Believe In Yourself
A young hockey must overcome a severe injury.6 total reviews
Comment from writer723
I very much enjoyed reading your excellent story. It really drew me in and captured my attention from start to finish. I found myself rooting for the main character all the way and wishing the best for the individual. Your depiction of this situation was quite emotional and touching to me. Your descriptive skills are exceptional and you express yourself very well.
reply by the author on 03-Oct-2021
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I very much enjoyed reading your excellent story. It really drew me in and captured my attention from start to finish. I found myself rooting for the main character all the way and wishing the best for the individual. Your depiction of this situation was quite emotional and touching to me. Your descriptive skills are exceptional and you express yourself very well.
Comment Written 03-Oct-2021
reply by the author on 03-Oct-2021
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Thank you for the six stars.
I am honored you took the time to read this story. Let alone to rate it so high.
I enjoy writing and people such as yourself encourage me to continue.
Thank you again!!
Comment from cupa tea
I love this little story! I believe that faith and determination can make anything happen. Good luck in the contest!
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It happened late in the third period during a game between our hometown hockey team. The Humboldt Mavericks and the Moose Jaw Lancers.
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It happened late in the third period during a game between our hometown hockey team, the Humboldt Mavericks and the Moose Jaw Lancers.
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They broke the silence in the arena when Terry motioned with his right hand, his attempt to let everyone know he was okay.
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The silence was broken in the arena when Terry motioned with his right hand, in an attempt, to let everyone know he was okay.
reply by the author on 22-Aug-2021
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I love this little story! I believe that faith and determination can make anything happen. Good luck in the contest!
This is not a complete sentence...
It happened late in the third period during a game between our hometown hockey team. The Humboldt Mavericks and the Moose Jaw Lancers.
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It happened late in the third period during a game between our hometown hockey team, the Humboldt Mavericks and the Moose Jaw Lancers.
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They broke the silence in the arena when Terry motioned with his right hand, his attempt to let everyone know he was okay.
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The silence was broken in the arena when Terry motioned with his right hand, in an attempt, to let everyone know he was okay.
Comment Written 21-Aug-2021
reply by the author on 22-Aug-2021
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I am so happy you enjoyed my story. It can be easy to give up. Sometimes all we need is a little encouragement.
That is the way I am with writing. Comments such as yours keep me going.
I thank you for that.
I also appreciate your suggestions. I agree with each and made them.
Thank you!
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your very welcome...I always miss stuff in my own stories. I appreciate any help I can get...
Comment from Patty Palmer
This is a beautiful story of love and compassion from someone who didn't even know Terry, but offered him the means and the encouragement to believe in himself. Good luck with the contest.
Patty
reply by the author on 21-Aug-2021
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This is a beautiful story of love and compassion from someone who didn't even know Terry, but offered him the means and the encouragement to believe in himself. Good luck with the contest.
Patty
Comment Written 21-Aug-2021
reply by the author on 21-Aug-2021
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Thank you for the kind words. I believe all of us in our lives meet someone that gives us the encouragement we need, just when we were ready to give up. I certainly appreciate your good luck wish!
Comment from Anne Johnston
What a beautiful story, thank you for sharing. I like the lines:
"And a small black leather notebook that someone had written in bold blue ink on the inside cover, "I believe in you. Believe in yourself." On the very last page the good Samaritan wrote, "The power of faith and a true belief in yourself will overcome the greatest of life's barriers. One day you will be the proof."
reply by the author on 20-Aug-2021
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What a beautiful story, thank you for sharing. I like the lines:
"And a small black leather notebook that someone had written in bold blue ink on the inside cover, "I believe in you. Believe in yourself." On the very last page the good Samaritan wrote, "The power of faith and a true belief in yourself will overcome the greatest of life's barriers. One day you will be the proof."
Comment Written 20-Aug-2021
reply by the author on 20-Aug-2021
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I am glad you enjoyed the story. With all the negativity all around. It is nice to know good people are out there. People who care for others.
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You are welcome, there are lots who care, just go unrecognized.
Comment from NANCY V. FORREST
A nicely written account of grit, detemination and faith without emotionality. And a nice illustration of the old maxim "God helps them who help themselves."
reply by the author on 14-Aug-2021
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A nicely written account of grit, detemination and faith without emotionality. And a nice illustration of the old maxim "God helps them who help themselves."
Comment Written 14-Aug-2021
reply by the author on 14-Aug-2021
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First, thank you so much for reading my story. Second, thank you for the kind words As far as the old maxim "God helps them who help themselves." My brothers and I were raised by parents that believed in that. We have passed that onto our children and now grandchildren.
I have a question? I started writing about five months ago. When I was reading through my first three stories. I noticed there was a lot of me in the main character. Throughout all of the stories, I could see I had unintentionally woven in my beliefs.
In your writings, have you found a lot of yourself in them?
In "They should have listened", the main character ends up killing some bad people. Forcing him to look inside himself.
If you were to read my stories. I am sure you will notice more things like the maxim in this story.
I apologize for such a long reply.
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I have been writing sinve high school and, fo rme, I am always finding I meet myself nto only in the main character, but also in some of the other characters as well. I find writng a very creative personal activity. Of course, research articles are more objective, but I find that the premise and perceptions that color the analysis includes bits of me, even so
No apology necessary. I like to chat.
Comment from lyenochka
Wonderful and inspiring story! This is a tribute not only to this young man who overcame such difficulties but to the town of Humboldt. Thank you for sharing. Best wishes in the contest!
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reply by the author on 14-Aug-2021
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Wonderful and inspiring story! This is a tribute not only to this young man who overcame such difficulties but to the town of Humboldt. Thank you for sharing. Best wishes in the contest!
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Comment Written 14-Aug-2021
reply by the author on 14-Aug-2021
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I really appreciate you taking the time to read this story. It seems we are bombarded with bad news everyday. A story like this one reminds all of us. There is still good out there.
