The Walking Dead Rats
Dead rats rule.11 total reviews
Comment from Rdfrdmom2
This is an interesting story that could use a little work. Some of your sentences and paragraphs need better structure. I noted a few grammatical things for you below. The top line in each couplet is what you wrote - the bottom line is my suggestion for improvement. Good luck in the contest.
The felines run away from their lives. >>>
The felines run away for their lives.
the dead rats are doing their jobs. >>>
The dead rats are doing their jobs.
The rodents luagh of sweet revenge. >>>
The rodents laugh of sweet revenge.
reply by the author on 14-Aug-2021
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This is an interesting story that could use a little work. Some of your sentences and paragraphs need better structure. I noted a few grammatical things for you below. The top line in each couplet is what you wrote - the bottom line is my suggestion for improvement. Good luck in the contest.
The felines run away from their lives. >>>
The felines run away for their lives.
the dead rats are doing their jobs. >>>
The dead rats are doing their jobs.
The rodents luagh of sweet revenge. >>>
The rodents laugh of sweet revenge.
Comment Written 14-Aug-2021
reply by the author on 14-Aug-2021
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Thank you! Okay, I have fixed the mistakes. Is it now good enough for five stars?
