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A Slow Demise

a 5-7-5 poetic form

31 total reviews 
Comment from Dawn Munro
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Oh, how witty -- yes, those crows certainly did 'murder' that poor ol' guy, ripping the stuffing out of him. (LOL) This is wonderful wordplay and a highly creative 5-7-5. I see how it won! Congratulations on this charmer.

 Comment Written 23-Aug-2021

reply by the author on 23-Aug-2021
    Hello Dawn. Thank you for your comments. It was a fun one to create for the contest. :). Hope you have a lovely day.

    Melissa
reply by Dawn Munro on 23-Aug-2021
    It was very much my pleasure.
Comment from pome lover
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VERY good! and congratulations on winning the contest. Also on receiving All Time Best and for being recognized. Goodness!
I can see why you did. Your words succinctly tell the story and also give to some, a new definition of the word, murder. Very nice.
Katharine

 Comment Written 22-Aug-2021

reply by the author on 23-Aug-2021
    Hello Katharine. Thank you so very much for your wonderful review and comments. It was a fun one to create and use word play as the focus. These little ones need a bit of ..umph.. to make them jump a little ;). Thanks again!

    Melissa
Comment from Elizabeth Emerald
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Congrats on your prize for this whimsical 5-7-5--spot-on title complements the theme--you nailed the imagery of stuffing depletion. A murder of/by crows!

 Comment Written 22-Aug-2021

reply by the author on 22-Aug-2021
    Thank you so much, Liz! It was fun to try to think up something with so few syllables to work with for this one. :). So glad you liked it.

    Melissa
Comment from zanya
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What a wonderful combination and choice of language to produce this little gem in the 5/7/5 format - amazing what can be conveyed in so few words - congrats on winning!

 Comment Written 21-Aug-2021

reply by the author on 21-Aug-2021
    Hello Zanya. Thank you for your lovely comments. I am so surprised this little poem ranked!! I am delighted you like it!!

    Melissa

Comment from dragonpoet
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Melissa,
This is a witty 5-7-5 poem that describe what crows to do scarecrows.
I like the pun with murder of crows. With murder being a group of crows and what they are doing to the scarecrow.
Congrats on winning the contest.
Keep writing and stay healthy
Joan

 Comment Written 21-Aug-2021

reply by the author on 21-Aug-2021
    Hello sweet Joan. Thank you so very much!! I am so surprised at the selection. There are so many good writers/poets on FS!!

    Melissa
reply by dragonpoet on 21-Aug-2021
    Melissa,
    You are most kindly welcome and well deserving of the win.
    Joan
Comment from karenina
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I can see why you took first place! Very clever! I started humming "If I Only Had a Brain"--my fave song from The Wizard of Oz!
Murder of crows indeed!

Karenina



 Comment Written 21-Aug-2021

reply by the author on 21-Aug-2021
    Haha, thanks so much Karenina. I have not thought of that song in years, now its in my head :). So glad you enjoyed this little verse. It was fun and put me in the mood for Autumn.

    Melissa

reply by karenina on 21-Aug-2021
    The "Scarecrow" was always my favorite character in that movie... I couldn't help thinking about him and his song!--Karenina
Comment from Contests

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A contest winning entry! A seven star rating from the Contest Committee for posting the winning contest entry.

 Comment Written 21-Aug-2021

reply by the author on 21-Aug-2021
    Thank you very much. I am delighted you liked this little verse :)

    Melissa
Comment from Seshadri_Sreenivasan
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An interesting shot poem. I can recognize the author by the uniqueness of the subject. Mistress/ master of Japanese poetry. Beautifully penned short poem. Well done. Good luck!

 Comment Written 19-Aug-2021

reply by the author on 19-Aug-2021
    Hello Seshadri. Thank you very much for your wonderful comments!! Much appreciated.

    Melissa
Comment from Gloria ....
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LOL, too cute. And let this be a warning to farmers to not make their scarecrows so cute, that the crows pull out all of its stuffing.

Great job with your entry into the contest, and I wish you much luck with the Committee. :))

Gloria

 Comment Written 17-Aug-2021

reply by the author on 19-Aug-2021
    Hello dear Gloria. Thank you very much for your wonderful comments!! Much appreciated.

    Melissa
Comment from judiverse
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I thought the purpose of a scarecrow was to scare the crows away? Obviously, it isn't working. Maybe they should have made the scarecrow look scarier? This is a great, unique subject for the contest, and best of luck. "Murder of crows" makes for a great line. That's what they're called. judi

 Comment Written 17-Aug-2021

reply by the author on 19-Aug-2021
    Hello sweet Judi. Thank you very much for your wonderful comments!! Much appreciated.

    Melissa
reply by judiverse on 19-Aug-2021
    You're very welcome. We always have a bunch of crows hanging around in the winter. I'd hate to see a bunch of them together when I was out walking. judi