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Phone Calls from Caroline

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A cousin calls her younger cousin to rant.

21 total reviews 
Comment from Liz O'Neill
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This is hilarious. Where do you come up with this stuff? It's brilliant! I got me one of this gizmos me & my friends call a button. Well at first it seemed it might work, but then we found their was no reception up here in the woods. So I can easily carry my portable for my landline outdoors when I'm doing lawn work. I have to give you A+ for this genius.

 Comment Written 12-Sep-2023


reply by the author on 12-Sep-2023
    Thank you, Liz. I'm glad you liked this. I didn't have much trouble someing up with it. All I had to do was remember the conversation when my literal cousin called me. She's a riot.
    Beth
reply by Liz O'Neill on 12-Sep-2023
    We write with what we know. You will notice everything I've written & will be writing is what I know of my life
Comment from Sankey
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Haha, this was a great story. I hope you do well in the contest. I can just imagine a real person being like this. The picture said a lot as well. Good luck!

 Comment Written 14-Aug-2021


reply by the author on 15-Aug-2021
    Thank you so much for the review and comments. I didn't win but I had fun writing it. She is a real person and she is my first cousin. I changed her name but most of what was in that was things she actually said.
    Beth
Comment from NABattaglia
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haha well done, and great way to take something based on a true story to weave it into an interesting and engaging story--especially on what can be a politically-charged and heavy topic. Nicely done and thanks for sharing!

 Comment Written 11-Aug-2021


reply by the author on 11-Aug-2021
    Thank you for reading and commenting on this. I had fun writing it.
    Beth
Comment from Judy Lawless
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This is hilarious, Beth! I can see it happening though. Too many old ladies have nothing better to than tell other people what they should do. Well done. Good luck in the contest.

 Comment Written 10-Aug-2021


reply by the author on 10-Aug-2021
    Thank you so much for the review and comments. She called me this afternoon and gave me enough raw material to write another story.
    Beth
Comment from Mary Vigasin
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This is a very fun read. This is hilarious. It is also very believable. I have or had relatives who are always giving advice and are always right about every subject to I could identify with a conversation with Caroline.
One will not get the shot because she takes 40 vitamins a day and thus is immune to any virus!
Good luck in the contest.
Regards,
Mary

 Comment Written 09-Aug-2021


reply by the author on 09-Aug-2021
    Thank you Mary, I glad you liked this and found it believable. She actually exist by another name. Her conversations go very much like this.
    Beth
Comment from Terry Overton
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I can picture these two yapping on the phone and bickering at each other. Very funny dialog! They sound familiar, like some of my friend who are only in their sixties! I can't imagine them in another ten years. Fun read.

 Comment Written 08-Aug-2021


reply by the author on 09-Aug-2021
    Thank you Terry, I appreciate the review and comments. Caroline is a name I've given my cousin, who says some of these outlandiish things on a real phone call.
    Beth
Comment from MAMONIA
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This is totally hysterical. It is so real that is what makes it funny. I can picture how frantic your cousin was on this call and love what she said about Alexa.
Now, getting back to the vaccine...I also have many friends and family who refuse taking it. It is getting serious out there but they refuse to listen to me anymore.
How are you going to get your cousin to get it? If you have a clue, let me know.
I loved this entire conversation and can just picture your face and hers.
Lots of luck,
Marie

 Comment Written 08-Aug-2021


reply by the author on 08-Aug-2021
    Thank you Marie. I glad you found it funny and I really am thrilled with the six stars. My conversations with my cousin are funny but also frustrating. They usually last at least an hour. She likes to argue, and I let her think she has won. As to the vaccine, I don't know if there is any way to convince her to get it. I just pray none of the care givers come into her house sick. I have another cousin, I'm also trying to convince to get the vaccine and I'm having more luck with her.
reply by MAMONIA on 08-Aug-2021
    Yes, good luck with that!
Comment from humpwhistle
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Yeah, Beth, that sounds like a pretty real conversation. I like the way that it doesn't track perfectly. Real conversations with tangents sound fake to my ears. My sister is pushing me to get one of those 'response devices'. I know they make sense, but to older folks, they probably represent truth they don't want to face.

Nice job. And best of luck with the Committee.

Peace, Lee

 Comment Written 08-Aug-2021


reply by the author on 08-Aug-2021
    Thank you Lee. I'm pleased that you think my dialogue sounds real. I had a pretty real conversation with her to pattern it after. I don't feel I need that stupid thing around my neck, but at some point I may wish I'd had it. Especially if I'm outside trying to climb a fig tree. LOL
reply by humpwhistle on 08-Aug-2021
    Climbing a fig tree? I prefer low-hanging fruit, myself. Watch your step, Young Lady!
Comment from Elizabeth Emerald
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Hilarious! I recall another humor story featuring Caroline. Perhaps if she's forced to get vaccinated she'll have to change her name to Carl. S/he's going to hang up on you--threat or promise?

 Comment Written 07-Aug-2021


reply by the author on 08-Aug-2021
    Thank you Liz, I'm glad you found this funny. I could almost write a book entitled "Phone Calls From Caroline."
reply by Elizabeth Emerald on 08-Aug-2021
    DO IT!
Comment from Gert sherwood
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Hello Beth
I had to laugh and say that you did so good having the font change from light to a bold font. I'm wondering who hung up and saying
And don't you go telling people I didn't warn you, if you die on the floor?
Gert

 Comment Written 07-Aug-2021


reply by the author on 08-Aug-2021
    Thank you Gert, I appreciate the review and comments. She often gets aggrivated with me and hangs up. It is funny. She has a bad temper and if you don't agree with her she hangs up and pouts.
    Beth
reply by Gert sherwood on 08-Aug-2021
    You are most welcome Beth
    Gert