Comment from DSchlosser

Excellent

It took a while to get back to reading this book after I had been in the hospital for a while, and I'm glad I was able to pick back up and finish this book. This turned out to be a great novel! I hope it sells well for you.

I did not one minor thing in this chapter that it looks like nobody had caught: Catching sight of Tania, Monica let out the loudest shriek, causing many of the other travellers to stare at her.'

There is an extra apostrophe hanging about on the sentence I added above. I think maybe you had a piece of dialogue you removed, but it looks like it was left when you probably deleted something else.

I'm glad you got the book of the month award. This turned out to be one of the best novels I've read on the site.

 Comment Written 20-Sep-2021

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reply by the author on 21-Sep-2021

There is no words I can say to express how grateful I am that you read my novel right through. You've helped me rethink a few things, and found a few errors I'd missed. That final compliment that you thought this to be one of the best novels you've read on this site, really did choke me up. Thank you, David!! If I could nominate you for reviewer of the month again, I would. You would deserve to win. Thank you from the bottom of my heart. Hugs and love, Sandra xxx

reply by DSchlosser on 21-Sep-2021

I thank you for nominating me for the reviewer. I need to dip into some more novels now and choose a few from more writers. I 've attempted to read some, but it becomes hard to open up that time. I find it amazing how many stories are out there that go unpublished and ones on here that are just exciting compared to some stuff being sold in stores. People have some amazing talent on this website.

Comment from Chrissy710

Excellent

Hi Sandra Have finally caught up with the last chapter we rounded and a fitting end to your characters (I did have a chuckle at one of Tania's twins being called Lillibet after Megan and Harry stole it from the queen ha ha ) PSW glad peanut has a name too (Tania Leanne) Still alls fair in love and writing stories. Congrats on your win for the book of the month well deserved I enjoy your work
Cheers Chrisxx

 Comment Written 07-Sep-2021

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reply by the author on 07-Sep-2021

Aw, thanks, Chris. I'm really glad you enjoyed the end.

Lillibet was a bit tongue in cheek, I might change that, lol. I don't think she was pleased with Harry and Megan taking the pet name her hubby gave her. It was a personal loving thing between them. And of course, when she reads this book (!!!) she might be upset with me, too!!! LOL!!
Thanks for the congrats! It was very close with all the fabulous writers on here, but I was pleased that my last chapter was chosen! :)) Warm hugs, my friend. :)) Sandra xxx

Comment from Contests

A seven star rating from the Contest Committee for the recognition this post has received from the FanStory community. While this was not a Contest Committee decision, the committee recognizes this achievement with a seven star review.

 Comment Written 07-Sep-2021

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reply by the author on 07-Sep-2021

Thank you so much for this great honour, I am over the moon!! :)) Sandra xxx

Comment from DeboraDyess

Excellent

Hi!
I'm so glad I got to read the final chapter! Love it, loved it, loved it.

Couple of thoughts, butnot big ones...

~ She loved the way her name sounded when he whispered her name. >> I would use 'it' for one of the 'names'.
~ or even when, it happened, >> No comma needed after 'when'
~ hopelessly, happily, wonderfully in love with you >> Wow! Oh, wow!
~ Because they were identical in every way, she still had a problem knowing which was which. >> You've already told the reader they're identical. No need to repeat so quickly. :)


I love the story but am not sure you need that little epilogue. If you do use it, I'd label it as such. And, yes, it does wrap stuff up nicely... I just like the excitement of the marriage proposal! lol

Thank you for sharing this story with us! Let me know whenit's published. I think I'd like a copy. :)
Blessings, sweet friend,
Debs

 Comment Written 24-Aug-2021

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reply by the author on 25-Aug-2021

Thank you so much for reading the final part, Debs, and for the great review. I'm so glad you did read it!! I hadn't noticed I'd put...'her name' in twice! I've changed that sentence now. And I've taken out the repeated 'identical'. I'm just starting my editing and this was well timed. Now I can plod ahead knowing it's all done. Just a few things I'll be looking out for, fulff and stuff, I might be able to get rid of. Thank you for all your help and encouragement, my friend, you have no idea how much I've appreciated it. Warm hugs. Sandra xx

Comment from muffinmama

Excellent

This was a fun read, the whole book, I mean. No loose ends, unless you're planning a sequel to deal further with Rapier.
Thanks for the weekly installments.

