Secrets in the Wind
Viewing comments for Chapter 15 "Secrets in the Wind - Chap 15"A story of loss, deceit, murder and crime
23 total reviews
Comment from Leann DS
I'm loving this! Trafficking in wine barrels? Wonderful idea! This is so good. :-) I don't know all of your work, but this is definitely first rate.
I noticed one error, if I may:
The study door opened, and both men shot a glare at the intruder. "It's just me." Liz smiled and set the serving tray on the coffee table. "Sorry, guys, but I had company in the kitchen. Liz brought..."
It should be "Crystal brought... "
I can't wait till tomorrow so I can read some more. :-) Off to sell ice cream. ð??¦
reply by the author on 12-Sep-2021
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I'm loving this! Trafficking in wine barrels? Wonderful idea! This is so good. :-) I don't know all of your work, but this is definitely first rate.
I noticed one error, if I may:
The study door opened, and both men shot a glare at the intruder. "It's just me." Liz smiled and set the serving tray on the coffee table. "Sorry, guys, but I had company in the kitchen. Liz brought..."
It should be "Crystal brought... "
I can't wait till tomorrow so I can read some more. :-) Off to sell ice cream. ð??¦
Comment Written 10-Sep-2021
reply by the author on 12-Sep-2021
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LeAnn...I love you, girl!
I am thrilled beyond words that you are reading the entire story and emjoying it. I am blessed by your words, time, effort and stars. Sorry I am so far behind...between four birthdays, Matt's filming, visitors, and writing, I don't know which way is up.
How far away is that ice cream store? LOL
Smiles and hugs, Carol
Comment from eliz100
I have been away for awhile so I needed to backtrack to where I left off. This is another great chapter. I do not see any room for improvement. I look forward to the next chapter.
reply by the author on 09-Sep-2021
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I have been away for awhile so I needed to backtrack to where I left off. This is another great chapter. I do not see any room for improvement. I look forward to the next chapter.
Comment Written 08-Sep-2021
reply by the author on 09-Sep-2021
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Oh I missed you...I am thrilled to see you back and I hope you enjoy the story. It's a wild ride for sure. And now you can read it like a book. Thank you!
I'll just say thank you for catching up with all of them. It takes a lot of time and I truly appreciate it. Hope you enjoy the story.
Smiles, Carol
Comment from karenina
Oh boy. There is gold...there may be drugs (or was at some point)--there is certainly some type of human trafficking... Father Jon is regretting his involvement...he might have thought about the consequences earlier! Still--he is not above redemption--we shall see. Very nice description of the scene in the confessional between Mason and Jon. Mason THINKS he has this tiger by the tail. I think perhaps he'll have his comeuppance! As for Cynthia. I'd have a "taster" try that darn pie! She is devious and sneaky and all things perfect for this mystery! I'm past the point of guessing where you're taking me. I like it here in the passenger seat and thoroughly enjoy the ride!
Karenina
reply by the author on 30-Aug-2021
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Oh boy. There is gold...there may be drugs (or was at some point)--there is certainly some type of human trafficking... Father Jon is regretting his involvement...he might have thought about the consequences earlier! Still--he is not above redemption--we shall see. Very nice description of the scene in the confessional between Mason and Jon. Mason THINKS he has this tiger by the tail. I think perhaps he'll have his comeuppance! As for Cynthia. I'd have a "taster" try that darn pie! She is devious and sneaky and all things perfect for this mystery! I'm past the point of guessing where you're taking me. I like it here in the passenger seat and thoroughly enjoy the ride!
Karenina
Comment Written 30-Aug-2021
reply by the author on 30-Aug-2021
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It still keeps spinning and I am trying not to let any secrets spill out as you read. I'm thrilled you are in the passenger seat. Thanky you! Thank you! Thank you!
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I have been wickedly tempted to sneak a look at chapters I KNOW are there waiting for me! I'm resisting...I like the journey as much as the destination! --Karenina
Comment from Raffaelina Lowcock
Garth and Hank seem to be at odds regarding Garths investigation of Jack
McKinley. Hank as a friend refuses to suspect Jack of having anything to do with Garth's latest case. Cynthia just happens to appear in the midst of their conversation, with her Lemon Meringue pie. Her excuse for being there. On a more criminal note, we have Mason Caldwell visiting Jon, the priest, whom he has seemingly blackmailed into helping him with his dubious actions. He seems to be involved in many crimes.
Note:"Sorry, guys, but I had company in the kitchen. (Liz) brought..."
I believe you mean 'Cynthia'
Ralf
reply by the author on 11-Aug-2021
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Garth and Hank seem to be at odds regarding Garths investigation of Jack
McKinley. Hank as a friend refuses to suspect Jack of having anything to do with Garth's latest case. Cynthia just happens to appear in the midst of their conversation, with her Lemon Meringue pie. Her excuse for being there. On a more criminal note, we have Mason Caldwell visiting Jon, the priest, whom he has seemingly blackmailed into helping him with his dubious actions. He seems to be involved in many crimes.
Note:"Sorry, guys, but I had company in the kitchen. (Liz) brought..."
I believe you mean 'Cynthia'
Ralf
Comment Written 08-Aug-2021
reply by the author on 11-Aug-2021
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Thanks Ralf
I apologize for my delay in answering but life seems to be getting the best of me lately. I certainly appreciate as you continue to read. Many of the chapters sit at 14 reviews and you seem to be the wonderful person that puts the icing on the cake... You are very special! Smiles, Carol
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Thank you.
