Hardy is Expecting
Hardy gets a big surprise by mail.2 total reviews
Comment from rspoet
If Hardy didn't know what was coming in the mail, then if was probably the biggest surprise of his life.
I'm sure he forgot all about the basketball game and the score.
Typo: "Oponent" should be "opponent"
Well done.
Good luck in the contest.
Robert
reply by the author on 31-Jul-2021
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If Hardy didn't know what was coming in the mail, then if was probably the biggest surprise of his life.
I'm sure he forgot all about the basketball game and the score.
Typo: "Oponent" should be "opponent"
Well done.
Good luck in the contest.
Robert
Comment Written 31-Jul-2021
reply by the author on 31-Jul-2021
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Thank you!
Comment from lancellot
Hmm, this is very interesting. It seems the narration would sound better if the story was being told in past tense. I mean, it is a story being told to use by someone. I would recommend editing it from present to past. I think would sound smoother that way.
reply by the author on 31-Jul-2021
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Hmm, this is very interesting. It seems the narration would sound better if the story was being told in past tense. I mean, it is a story being told to use by someone. I would recommend editing it from present to past. I think would sound smoother that way.
Comment Written 31-Jul-2021
reply by the author on 31-Jul-2021
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Thank you! Thanks for the advice!