"The Book of Death"
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Comment from Bonnie Seach
The poem follows contest requirements
It's visual presentation is stunning.
Sin lurks near to each one of us, waiting for us to fall into its trap
Taking one's life is not a solution. It plays into Satan's hands and makes him victorious. Never may that happen.
Best wishes for the contest
reply by the author on 14-Aug-2021
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The poem follows contest requirements
It's visual presentation is stunning.
Sin lurks near to each one of us, waiting for us to fall into its trap
Taking one's life is not a solution. It plays into Satan's hands and makes him victorious. Never may that happen.
Best wishes for the contest
Comment Written 13-Aug-2021
reply by the author on 14-Aug-2021
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I'm glad you enjoyed my little piece Bonnie.
Doctor Ricky 1024
Comment from Ritasher
This is an interesting flow of thoughts, written in a stream-of-consciousness narrative. 'Step down, it's time to sin' feels like a main idea, talking about people's tendency to choose sin while being aware that what they're doing might be wrong.
The only suggestion is to not put the description part of a poem in the same part where you write your poetry - then it seems like a part of your writing. I'd rather cut it down at all or fill these things in title + co-title parts or in author notes.
Rita
reply by the author on 12-Aug-2021
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This is an interesting flow of thoughts, written in a stream-of-consciousness narrative. 'Step down, it's time to sin' feels like a main idea, talking about people's tendency to choose sin while being aware that what they're doing might be wrong.
The only suggestion is to not put the description part of a poem in the same part where you write your poetry - then it seems like a part of your writing. I'd rather cut it down at all or fill these things in title + co-title parts or in author notes.
Rita
Comment Written 11-Aug-2021
reply by the author on 12-Aug-2021
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Well, thank you for your time review and your suggestions are much appreciated.
Doctor Ricky 1024