted passing from this "tent" to the the new one. Beautifully written dear Carol, good luck, you deserve it. Blessings Roy
Comment Written 20-Aug-2021
reply by the author on 20-Aug-2021
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Thank you so much, Roy. My husband had a heart attack as they were taking him off the operating table. They had to use the paddles several times. He told me that he saw it and he saw my daughter Wendy (who had passed). He told me she sent him back to me. I guess that's where the emotions for the story came from.
Smiles and hugs, Carol
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Wow, that?s some testimony Carol
Comment from Carol Clark2
Great future flash fiction! You write amazing stories. I like that you had the girls witness their deaths, but they won't remember it. Blessings. Carol
reply by the author on 20-Aug-2021
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Great future flash fiction! You write amazing stories. I like that you had the girls witness their deaths, but they won't remember it. Blessings. Carol
Comment Written 20-Aug-2021
reply by the author on 20-Aug-2021
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Thanks, Carol. I couldn't think of any other way to show it was in the future before the crash... so if they saw it and then forgot it, it would be okay. Thanks for the review. Smiles and hugs, Carol
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Well done, my friend. Smiles and hugs back.
Comment from estory
This is an interesting peak at heaven, as we see these girls who don't quite know yet they have died starting to navigate the afterlife, as if they were still in this one. Its an interesting premise and it works in that the jarring effect of realizing you have not made it through the car crash sinks in and shakes you into your new reality. estory
reply by the author on 20-Aug-2021
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This is an interesting peak at heaven, as we see these girls who don't quite know yet they have died starting to navigate the afterlife, as if they were still in this one. Its an interesting premise and it works in that the jarring effect of realizing you have not made it through the car crash sinks in and shakes you into your new reality. estory
Comment Written 20-Aug-2021
reply by the author on 20-Aug-2021
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Yes, thankfully they were whisked to a "way-station" until their actual death and then discovered they were angels. thank you for the kind review.
Smiles, Carol