Comment from Carol Clark2
Wow! So much is happening here with the priest and Mason. Good touch, having the two meet at the confessional booth. I'm behind in reading, due to traveling, so will try to catch up this week. Blessings. Carol
reply by the author on 05-Aug-2021
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Wow! So much is happening here with the priest and Mason. Good touch, having the two meet at the confessional booth. I'm behind in reading, due to traveling, so will try to catch up this week. Blessings. Carol
Comment Written 04-Aug-2021
reply by the author on 05-Aug-2021
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Traveling? Hope you had a good time....
thanks for trying to read my story and catch up when I know you must have a lot to do.
smiles, Carol
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I had a great time visiting family, thanks, but it was a busy week. I might need a vacation to recover. LOL!
Comment from ShirleyT1
Your story is full of intense and intriguing action and dialogue as your wonderful story continues to build suspense. I'm enjoying every chapter. Your characters are so well developed. Another great one!
reply by the author on 03-Aug-2021
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Your story is full of intense and intriguing action and dialogue as your wonderful story continues to build suspense. I'm enjoying every chapter. Your characters are so well developed. Another great one!
Comment Written 03-Aug-2021
reply by the author on 03-Aug-2021
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Wow...now that's the way to start off my day!
Such praise! Thank you for reading, reviewing and most of all, enjoying my story.
Smiles, Carol
Comment from Mary Kay Bonfante
Fascinating chapter, as we see Garth and Hank discussing illegal drug operations, Cynthia skulking around and possibly eavesdropping and Mason orchestrating even more sinister criminal enterprises.
I didn't find any errors, but had a question about this paragraph:
Liz smiled and set the serving tray on the coffee table. "Sorry, guys, but I had company in the kitchen. Liz brought..." [I'm a little confused by this part of the conversation. Why is Liz referring to herself as "Liz"?]
Does the truckload of illegal immigrants reflect not a human smuggling operation, but a human trafficking operation? Mason's in the middle of that too, and it's about as dirty as one can get. Father Jon knows that his white robes are stained by it, and he is troubled. Is he troubled enough to come clean, before the story's over? Will we see a character transformation?
reply by the author on 03-Aug-2021
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Fascinating chapter, as we see Garth and Hank discussing illegal drug operations, Cynthia skulking around and possibly eavesdropping and Mason orchestrating even more sinister criminal enterprises.
I didn't find any errors, but had a question about this paragraph:
Liz smiled and set the serving tray on the coffee table. "Sorry, guys, but I had company in the kitchen. Liz brought..." [I'm a little confused by this part of the conversation. Why is Liz referring to herself as "Liz"?]
Does the truckload of illegal immigrants reflect not a human smuggling operation, but a human trafficking operation? Mason's in the middle of that too, and it's about as dirty as one can get. Father Jon knows that his white robes are stained by it, and he is troubled. Is he troubled enough to come clean, before the story's over? Will we see a character transformation?
Comment Written 02-Aug-2021
reply by the author on 03-Aug-2021
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Good day, Mary Kay
The women are selected by their beauty...some are kept by Mason to sell and others are sent to auction by others. A very ugly and sad affair. They are used to put the drugs in the false bottom of the barrels first and then moved on.
Smiles, Carol
Comment from Judy Lawless
Another intriguing chapter, Carol. You keeping us on the edge, with no idea where it will all go. Well done.
One little spag: "Liz(Cynthia) brought..."
reply by the author on 02-Aug-2021
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Another intriguing chapter, Carol. You keeping us on the edge, with no idea where it will all go. Well done.
One little spag: "Liz(Cynthia) brought..."
Comment Written 01-Aug-2021
reply by the author on 02-Aug-2021
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Hope your vacation with the girls is going great. Aren't you do back home soon? have a safe trip.
Thanks for the awesome review as always.
Smiles, Carol
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Thanks, Carol. I?m here for another ten days.
Comment from lyenochka
Oh boy. It looks like the cargo includes girls? They're into human trafficking? I hope Hank and Garth can put their heads together and figure out what's going on.
One comment about a name:
"Sorry, guys, but I had company in the kitchen. Liz brought..." (Cynthia brought the pie and Liz is speaking here.)
reply by the author on 02-Aug-2021
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Oh boy. It looks like the cargo includes girls? They're into human trafficking? I hope Hank and Garth can put their heads together and figure out what's going on.
One comment about a name:
"Sorry, guys, but I had company in the kitchen. Liz brought..." (Cynthia brought the pie and Liz is speaking here.)
Comment Written 01-Aug-2021
reply by the author on 02-Aug-2021
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Thanks for the notation of the mistake...it is fixed.
Glad you enjoyed this chapter and continue to follow the story...soon we will get to some of the more touchy feely stuff which I will enjoy writing too....not all drugs and murder. LOl
Smiles, Carol
Comment from Patty Palmer
Another interesting chapter. Mason is really a no-good son of a gun. Jon has gotten himself into a predicament that I believe he is sorry for. I hate to think that Jack had anything to do with the drug trade.
Patty
reply by the author on 02-Aug-2021
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Another interesting chapter. Mason is really a no-good son of a gun. Jon has gotten himself into a predicament that I believe he is sorry for. I hate to think that Jack had anything to do with the drug trade.
Patty
Comment Written 31-Jul-2021
reply by the author on 02-Aug-2021
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Thanks for the notation of the mistake...it is fixed.
Glad you enjoyed this chapter and continue to follow the story...soon we will get to some of the more touchy feely stuff which I will enjoy writing too....not all drugs and murder. LOl
Smiles, Carol