The Final Tale of Chicken LIttle
Sometimes the sky really is falling...14 total reviews
Comment from AliMom
I love your story. It is post-pandemic traumatic but it is indicative of where we are going if we don't shape up. Your character is well drawn in spite of the relatively few words used to tell us who she is. I also believe and hope. Both emotions come through so clearly in your tale.
reply by the author on 04-Sep-2021
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I love your story. It is post-pandemic traumatic but it is indicative of where we are going if we don't shape up. Your character is well drawn in spite of the relatively few words used to tell us who she is. I also believe and hope. Both emotions come through so clearly in your tale.
Comment Written 04-Sep-2021
reply by the author on 04-Sep-2021
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Thank you, Ali! I so appreciate your kindness and rating. I agree - we need to shape up. I have grandkids who need a world to inherit! I'm a bit ashamed to come from the generation that was going to fix everything and turned into the business moguls and monsters who kept making it worse, but it's not too late to fix the damage.
Thank you again, and let's find a way to save this place. :)
Blessings,
Deb
Comment from dragonpoet
This is a tale of what happens if we don't work on global warming now. It does almost seem possible. Which is sad. She committed suicide because of her depression. I wonder who decided who the 7000 people to be saved would be.
I have seen a few people here who have written poems that talked about the end times or in notes said it seemed like it was coming.
Congrats on placing second in the contest.
Keep writing and stay healthy
dragonpoet
reply by the author on 28-Aug-2021
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This is a tale of what happens if we don't work on global warming now. It does almost seem possible. Which is sad. She committed suicide because of her depression. I wonder who decided who the 7000 people to be saved would be.
I have seen a few people here who have written poems that talked about the end times or in notes said it seemed like it was coming.
Congrats on placing second in the contest.
Keep writing and stay healthy
dragonpoet
Comment Written 28-Aug-2021
reply by the author on 28-Aug-2021
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Thank you! It was a shock to me. lol
Blessings,
Deb
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My pleasure, Debora. It was well deserved.
Joan
Comment from Elizabeth Emerald
SSSSSStupendous! Congratulations on your prize for this stunner. A masterpiece--brilliantly rendered from POV of the one who knows they're all doomed. Vivid imagery, taut narration. IngeniouSSSSSS. CheerSSSSSS. LIZ
reply by the author on 25-Aug-2021
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SSSSSStupendous! Congratulations on your prize for this stunner. A masterpiece--brilliantly rendered from POV of the one who knows they're all doomed. Vivid imagery, taut narration. IngeniouSSSSSS. CheerSSSSSS. LIZ
Comment Written 25-Aug-2021
reply by the author on 25-Aug-2021
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You crack me up! Thank you for the laugh.
And, of course, for the kind and generous review and special rating.
I sssssso appreciate you, Liz!
Blessings,
Debs
Comment from Rolen K. West
Fun that her last name is Hubbard. :) I felt like the main character was described very well. I could see her there and even feel her posture. Be careful not to overuse exclamation points and ellipses. Was the calculation until lockdown supposed to be inaccurate? It would have been an interesting final flaw, but I feel unclear about it. I also entered this contest and wrote and end-of-the-world piece, as did the first place winner. I'm not usually so pessimistic either!
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reply by the author on 25-Aug-2021
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Fun that her last name is Hubbard. :) I felt like the main character was described very well. I could see her there and even feel her posture. Be careful not to overuse exclamation points and ellipses. Was the calculation until lockdown supposed to be inaccurate? It would have been an interesting final flaw, but I feel unclear about it. I also entered this contest and wrote and end-of-the-world piece, as did the first place winner. I'm not usually so pessimistic either!
This rating does not count towards story rating or author rank.
The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 25-Aug-2021
reply by the author on 25-Aug-2021
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OMGoodness! I didn't even catch her last name. I asked my grandson for a name and he gave it to me, not knowing at all what the title of the story was or what was happening in it. lol, That's crazy.
And yes, I do overuse ellipses, but exclamation points? I usually steer clear of them like poison. Interesting... I'll go change that (if I ever decide to use this elsewhere). Thank you.
And thank you for the congrats, the helpful review, and an honest rating. I appreciate it all.
Blessings,
Deb
And I'm going to pop over to your story and read. I didn't get to read entries to this due to other obligations. Thanks again. :)
Comment from Midi O'Rourke
This is great! I can see why it was the contest winner. Very clever and good writing. I agree with you. The earth will survive and will have life, but maybe not human. Many congrats on your win.
reply by the author on 25-Aug-2021
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This is great! I can see why it was the contest winner. Very clever and good writing. I agree with you. The earth will survive and will have life, but maybe not human. Many congrats on your win.
Comment Written 25-Aug-2021
reply by the author on 25-Aug-2021
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What?
I literally had no idea I'd won until your sweet message! I looked twice, then scampered over to the homepage. lol. I'm in shock, but am grateful for your congratulations and your info!
Blessings,
Deb
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Funny
Comment from Cindy Warren
That's scary, but I suppose if the sky had to fall, I'd want it to be over quickly. Would they really be able to save anybody? I doubt it. I think you're right about that. A handful of people may survive for a while, but what would they rebuild with? Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 19-Aug-2021
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That's scary, but I suppose if the sky had to fall, I'd want it to be over quickly. Would they really be able to save anybody? I doubt it. I think you're right about that. A handful of people may survive for a while, but what would they rebuild with? Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 19-Aug-2021
reply by the author on 19-Aug-2021
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Thank you, Cindy. I'm not sure how you'd rebuild on a dead world, but that fighting spirit of survival... But I'm not sure Dixie isn't right -- it would be a pipe dream.
