Secrets in the Wind
Viewing comments for Chapter 12 "Secrets in the Wind - Chap 12"A story of loss, deceit, murder and crime
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Comment from karenina
Argh! How very "Carol" of you to leave us with this cliffhanger! There's so many irons in this fire now I think I ought to be wearing an asbestos suit while reading it! Cynthia is the devil's witch, incarnate. Jon is hateful and shallow and desperate... Allie (thank goodness) has back up within the prison to watch her back. I am having a nervous breakdown! --Karenina
reply by the author on 30-Aug-2021
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Argh! How very "Carol" of you to leave us with this cliffhanger! There's so many irons in this fire now I think I ought to be wearing an asbestos suit while reading it! Cynthia is the devil's witch, incarnate. Jon is hateful and shallow and desperate... Allie (thank goodness) has back up within the prison to watch her back. I am having a nervous breakdown! --Karenina
Comment Written 30-Aug-2021
reply by the author on 30-Aug-2021
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i have been inside a state prison once as a visitor and the minute they locked the bars behind me, I thought I would faint. I couldn't wait to get out of there.
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You're braver than me! I was once offered a job as a prison Nurse. Not gonna happen! (I am such a chicken!)--LOL, Karenina
Comment from eliz100
I have been off fanstory for a while but I wanted to get the whole story. This is a great installment. I do not see any room for improvement. I look forward to the next installment.
reply by the author on 07-Aug-2021
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I have been off fanstory for a while but I wanted to get the whole story. This is a great installment. I do not see any room for improvement. I look forward to the next installment.
Comment Written 07-Aug-2021
reply by the author on 07-Aug-2021
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I hope all is okay and you haven't been gone for illness or anything bad. I noticed I hadn't seen you, but I am glad that you are back. I am thrilled that you are interested enough in the story to continue following from where you left off. Don't worry about writing me a book for a review. I just appreciate that you are reading.
Smiles, Carol
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noting bad, just happy family issues
Comment from Mary Kay Bonfante
There's a lot of action in this chapter. Jon, crooked as he is, tries to warn his sister that she's in danger from Mason. I guess Emmy is Hank's wife? And who is Katherine? I hope she's not Jeremy/Garth isn't married to her. Maybe she's another agent.
Some suggestions:
...tossed cold water on Allie's daydream."Rotello, let's go."
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...tossed cold water on Allie's daydream. "Rotello, let's go."
Don't forget Mason's money foots the $1000 a month care center bill."
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Don't forget, Mason's money foots the $1000 monthly care center bill."
We live a good life or so we thought."
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We live a good life, or so we thought."
"God be with you, Cassidy ...
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"God be with you, Cassidy, ...
so he didn't know why but he chose to sit there.
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so he didn't know why, but he chose to sit there.
It was a short walk down memory lane, but a memorable one.
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It was a short walk down memory lane, but an unforgettable one. [so you don't use "memory" twice?]
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Cynthia and Michael are still nosing around. They want the property. And what just rolled out of the fax machine?
reply by the author on 02-Aug-2021
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There's a lot of action in this chapter. Jon, crooked as he is, tries to warn his sister that she's in danger from Mason. I guess Emmy is Hank's wife? And who is Katherine? I hope she's not Jeremy/Garth isn't married to her. Maybe she's another agent.
Some suggestions:
...tossed cold water on Allie's daydream."Rotello, let's go."
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...tossed cold water on Allie's daydream. "Rotello, let's go."
Don't forget Mason's money foots the $1000 a month care center bill."
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Don't forget, Mason's money foots the $1000 monthly care center bill."
We live a good life or so we thought."
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We live a good life, or so we thought."
"God be with you, Cassidy ...
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"God be with you, Cassidy, ...
so he didn't know why but he chose to sit there.
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so he didn't know why, but he chose to sit there.
It was a short walk down memory lane, but a memorable one.
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It was a short walk down memory lane, but an unforgettable one. [so you don't use "memory" twice?]
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Cynthia and Michael are still nosing around. They want the property. And what just rolled out of the fax machine?
Comment Written 30-Jul-2021
reply by the author on 02-Aug-2021
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Jon is well over his head in trouble and has no idea how to get out... I fear so many will suffer because of him if he doesn't figure it out. Sending his sister to jail to save his own skin... Not good.
Thanks again...so sorry I am late.
Smiles, CArol
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You're very welcome, Carol. Yes, Jon is certainly in over his head. I'm about four chapters ahead, and I'm seeing that more and more. He's gone far astray, but I also find him a tragic figure. You have a great imagination! God bless you, my friend.
Love, Mary Kay xoxo
Comment from robyn corum
Carol,
Maybe I'm getting caught up? Whew. TRying to read this through - while giving meds and tending to sick little ones and trying to get anything else done in the house at all. What a day!
Interesting plot and I'm loving that you keep coming back to our same characters. Thanks!
reply by the author on 30-Jul-2021
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Carol,
Maybe I'm getting caught up? Whew. TRying to read this through - while giving meds and tending to sick little ones and trying to get anything else done in the house at all. What a day!
