The Shining
A light in the night....18 total reviews
Comment from Terry Overton
You were able to get a story in such a short number of words. I enjoyed your descriptions of these creatures, the wind, and the night. I would imagine all were excited when morning arrived.
reply by the author on 05-Aug-2021
You were able to get a story in such a short number of words. I enjoyed your descriptions of these creatures, the wind, and the night. I would imagine all were excited when morning arrived.
Comment Written 05-Aug-2021
reply by the author on 05-Aug-2021
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It was based on the fact that I grew up with the river in my back yard and I spent a lot of time sitting there. A reader had a fit that a child was out there alone so I had to say he was lost. LOL
Smiles, Carol
Comment from royowen
I'm glad this had a happy ending Carol, I don't know what I would have done if it hadn't. But this reminded of that, Psalm 30:5 "Though weeping may remain for the night, joy comes in the morning." Beautifully written entry in this contest, good luck, blessings Roy
reply by the author on 05-Aug-2021
I'm glad this had a happy ending Carol, I don't know what I would have done if it hadn't. But this reminded of that, Psalm 30:5 "Though weeping may remain for the night, joy comes in the morning." Beautifully written entry in this contest, good luck, blessings Roy
Comment Written 05-Aug-2021
reply by the author on 05-Aug-2021
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I actually wrote this story for the contest thinking about how I use to sit along the river bank and write stories....It seemed natural. Then one reader got upset and said why was I out there alone...where were my parents...she said I needed to say I was lost. So I did! Funny how some people get so wrapped up even in 75 words. LOL
Smiles, Carol
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That?s a good thing Carol, people see through a differing lens, that?s the thrill of writing.
Comment from NANCY V. FORREST
This piece certainly paints a picture. The feelings and the relief that follow are very resonant. A very small container for large emotional experience.
reply by the author on 05-Aug-2021
This piece certainly paints a picture. The feelings and the relief that follow are very resonant. A very small container for large emotional experience.
Comment Written 05-Aug-2021
reply by the author on 05-Aug-2021
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Thank you Nancy for stopping by to read the little contest entry. i appreciate your time and the review.
Smiles, Carol
Comment from Ric Myworld
Those camping nights can sure be frightening experiences, as every glimpse or sound and set our imagining in overdrive. Thanks for sharing and best of luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 05-Aug-2021
Those camping nights can sure be frightening experiences, as every glimpse or sound and set our imagining in overdrive. Thanks for sharing and best of luck in the contest.
Comment Written 04-Aug-2021
reply by the author on 05-Aug-2021
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Hey...thanks for stopping by my campfire.... I wasn't really lost but one reader was upset I'd let a small child sit on the riverbank alone. LOl
Smiles, Carol
Comment from Bill Schott
This seventy-five-word story, The Shining, has the required word count and seems to follow the raccoon cub, according to the image, trough the scary swamp befor e dawn. Nice descriptions.
reply by the author on 05-Aug-2021
This seventy-five-word story, The Shining, has the required word count and seems to follow the raccoon cub, according to the image, trough the scary swamp befor e dawn. Nice descriptions.
Comment Written 04-Aug-2021
reply by the author on 05-Aug-2021
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Thanks, Bill
Appreciate you reading the short contest entry.
Always a smile, Carol
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
A fearful night in the pitch black of night and camping can be a bit scary! When our vision is impaired we lose one of our senses and feel vulnerable, much enjoyed, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 05-Aug-2021
A fearful night in the pitch black of night and camping can be a bit scary! When our vision is impaired we lose one of our senses and feel vulnerable, much enjoyed, love Dolly x
Comment Written 03-Aug-2021
reply by the author on 05-Aug-2021
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Thanks Dolly for your kind review. Smiles, Carol
Comment from Carol Hillebrenner
You told a good story very well with just 72 words. The reader can feel the terror of the child with noises in the dark and glowing eyes. Best of luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 05-Aug-2021
You told a good story very well with just 72 words. The reader can feel the terror of the child with noises in the dark and glowing eyes. Best of luck in the contest.
Comment Written 03-Aug-2021
reply by the author on 05-Aug-2021
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thank you so much for your kind review and for reading my contest entry. A few words to say a lot.
Smiles, Carol
Comment from equestrik
This is well written story for the 75 word writing prompt. You left me hanging though-I hope the child is okay. Good writing and a good picture to emphasize the fear.
reply by the author on 03-Aug-2021
This is well written story for the 75 word writing prompt. You left me hanging though-I hope the child is okay. Good writing and a good picture to emphasize the fear.
Comment Written 03-Aug-2021
reply by the author on 03-Aug-2021
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the child is fine...lol It was based on the fact that as a young child I sat at the river bank all the time.... but a reader said it was confusing and I needed to say the child was lost. So I did!
Have a great day!
Comment from Anne Johnston
You have written a great story in a few words. One can almost feel the terror of that small child, lost in the forest, listening to the sounds around him. Then, the joy as morning breaks, and light replaces the darkness.
Best wishes for the contest.
reply by the author on 03-Aug-2021
You have written a great story in a few words. One can almost feel the terror of that small child, lost in the forest, listening to the sounds around him. Then, the joy as morning breaks, and light replaces the darkness.
Best wishes for the contest.
Comment Written 03-Aug-2021
reply by the author on 03-Aug-2021
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Thanks, Anne
I had almost forgotten about writing this little nugget. I grew up in the country, so I hadn't meant him to be lost, but one reader was concerned that he was out there by himself, so I had to make him lost. Funny how we all translate things differently depending on how it would affect us.
Smiles, Carol
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You are welcome
Comment from Jannypan (Jan)
You did a good job with your contest entry, Mystery Author. I like the title, the image, and the way you developed your little story. The ending was an unexpected twist that worked well.
Best wishes.
Respectfully, Jan
reply by the author on 03-Aug-2021
You did a good job with your contest entry, Mystery Author. I like the title, the image, and the way you developed your little story. The ending was an unexpected twist that worked well.
Best wishes.
Respectfully, Jan
Comment Written 03-Aug-2021
reply by the author on 03-Aug-2021
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Thanks, Jan
Appreciate your review and your kind thoughts.
Have a great day!