Pages of Life
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Comment from Bonnie Seach
This work is quaint and reader friendly. Solomon wrote in Ecclesiastes that "there is nothing new under the sun". This story takes us back to the days of Queen Victoria. Although she professed "not to be amused", I was much amused and entertained by this well crafted read.
"Pages of Life" exhibits all the facets of a boomerang story. Its readers will keep coming
back... :-) I believe the pages of life are never discarded nor do they fade away. They are recycled. The basis remains the same, it is merely the trappings that change with time.
Thank you for sharing.
Best wishes for the contest
reply by the author on 14-Aug-2021
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This work is quaint and reader friendly. Solomon wrote in Ecclesiastes that "there is nothing new under the sun". This story takes us back to the days of Queen Victoria. Although she professed "not to be amused", I was much amused and entertained by this well crafted read.
"Pages of Life" exhibits all the facets of a boomerang story. Its readers will keep coming
back... :-) I believe the pages of life are never discarded nor do they fade away. They are recycled. The basis remains the same, it is merely the trappings that change with time.
Thank you for sharing.
Best wishes for the contest
Comment Written 12-Aug-2021
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Such a superb reveiw zanya
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Inspired by a superb poem👌😊
Comment from Rosemary Everson1
I have to give you an exceptional rating on your story. It was a fascinating story to read....is this fictional only...do you live in a mansions and have suitors of high stature? Enjoyed your story.
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I have to give you an exceptional rating on your story. It was a fascinating story to read....is this fictional only...do you live in a mansions and have suitors of high stature? Enjoyed your story.
Comment Written 12-Aug-2021
reply by the author on 14-Aug-2021
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And thanks again for those 6 twinkling stars zanya
Comment from John Garvey
I love the way this is framed, with the heroine as an author's work-in-progress, sitting in a computer file, self-aware, yet subject to neglect and modification.
In my opinion, the pacing is a bit choppy in places, and you could improve the story (in a minor way) by combining some of the paragraphs. For instance, I would have combined the paragraph ending in "vicar" with the following paragraph beginning with "All the while ...".
I noticed a minor redundancy about a third of the way in. You have two consecutive paragraphs that begin with similar sentences: (1) "However, my young creator had different plans for me." and (2) "My author, however, had more pressing concerns ..." It would probably benefit the story to ax one of these and combine the two short paragraphs.
There are a few minor punctuation errors; for instance, in the 3rd-to-last paragraph, "fathers" should be "father's."
If I sound picky, it's because this is a very clever story and it's worth the attention. Your word choice is kind of delightful: "tome," "witching hour," and "demurely" are a few examples where my mind went "Ping! I like it!" I like your writing style.
Is this based on an actual work-in-progress of yours?
reply by the author on 14-Aug-2021
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I love the way this is framed, with the heroine as an author's work-in-progress, sitting in a computer file, self-aware, yet subject to neglect and modification.
In my opinion, the pacing is a bit choppy in places, and you could improve the story (in a minor way) by combining some of the paragraphs. For instance, I would have combined the paragraph ending in "vicar" with the following paragraph beginning with "All the while ...".
I noticed a minor redundancy about a third of the way in. You have two consecutive paragraphs that begin with similar sentences: (1) "However, my young creator had different plans for me." and (2) "My author, however, had more pressing concerns ..." It would probably benefit the story to ax one of these and combine the two short paragraphs.
There are a few minor punctuation errors; for instance, in the 3rd-to-last paragraph, "fathers" should be "father's."
If I sound picky, it's because this is a very clever story and it's worth the attention. Your word choice is kind of delightful: "tome," "witching hour," and "demurely" are a few examples where my mind went "Ping! I like it!" I like your writing style.
Is this based on an actual work-in-progress of yours?
