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A Poem about the Supernatural17 total reviews
Comment from amahra
This is my second Supernatural Free Verse and this one is amazing. I love the artwork and some of the words remind me of the movie, Wuthering Heights.
I looked into the face of Death
And Life looked back at me. [ my favorite lines]
reply by the author on 18-Aug-2021
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This is my second Supernatural Free Verse and this one is amazing. I love the artwork and some of the words remind me of the movie, Wuthering Heights.
I looked into the face of Death
And Life looked back at me. [ my favorite lines]
Comment Written 18-Aug-2021
reply by the author on 18-Aug-2021
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Dar Amahra, Thank you for your review and the five stars. Wuthering Heights was one strange movie, one I have seen, but not a favorite. It was written by a master of the pen though, so to have my words compared to those is a compliment indeed. cheers Cass
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
I think it is when we are trying to sleep that our mind wonders and a flicker of light or a movement in the curtain through the wind catches our eye and our imagination runs wild and sleep is then silenced, much enjoyed, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 18-Aug-2021
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I think it is when we are trying to sleep that our mind wonders and a flicker of light or a movement in the curtain through the wind catches our eye and our imagination runs wild and sleep is then silenced, much enjoyed, love Dolly x
Comment Written 18-Aug-2021
reply by the author on 18-Aug-2021
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Dear Dolly, Thank you for your review and the five stars. You describe that moment between sleeping and waking very well. It has been the bane of my slumbers for a long while now. If I don't close my eyes and keep them closed I risk another night of staring into the dark for hours on end. It's probably an age related thing, but I usually end up taking something to put me to sleep. cheers Cass
Comment from Teri7
Cass, You did a really good job with this supernatural free verse poem contest. You used very good descriptive words and the art work you chose went perfect with your words. Best wishes in the contest. love and blessings, Teri
reply by the author on 19-Aug-2021
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Cass, You did a really good job with this supernatural free verse poem contest. You used very good descriptive words and the art work you chose went perfect with your words. Best wishes in the contest. love and blessings, Teri
Comment Written 18-Aug-2021
reply by the author on 19-Aug-2021
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Dear Teri7. Thankyou for your review and the five stars. The Art work was perfect for the poem. I need to acknowledge it in the notes.( see revision)
cheers Cass
Comment from Seshadri_Sreenivasan
This gave me an eerie feeling to know what a man feels when encountering death. A very well written free verse poem on the supernatural. Good luck!
reply by the author on 20-Aug-2021
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This gave me an eerie feeling to know what a man feels when encountering death. A very well written free verse poem on the supernatural. Good luck!
Comment Written 18-Aug-2021
reply by the author on 20-Aug-2021
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Dear Friend, Thank you for your review and the five stars.I am glad my words have met with your approval.
You have a sense of the macabre which picks up on pieces like this. Well done cheers Cass
Comment from Wendy G
A really good entry for the supernatural free verse contest. You have set the scene in a very creepy way, and the the arrival of death personified is very well done. You do have some rhymes at the end which fit well and are smooth, but officially free verse doesn't permit rhymes. It's otherwise an excellent entry, and I wish you the best for the contest.
reply by the author on 19-Aug-2021
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A really good entry for the supernatural free verse contest. You have set the scene in a very creepy way, and the the arrival of death personified is very well done. You do have some rhymes at the end which fit well and are smooth, but officially free verse doesn't permit rhymes. It's otherwise an excellent entry, and I wish you the best for the contest.
Comment Written 18-Aug-2021
reply by the author on 19-Aug-2021
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Dear Wendy, Thank you for your review and the five stars. You are right about the last few lines and so I altered them before judging began. Now they comply with the criteria. cheers Cass
Comment from Versch
This is indeed a supernatural verse. There is a sense of eeriness brought by the appearance of death itself, giving me goosebumps as I read. I am always afraid of graveyard when I was a kid because of the stories the elders tell, that the spirits of the dead rise at night.
It's a well crafted free verse. Good luck in the contest.
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reply by the author on 19-Aug-2021
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This is indeed a supernatural verse. There is a sense of eeriness brought by the appearance of death itself, giving me goosebumps as I read. I am always afraid of graveyard when I was a kid because of the stories the elders tell, that the spirits of the dead rise at night.
It's a well crafted free verse. Good luck in the contest.
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Comment Written 18-Aug-2021
reply by the author on 19-Aug-2021
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Dear Versch, Thank you for your review and the five stars. The appearance of Death in this piece wasn't intended. That's what happens when your Muse "takes off" and does her own thing. I can but obey. cheers Cass
Comment from lyenochka
Great job with your free verse on the supernatural topic. It has an eerie feel as the poem describes that moment of encountering death and the narrator does not seem frightened as she is grieving her many losses. Best wishes in the contest!
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reply by the author on 18-Aug-2021
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Great job with your free verse on the supernatural topic. It has an eerie feel as the poem describes that moment of encountering death and the narrator does not seem frightened as she is grieving her many losses. Best wishes in the contest!
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Comment Written 18-Aug-2021
reply by the author on 18-Aug-2021
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Dear Friend, Thank you for your review and the five stars. I may have disqualified myself with rhymes in the last six lines, because the instructions do say, internal rhymes only no end of line ones.Oops! Never mind, I'll let it stand and see what happens.
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You can just be a bit more creative with the same words but broken up differently like:
Death was there with wings upswept. She outspread one
and in I crept
"Come," she murmured
"come and bide" But I could not waken and thus I died.
Now my sins weigh
heavily and I beg of you now
to pray for me".
