Gone Too Soon
a contest entry7 total reviews
Comment from Kit Nongkhlaw
I find it difficult to say something about this kind of incident. I was at a loss for words. It is too horrible to think that someone took somebody's life. May God bless her soul. Thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 01-Aug-2021
I find it difficult to say something about this kind of incident. I was at a loss for words. It is too horrible to think that someone took somebody's life. May God bless her soul. Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 31-Jul-2021
reply by the author on 01-Aug-2021
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Kit,
Thanks so much for your review and comments.
Blessings...Portia
Comment from lyenochka
You told your niece's story in this very brief form. She looks like such a lovely young lady with so much to offer the world. How hard for your whole family to lose her so young. Thanks for sharing.
Congratulations on the win!
reply by the author on 26-Jul-2021
You told your niece's story in this very brief form. She looks like such a lovely young lady with so much to offer the world. How hard for your whole family to lose her so young. Thanks for sharing.
Congratulations on the win!
Comment Written 26-Jul-2021
reply by the author on 26-Jul-2021
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Helen,
My niece was a very loving and kind young lady; she is missed.
Thanks so much for your review, comments, and congrats.
Have a great week.
Hugs...Portia
Comment from Patty Palmer
I'm so sorry to hear about your niece. She looks like a very lovely girl with probably the personality to match it. I hope the abuser got what he had coming to him. God bless. Good luck with the contest.
Patty
reply by the author on 20-Jul-2021
I'm so sorry to hear about your niece. She looks like a very lovely girl with probably the personality to match it. I hope the abuser got what he had coming to him. God bless. Good luck with the contest.
Patty
Comment Written 20-Jul-2021
reply by the author on 20-Jul-2021
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Patty,
Courtney was very loving and sweet; thanks so much for your review, kind comments, and best wishes.
Have a wonderful day.
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You're very welcome
Patty
Comment from Rosemary Everson1
I have to give you an excellent rating on the poem. Very tragic, sad situation when there is abuse. We never realize behind closed doors how bad it is sometimes. You have my sympathy.
reply by the author on 19-Jul-2021
I have to give you an excellent rating on the poem. Very tragic, sad situation when there is abuse. We never realize behind closed doors how bad it is sometimes. You have my sympathy.
Comment Written 19-Jul-2021
reply by the author on 19-Jul-2021
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Rosemary,
Thank you for your review, very kind words, sympathy, and six-star rating; they are greatly appreciated.
Blessings...
Comment from Karen Estep
This story follows the prompt very well. I am so sorry for your loss, and especially the circumstances surrounding it. What a beautiful woman she was. Good luck in the contest. This is a great tribute.
reply by the author on 19-Jul-2021
This story follows the prompt very well. I am so sorry for your loss, and especially the circumstances surrounding it. What a beautiful woman she was. Good luck in the contest. This is a great tribute.
Comment Written 19-Jul-2021
reply by the author on 19-Jul-2021
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Karen,
Thanks so much for your review, very kind comments, and best wishes.
Blessings...
Comment from Sally Law
I'm so sorry for your loss, a great one, and so strikingly beautiful. This is a story I hear much too often these days. Sending you my best today as always and best wishes for the approaching septolet,
Sally :)
reply by the author on 19-Jul-2021
I'm so sorry for your loss, a great one, and so strikingly beautiful. This is a story I hear much too often these days. Sending you my best today as always and best wishes for the approaching septolet,
Sally :)
Comment Written 19-Jul-2021
reply by the author on 19-Jul-2021
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Sally;
Thanks so much for your review, kind comments, and best wishes.
Blessings...
Comment from Natalie Finch
I am so sorry for your loss. I think this piece paints a beautifully tragic picture of your niece, but I'm not sure the last line fits with the voice of the rest of your poem, because (and said with the utmost respect) it's more obvious than the rest of your piece.
I think you're going for abrupt, though, so maybe something like "gun shot" would fit better?
Overall beautiful tribute for a beautiful young woman.
reply by the author on 18-Jul-2021
I am so sorry for your loss. I think this piece paints a beautifully tragic picture of your niece, but I'm not sure the last line fits with the voice of the rest of your poem, because (and said with the utmost respect) it's more obvious than the rest of your piece.
I think you're going for abrupt, though, so maybe something like "gun shot" would fit better?
Overall beautiful tribute for a beautiful young woman.
Comment Written 18-Jul-2021
reply by the author on 18-Jul-2021
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Thanks for you review and comments.