Adam
The timeworn story of man's downfall.49 total reviews
Comment from Patty Palmer
I agree that this story is worth telling over and over.
You did a very good job of doing that. The rhyme is good and the poem reads easily. Good job!!
Patty
reply by the author on 21-Jul-2021
I agree that this story is worth telling over and over.
You did a very good job of doing that. The rhyme is good and the poem reads easily. Good job!!
Patty
Comment Written 21-Jul-2021
reply by the author on 21-Jul-2021
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Thank you Patty, I appreciate your fine comments.
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You're very welcome.Patty
Comment from dragonpoet
Nomi,
This poem shows how sin started and who makes us fall away. It reminds us that we can be forgiven but must not let ourselves be deceived like Eve and be a follower like Adam
Kep writing and stay healthy
Joan
reply by the author on 21-Jul-2021
Nomi,
This poem shows how sin started and who makes us fall away. It reminds us that we can be forgiven but must not let ourselves be deceived like Eve and be a follower like Adam
Kep writing and stay healthy
Joan
Comment Written 21-Jul-2021
reply by the author on 21-Jul-2021
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Thank you Joan, as long as I have the support and encouragement of friends like you, I have no choice but to continue.
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You're welcome. We are here to encourage on another.
Joan
Comment from RGstar
And why not. Almost the qualities of a limerick, in rhythm only, almost song-like.
The image you chose conveyed the imagery well. Nothing elaborate, just nicely bloomed rhymes that told a simple tale, yet its meaning much more than simple.
Well done.
Best wishes.
RGstar
reply by the author on 21-Jul-2021
And why not. Almost the qualities of a limerick, in rhythm only, almost song-like.
The image you chose conveyed the imagery well. Nothing elaborate, just nicely bloomed rhymes that told a simple tale, yet its meaning much more than simple.
Well done.
Best wishes.
RGstar
Comment Written 21-Jul-2021
reply by the author on 21-Jul-2021
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Thank you my dear brother. Your comments and the six stars make for a very bright day indeed.
Comment from elchupakabra
https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=O-MLeh9c4A0&t=215s
A new take on a tale 'as old as time' - in the book of Adam, 'God' is revealed to be the devil in disguise.
Your poem is well constructed and well written. Thanks for sharing. Later daze.
reply by the author on 21-Jul-2021
https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=O-MLeh9c4A0&t=215s
A new take on a tale 'as old as time' - in the book of Adam, 'God' is revealed to be the devil in disguise.
Your poem is well constructed and well written. Thanks for sharing. Later daze.
Comment Written 21-Jul-2021
reply by the author on 21-Jul-2021
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Thank you, I appreciate your input.
Comment from Elizabeth Emerald
I realize this is intended seriously, per your note and the final two stanzas. The first two stanzas work equally well on a whimsical level. Fine work two ways!
reply by the author on 21-Jul-2021
I realize this is intended seriously, per your note and the final two stanzas. The first two stanzas work equally well on a whimsical level. Fine work two ways!
Comment Written 21-Jul-2021
reply by the author on 21-Jul-2021
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Thank you, I am a frim believer in being seriously funny as well as being seriously serious.
Comment from rspoet
Hello Nomi,
This an excellent poem and reminder of the story of Adam and Eve.
Excellent rhyming and meter, the poem reads quite well.
It seems man learned little from his actions,
and repeats the endless mistakes in the hope of a different result.
Knowledge and intelligence are often separate.
Well said.
Best wishes.
Robert
reply by the author on 21-Jul-2021
Hello Nomi,
This an excellent poem and reminder of the story of Adam and Eve.
Excellent rhyming and meter, the poem reads quite well.
It seems man learned little from his actions,
and repeats the endless mistakes in the hope of a different result.
Knowledge and intelligence are often separate.
Well said.
Best wishes.
Robert
Comment Written 21-Jul-2021
reply by the author on 21-Jul-2021
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Thank you. Shame on Adam for shaming all of mankind. We are all less than thanks to this weak guy.
Comment from Seshadri_Sreenivasan
In the biblical version of creation, God, having made Adam and Eve in His own image, set them loose in the Garden of Eden with a simple command. .I liked the poem, the story was told in simple words. Maybe there is a deeper truth in the story of Adam and Eve and in these times we may have to read and understand it differently. Thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 21-Jul-2021
In the biblical version of creation, God, having made Adam and Eve in His own image, set them loose in the Garden of Eden with a simple command. .I liked the poem, the story was told in simple words. Maybe there is a deeper truth in the story of Adam and Eve and in these times we may have to read and understand it differently. Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 21-Jul-2021
reply by the author on 21-Jul-2021
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To me the deeper meaning is that God gave the man Adam, authority over Eve. When he discovered what she had done, instead of joining her, he could have pleaded her case with God and possibly could have saved her. His offspring would have then been undamaged, untainted by sin. Adam failed us all.
Comment from rjuselius
This is a fine piece of poetry dear nomi. It does repeat the message the bible introduces. I do not agree but everyone has the right to his/her opinion.
Thank you for sharing!
Blessings and a larger than life hug!
Rebekka x
reply by the author on 21-Jul-2021
This is a fine piece of poetry dear nomi. It does repeat the message the bible introduces. I do not agree but everyone has the right to his/her opinion.
Thank you for sharing!
Blessings and a larger than life hug!
Rebekka x
Comment Written 21-Jul-2021
reply by the author on 21-Jul-2021
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Thank you so much Rebakka, I am overwhelmed by such a huge hug, but I am enjoying it nonetheless.
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My pleasure entirely dear friend <3
Comment from siais
Satan gloated like he'd won,
He was proud of his deceit.
This demon will be undone,
When he goes down in defeat.
Yes time and again we need to remind ourselves the story, very well said take care and best wishes!
reply by the author on 21-Jul-2021
Satan gloated like he'd won,
He was proud of his deceit.
This demon will be undone,
When he goes down in defeat.
Yes time and again we need to remind ourselves the story, very well said take care and best wishes!
Comment Written 21-Jul-2021
reply by the author on 21-Jul-2021
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Thank you, I appreciate your wonderful review.
Comment from Ben Colder
God, the Father, the creator of all things, including Satan and darkness and what is in the darkness, did this for a purpose.
Remember what He said in the beginning. "Let us make man in our image and likeness." "
Be Holy, for I am Holy saith the Lord." From out of man comes from a man-"Wo-man." Jesus said our worse enemy was ourselves.
My compliments to you for a great poem.
reply by the author on 21-Jul-2021
God, the Father, the creator of all things, including Satan and darkness and what is in the darkness, did this for a purpose.
Remember what He said in the beginning. "Let us make man in our image and likeness." "
Be Holy, for I am Holy saith the Lord." From out of man comes from a man-"Wo-man." Jesus said our worse enemy was ourselves.
My compliments to you for a great poem.
Comment Written 21-Jul-2021
reply by the author on 21-Jul-2021
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Thank you for your great review. We are all damaged because of Adam's weakness.