Comments:
- 'She sunk into the soft, comfortable...' - sank
- "...other travellers to stare at her.' Not that it bothered her the least."
travelers; remove the apostrophe; in the least (unless 'the least' is the British version.)
- "Each had their own name,..." - her name, as 'each' is singular and we know they're girls

 Comment Written 19-Aug-2021

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reply by the author on 19-Aug-2021

Thank you so much for picking up on these silly nits, Ryma, I've made the corrections now. Thank goodness you spotted them. It has been lovely having you read my book, and give me your thoughts all the way through. You've been wonderful. I have some work to do on this one before I begin the next novel. Not a sequel, something totally different. But before that, I'm writing another children's story/colouring book. It keeps my mind going, Lol. Thanks again, my friend. Warm hugs. Sandra xxx

Comment from Rdfrdmom2

Excellent

Sandra:

I loved every part of your book. I think the double wedding was fitting and proper - and not to be unexpected. I like that you've left room for a sequel should you decide you want to go there with just enough doubt about Rapier's circumstances to cause a hint of concern. I look forward to reading more of your work soon.

jan

 Comment Written 18-Aug-2021

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reply by the author on 19-Aug-2021

Thank you so very much, Jan, for this really lovely review. That you enjoyed every part of my book has made my whole week!! I have another book that's been screaming to come out, so I'll be doing that before I decide if a sequel will work, others have mentioned it, so it's possible. :)) First though, I'm taking a little break and writing a story for children. It's a nice relaxing way to spend some days before I start the big edit. Thank you so much for your constant support, and all the lovely reviews you've given me. I've appreciated them all. Warm hugs, my friend. :)) Sandra xxx

Comment from amahra

Excellent

I'm so sorry I wasn't at the beginning and only enjoyed a few chapters. But hat a fantastic ending. Best wishes with your book.

'Let's drop it now, shall we? This is supposed to be a joyous occasion ... our second anniversary. I can't believe it's been two years since our double wedding.'

'Lovely, wonderful years,' murmured Monica.

'Absolutely!' they chorused and clinked their raised glasses! 'To us!'[great ending.]

 Comment Written 17-Aug-2021

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reply by the author on 18-Aug-2021

Thank you so much for reading my final chapter, Amahra, and for the lovely comments you've made. I'm delighted you enjoyed this part. Thank you!! :)) Sandra xxx

reply by amahra on 18-Aug-2021

Comment from rspoet

Exceptional

Hello Sandra,
Wonderful way to complete the novel going back to romance:

Tania's stomach did so many crazy jiggles while, at the same time, the wild rhythm of her beating heart could easily outshine that of the famous Irish River dance. His kiss was long and lingering, gentle, and loving. When he pulled away, she couldn't stop the moan that escaped.

I see you dropped the "Mandy and Candy" Thank goodness.
"Amanda' and Lillibet" are much better. Never heard of Lillibt though.
Must be a British name. :)

Some well deserved gloating about the prison sentences.

And a cheery ending. "To us!"

Perfect.
Best wishes.
Robert

 Comment Written 17-Aug-2021

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reply by the author on 18-Aug-2021

Thank you, Robert! I'm so pleased you enjoyed the ending. Mandy and Candy wasn't really thought out properly, they just popped into my rhyming side! Lillibet was Prince Phillip's pet name for Queen Elizabeth. I thought it was so romantic of him. :)) Thank you for the lovely six stars, and the lovely review. I've appreciated all your reviews, especially those with some great ideas in. (Making me change a route I'd been heading down!!) I've enjoyed everyone of them. Thank you for all your support and encouragement along the way, my friend. Warm hugs, Sandra xxx

Comment from alexisleech

Exceptional

FANTASTIC! We all love happy endings, but this one was perfect. Loving couples with beautiful children being the order of the day, it was also good to get an update on the bad guys (may they rot in hell!)
This has been a wonderful book, Sandra, and I wouldn't doubt, when it's published, the positive reviews will continue to flood in.
Well done, my friend. Don't keep us waiting too long for the next one.

Alexis xxxxxx

 Comment Written 17-Aug-2021

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reply by the author on 17-Aug-2021

I'm so pleased you enjoyed the ending, Alexis, thank you so very much for this lovely review! And a big hug for the golden sixth star!! I'm writing a children's story first, and then another novel. I hope you join me under the sea? Warm hugs, my dear friend. :)) Sandra xxx

Comment from Rosemary Everson1

Excellent

A wonderful ending/finale. Are you going to publish your story/book? It sure is a delightful story to read. Every chapter was suspenseful. It would be a top seller for sure, that's what I think.

 Comment Written 16-Aug-2021

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reply by the author on 16-Aug-2021

Thank you, Rosemary! I'm so glad you enjoyed the last chapter. It's always hard to get it just right. Yes, I will be getting it published, and keep my fingers crossed it will do well. Your words are so encouraging, thank you! Warm hugs, my friend. :)) Sandra xx