Hopefully, we can figure out how to stop the damage before it's to that point.
Sorry to be so glum! I do appreciate your reading and your thoughtful comments.
Blessings,
Deb
Comment from Pearl Edwards
It is indeed a dark story Deb. I do like the reference to the Ark in the final line. You built this story well through Dixie's eyes and her acceptance that it was all coming to an end. I enjoyed it. Cheers
Valda
reply by the author on 19-Aug-2021
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It is indeed a dark story Deb. I do like the reference to the Ark in the final line. You built this story well through Dixie's eyes and her acceptance that it was all coming to an end. I enjoyed it. Cheers
Valda
Comment Written 19-Aug-2021
reply by the author on 19-Aug-2021
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Thank you, Valda. Hopefully we'll never hit this point. It's just tie to step up and take on the new challenge of... Responsibility? Respect? Probably of both!
Thank you for reading and for your thoughtful comments,
Blessings
Deb
Comment from AJ McCall
Wow. Deb, this is a 'dark thing'. But it definitely opens up the conversation about things that might actually be like this story. I have hope in God as well, that he is doing his will on this earth. But I'm really, really impressed. I'm sure you're gonna win. No, I know you're going to win, lol.
I did notice one typo: Rebuild what? (she) wanted to ask. - Rebuild what? She wanted to ask.
I'll see ya later!! SIX STARS!
reply by the author on 19-Aug-2021
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Wow. Deb, this is a 'dark thing'. But it definitely opens up the conversation about things that might actually be like this story. I have hope in God as well, that he is doing his will on this earth. But I'm really, really impressed. I'm sure you're gonna win. No, I know you're going to win, lol.
I did notice one typo: Rebuild what? (she) wanted to ask. - Rebuild what? She wanted to ask.
I'll see ya later!! SIX STARS!
Comment Written 19-Aug-2021
reply by the author on 19-Aug-2021
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Thank you so much, Asha!
I wondered about that spot... If I had it in single quotation marks, it would be correct. But... I think you're right. Or maybe either is okay. I'll change it just in case. lol
Your wit and warmth are always appreciated. And I'm with you -- God is in control. He puts powers into place for a reason.
I"m reading a book by Tim LaHaye right now -- not one of his fictional works, but a HEAVY read. He explained it as follows: God keeps us in a state of political instability because the time of one government has not yet come. People have tried -- Napoleon, Hitler, the Communist party, Alcaida (not sure of that spelling...). But it's not time. So God keeps the political cards shuffling until the time He has chosen. It's a good book. Hard, but excellent.
Anyhow, that's awful long for a reply to a review! lol
Blessings, sweet friend.
Deb
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Aww, you're welcome Deb! You always manage to make me smile every time I read your replies, LOL. Sounds like an interesting read. I'll have to look it up. And don't worry about the length Deb, I always enjoy a good conversation!
Comment from lyenochka
Yes, it could be like that when the world ends. I think you created an engaging story and the sense of panic. I am not quite sure how the Chicken Little story fits in other than his "sky is falling" but in that story, it was not true, and Chicken Little ends up causing the death of his friends. Here the threat was true and the Ark reminds me of Noah and the destruction of the world back then.
Best wishes in the contest!
reply by the author on 19-Aug-2021
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Yes, it could be like that when the world ends. I think you created an engaging story and the sense of panic. I am not quite sure how the Chicken Little story fits in other than his "sky is falling" but in that story, it was not true, and Chicken Little ends up causing the death of his friends. Here the threat was true and the Ark reminds me of Noah and the destruction of the world back then.
Best wishes in the contest!
Comment Written 19-Aug-2021
reply by the author on 19-Aug-2021
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Well, I guess the title didn't tie in as well as I'd hoped. lol
But that's okay. It's certainly NOT my best work! lol
I do appreciate your review and comments, Helen. They are always welcome and enjoyed.
Blessings,
Deb
Comment from royowen
I think we've all read something at some stage, as being a harbinger of doom, the flood was a classic example, or God telling a despairing Elijah, who said he was the only one, and God saying He had reserved 7,000 unto Himself, who had bowed the knee to Baal. Beautifully written, good luck Deb, blessings Roy
reply by the author on 19-Aug-2021
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I think we've all read something at some stage, as being a harbinger of doom, the flood was a classic example, or God telling a despairing Elijah, who said he was the only one, and God saying He had reserved 7,000 unto Himself, who had bowed the knee to Baal. Beautifully written, good luck Deb, blessings Roy
Comment Written 19-Aug-2021
reply by the author on 19-Aug-2021
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Thank you, Roy. I'd forgotten that promise of God to Elijah. But he had set 7,000 aside for Himself and used them to rebuild faithfulness.
I chose that number because it takes 7,000 people to rebuild a gene pool. lol. It's interesting that God chose that number, too, aside from the spiritual implications. Cool!
Blessings, my friend,
Debs
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Of course add a 1000 and you have 8000, the number of new beginnings, God gives us clues, that?s what I love to ponder, it?s like an Easter egg hunt.
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Love that image of God's mysteries! You ought to do something with that!
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Yes He is amazing.