Comment Written 06-Aug-2021
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A simply superb reveiw -engaging and focused and filled with sound advice zanya
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You're welcome, zanya! Glad you found it useful. - John
Comment from Terry Overton
Nice read with a clever character. I enjoyed your descriptions which led me easily to your time and place. So true the social media interferes with the work I must do! Best wishes :)
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Nice read with a clever character. I enjoyed your descriptions which led me easily to your time and place. So true the social media interferes with the work I must do! Best wishes :)
Comment Written 06-Aug-2021
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A review well written zanya
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You're welcome
Comment from RodG
I really enjoyed this tale told by a book in a woman's computer. I truly enjoyed the POV and how you characterized the book's protagonist as a young Victorian maiden living in a Manor and awaiting a suitor. Good tension provided as the book's author often gets distracted and fails to continue the story. A fun read.
Rod
reply by the author on 14-Aug-2021
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I really enjoyed this tale told by a book in a woman's computer. I truly enjoyed the POV and how you characterized the book's protagonist as a young Victorian maiden living in a Manor and awaiting a suitor. Good tension provided as the book's author often gets distracted and fails to continue the story. A fun read.
Rod
Comment Written 06-Aug-2021
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And a superb reveiw zanya
Comment from LisaMay
"we shall have to wait and see how the story unfolds..." "Life is uncertain in the twenty-first century even between the pages of a book!" This story within a story draws the reader in to the characters' Victorian days of romance, duty, and war in a most engaging manner, the characters at the mercy of the writer's busy lifestyle and her jaded readers. I hope the family is reunited eventually and lives happily ever after. Please don't kill handsome Wilfred off.
(Should victorian have a cap 'V' perhaps?)
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"we shall have to wait and see how the story unfolds..." "Life is uncertain in the twenty-first century even between the pages of a book!" This story within a story draws the reader in to the characters' Victorian days of romance, duty, and war in a most engaging manner, the characters at the mercy of the writer's busy lifestyle and her jaded readers. I hope the family is reunited eventually and lives happily ever after. Please don't kill handsome Wilfred off.
(Should victorian have a cap 'V' perhaps?)
Comment Written 06-Aug-2021
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Love it ! Made me smile too with 'Please don't kill handsome Wilfred off!! The power we possess as writers!!!!!!!!!!! Thanks for those 6 twinkling stars zanya
Comment from indigovega
Such a wonderfully, original, fan-fiction, of a book's character talking about their life and their creator.
The humour was very subtle and well done. The story also had astute observations springing out of the humour, every few lines.
A unique and thoroughly enjoyable read.
Thank you for sharing your story.
reply by the author on 14-Aug-2021
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Such a wonderfully, original, fan-fiction, of a book's character talking about their life and their creator.
The humour was very subtle and well done. The story also had astute observations springing out of the humour, every few lines.
A unique and thoroughly enjoyable read.
Thank you for sharing your story.
Comment Written 05-Aug-2021
reply by the author on 14-Aug-2021
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And thanks for those 6 beautiful stars and a most interesting review zanya
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Thanks for the note Zanya :-) Have a great weekend!!!
Comment from Elizabeth Emerald
Charming piece! Ingenious device--this may well be a winner. Masterfully rendered with wit and wry humor. Brilliant work.
typos:
arranged as has been agreed between your father and [I=>ME].
looking into his brown eyes, just like his [fathers=>FATHER'S]
My author, preoccupied with earning her precarious living on her social media sites [COMMA] has not recently clicked
reply by the author on 14-Aug-2021
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Charming piece! Ingenious device--this may well be a winner. Masterfully rendered with wit and wry humor. Brilliant work.
typos:
arranged as has been agreed between your father and [I=>ME].
looking into his brown eyes, just like his [fathers=>FATHER'S]
My author, preoccupied with earning her precarious living on her social media sites [COMMA] has not recently clicked
Comment Written 05-Aug-2021
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Superb review zanya
Comment from equestrik
This is a very creative story for the 'Writing' contest. I really enjoyed it and I feel your development was truly clever. It is really well written and i enjoyed it from start to finish.
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This is a very creative story for the 'Writing' contest. I really enjoyed it and I feel your development was truly clever. It is really well written and i enjoyed it from start to finish.
Comment Written 05-Aug-2021
reply by the author on 14-Aug-2021
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Thanks for reviewing and sharing those interesting observations. zanya
