Comment from HarryT

Excellent

Excellent work expressing the mechanical and thus dehumanizing effect of social media. The goal the author set for himself was accomplished. I have mixed feelings about commas not being used, but of course this is the author's choice. This effort is an enjoyable read and one that makes much sense to me.

 Comment Written 19-Aug-2021

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reply by the author on 19-Aug-2021

Thanks so much for the excellent review and your words of support for this piece. As for the mechanics; I wanted a more data stream feel to the flow here, a density of pattern and that's why I went with this somewhat experimental format. I like to be on the edge sometimes. estory

reply by HarryT on 19-Aug-2021

I do understand creating the feeling of the continually data stream. It does work.

Comment from Seshadri_Sreenivasan

Excellent

We live in a digital world and there is no time and space in the digital world. We should use the digital world to improve our knowledge and quality of life. We were born in the physical world and have definitely come a long way. Your uniquely written poem is thought-provoking. Thanks for sharing.

 Comment Written 19-Aug-2021

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reply by the author on 19-Aug-2021

Thanks so much for all the continued support of this series. I like that; 'thought provoking.' That's one of the biggest compliments I've gotten. I like to make people think. I myself don't even have a cell phone. estory

Comment from amahra

Excellent

And we click on 5 stars. LOL Sorry, couldn't resist it. This is not only a great poem but it's so original. You're absolutely right. Either our phones or computers, we click all day.

 Comment Written 18-Aug-2021

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reply by the author on 19-Aug-2021

Thanks for the excellent review and I liked the witty response here in the form of my poem. Great flattery. I appreciate all the words of support for my little piece. estory

Comment from Mary Shifman

Excellent

Well, this creates a heavy, oppressive mood, which I think it's meant to do. I can't tell you how tired I get of never being able to get a real person on the phone, needing a smart app just to hook up a printer Technology is supposed to make things easier, bring people closer, but in reality. it creates buffers so that we don't have to meet face to face, feel that we can say things and not be held accountable, and so on. Your poem sums it up very nicely. Good job.

 Comment Written 17-Aug-2021

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reply by the author on 18-Aug-2021

Thanks for the excellent review and for your detailed comments supporting the piece. I am glad it seems I was able to convey what I wanted to get across here, the trivialization of our experience of life and love. I wanted to try a different approach to making music here, with a very dense sound pattern. estory

Comment from Jasmine Girl

Excellent

You are so right on about our electronic life. It's a little scary that we are more and more related via the computer and less and less interacting with human directly. Covid definitely has pushed it forward. I have been working form home mostly for over a year now. I don't see many people at all except for my husband. I have many virtual friends like you. This reminds me of the movie Matrix where human were hooked up to a tube continuously which is the internet and cell phone and computers.

Well done.

 Comment Written 17-Aug-2021

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reply by the author on 18-Aug-2021

Thanks for the excellent review and for your comments supporting the piece. You got the theme exactly here, and I am glad the poem was able to articulate this so successfully. We are social creatures designed to use our bodies in interacting and the machine made world hollows this out, I believe. estory

Comment from tfawcus

Exceptional

Clicking. You've certainly put your finger on it. How all-encompassing this simple act with one's forefinger has become. It used to be an appendage that defined our emotions in wide sweeps and thrusts but now seems capable of little more than a nervous tic. Your poem mirrors the frenetic speed of our unthinking responses to life in the virtual world. Nicely done.

 Comment Written 16-Aug-2021

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reply by the author on 18-Aug-2021

Thanks again for all the support and the sixer, I appreciate it very much. estory

Comment from royowen

Excellent

It's true that virtual reality is seemingly cold an contactless, but is it any different fro next door neighbour contact? I've developed some closeness with friends I've made here, and the experience maybe like for you, but for others?...beautifully and differently written my friend, blessings Roy

 Comment Written 16-Aug-2021

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reply by the author on 18-Aug-2021

Thanks for the excellent review and for the interesting comments on the poem. In some ways you are right, there is an element of connecting to people in some way that you wouldn't have without technology, but it is not ideal and probably would be better if we could meet in person in a round table somewhere. It would be much more authentic. you lose all the body language and the authenticity through social media. This is really the only site I spend much time on at all on social media. estory

reply by royowen on 18-Aug-2021

Appearance seems to make a strong impression too, people judge disablement, size, looks, height, weight etc. good looking, tall people fare best in eye contact, Jesus was deliberately ?ordinary?, whereas king Saul was a favourite, look at the difference in character?

Comment from dellsworthpoet

Excellent

Interesting. But it is one step further. We emogi, reverting back to hieroglyphics, a digital grunt.

I like the repeating of "click" giving the poem a mechanical feel. Unfortunately it does work much this way. The words also are well chosen to give the feel of loss. The poem reads well.

The taking of personal out of interpersonal relations.

A good read, even if the subject is uncomfortable. Thanks for sharing.

 Comment Written 16-Aug-2021

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reply by the author on 18-Aug-2021

Thanks for the excellent review and your interesting comments in support of the poem. I like to make people think, and sometimes it means delving into areas that are uncomfortable. But that's the only way you can confront these issues. By bringing them up. estory

reply by dellsworthpoet on 18-Aug-2021

You are most welcome.

Comment from Raffaelina Lowcock

Excellent

You are quite right and your depiction is very good. A day spent at the computer doing all that clicking and communicating does make one feel like they are quite distant from real life.

Ralf

 Comment Written 16-Aug-2021

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reply by the author on 18-Aug-2021

Thanks for the excellent review and I am glad the poem was able to articulate this sense of the emptiness and trivialization of experience through computers. estory

Comment from Sally Law

Excellent

Well, life does feel empty when reduced to mechanics. Human connections are so important and connecting to God. This pandemic has killed us thrice!
Sending you my best today as always, dear friend,
Sal XOs

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 Comment Written 16-Aug-2021

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reply by the author on 18-Aug-2021

Thanks so much for the excellent review and all your continued support for this series. You are on the page as I am. estory