Interesting plot and I'm loving that you keep coming back to our same characters. Thanks!
Comment Written 29-Jul-2021
reply by the author on 30-Jul-2021
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Oh no...You have sick grandchildren. Hope it's not anything too serious. My life is turning and twisting every which way as well. Hang in there. Smiles, Carol
Comment from Judy Lawless
This is another great chapter of intrigue, Carol. You've displayed the emotions of many people and revealed a little more about the relationship between Jon and Mason, much to Cassidy's dismay. Well done. Keep them coming.
reply by the author on 27-Jul-2021
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This is another great chapter of intrigue, Carol. You've displayed the emotions of many people and revealed a little more about the relationship between Jon and Mason, much to Cassidy's dismay. Well done. Keep them coming.
Comment Written 26-Jul-2021
reply by the author on 27-Jul-2021
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Jon is definitely in over his head and I doubt he'll find his way out...hopefully, Cassidy won't suffer because of him... she is a protector though... regardless how it hurts her.
Smiles, Carol
Comment from barbara.wilkey
You've left a couple of questions at the end of this post. What is the delivery about? Why is Cynthia and Micheal there? And what was so interesting about the FAX? I can't wait to find out. Did the delivery have anything to do with the information Jon told Cassidy about?
She stood ten feet away, swaying side to side, praying he legs would support her. (HER legs??)
reply by the author on 27-Jul-2021
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You've left a couple of questions at the end of this post. What is the delivery about? Why is Cynthia and Micheal there? And what was so interesting about the FAX? I can't wait to find out. Did the delivery have anything to do with the information Jon told Cassidy about?
She stood ten feet away, swaying side to side, praying he legs would support her. (HER legs??)
Comment Written 26-Jul-2021
reply by the author on 27-Jul-2021
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Fixed!
And of course, I thank you for the help and for your interest in this chapter. I am so far behind in answering reviews but I hope to get back to writing the next chapter.
Smiles, Carol
Comment from Ric Myworld
Sometimes I struggle to figure out how such a sweet and caring woman can create such devious characters as those in your stories. So, I'm guessing you must have known a few. LOL. Thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 27-Jul-2021
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Sometimes I struggle to figure out how such a sweet and caring woman can create such devious characters as those in your stories. So, I'm guessing you must have known a few. LOL. Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 26-Jul-2021
reply by the author on 27-Jul-2021
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Hello, my sunshine man....
I chuckled the minute I started to read. Yes, I've known a few of those devious characters and they've left lasting impressions on this lady. I thank you for the kind compliments and for the review. smiles and hugs, Carol
Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
OMG, Carol, you do tend to leave me in a state of nervous tension! That Cynthia is up to something, and I hope Liz soon sees through her false friendship. And what is that delivery truck bringing? I'm hoping Hank and Garth will soon discover what Liz is sitting on, all that gold. This is what everyone is after. I was glad to read that there are more undercover agents in the prison watching over Allie, she and Cassidy will need them. Another wonderful chapter, my friend. NEXT!! Lol, Love and hugs! :)) Sandra xxx
reply by the author on 27-Jul-2021
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OMG, Carol, you do tend to leave me in a state of nervous tension! That Cynthia is up to something, and I hope Liz soon sees through her false friendship. And what is that delivery truck bringing? I'm hoping Hank and Garth will soon discover what Liz is sitting on, all that gold. This is what everyone is after. I was glad to read that there are more undercover agents in the prison watching over Allie, she and Cassidy will need them. Another wonderful chapter, my friend. NEXT!! Lol, Love and hugs! :)) Sandra xxx
Comment Written 26-Jul-2021
reply by the author on 27-Jul-2021
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there's so much evil going on in that town...we've barely scratched the surface...LOL Wonder what happens next and to whom... Glad you are wondering too.
Smiles and hugs to my dear friend...Always, Carol
Comment from ShirleyT1
You've written another great chapter filled with action and intrigue. Your characters are so well developed and I enjoy the great exchange of dialogue throughout the story. As always I'm looking forward to your next chapter.
reply by the author on 27-Jul-2021
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You've written another great chapter filled with action and intrigue. Your characters are so well developed and I enjoy the great exchange of dialogue throughout the story. As always I'm looking forward to your next chapter.
Comment Written 26-Jul-2021
reply by the author on 27-Jul-2021
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If I ever get finished answering reviews and messages, I promise another great chapter or two... things are happening. Glad you are enjoying it.
Smiles and hugs, Carol
Comment from Patty Palmer
Oh boy! A cliffhanger! we have to wait until the next chapter or chapters to find out what Luz sees when a picture comes over the wires. Great job!
Super interesting!
Patty
reply by the author on 27-Jul-2021
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Oh boy! A cliffhanger! we have to wait until the next chapter or chapters to find out what Luz sees when a picture comes over the wires. Great job!
Super interesting!
Patty
Comment Written 26-Jul-2021
reply by the author on 27-Jul-2021
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Yes... something certainly set alarms off when she studied the fax, didn't it? Glad you are following and enjoying the story.
Smiles and hugs, Carol