Jesus Comes
The nativity told in my words and view15 total reviews
Comment from aryr
Wow, you did a wonderful job with this one. I loved your narrative note, it was simple and direct-'This is my view of the nativity from a historical perspective.' Your words were perfect for this biblical event. This was very well done and very much enjoyed. Blessings.
reply by the author on 18-Jul-2021
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Wow, you did a wonderful job with this one. I loved your narrative note, it was simple and direct-'This is my view of the nativity from a historical perspective.' Your words were perfect for this biblical event. This was very well done and very much enjoyed. Blessings.
Comment Written 18-Jul-2021
reply by the author on 18-Jul-2021
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Bless you, for a wonderful review.
Rikki
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You are most welcome, blessings.
Comment from Carlos' girl
Corrections:
Throughout: Ary ben David, should capitalize Ben
Paragraph 1: Moving star should be morning star
Nice job here retelling the Nativity scene. Good wording, descriptive and storytelling here
reply by the author on 18-Jul-2021
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Corrections:
Throughout: Ary ben David, should capitalize Ben
Paragraph 1: Moving star should be morning star
Nice job here retelling the Nativity scene. Good wording, descriptive and storytelling here
Comment Written 18-Jul-2021
reply by the author on 18-Jul-2021
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I use the lower case ben for the old Hebrew meaning son of. The moving star is the one the Magi would follow.
Thank you for the read and review.
Rikki
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Aha, of course!
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Glad to be of service,
Rikki
Comment from ShirleyT1
What a great view of one of the greatest nights in history. I enjoyed reading it; it's well-written and gives the account of the birth of Christ, but with a more personal view.
reply by the author on 18-Jul-2021
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What a great view of one of the greatest nights in history. I enjoyed reading it; it's well-written and gives the account of the birth of Christ, but with a more personal view.
Comment Written 18-Jul-2021
reply by the author on 18-Jul-2021
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Glad you enjoyed my missive. Thank you for the review.
Rikki
Comment from lyenochka
Thank you for sharing a different view of the Nativity from Scripture. I liked that you gave the innkeeper a name and since he's also a son of David, (ben David) he's a relative of Joseph's!
Comments:
make ourselves to home." (at home) Maybe it's more common where you live to say "to home"?
Formatting:
A lot of space was in the middle of this sentence:
"had less and less
energy"
After that sentence, the spacing between the paragraphs changed and no longer had the blank line between paragraphs as before.
reply by the author on 18-Jul-2021
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Thank you for sharing a different view of the Nativity from Scripture. I liked that you gave the innkeeper a name and since he's also a son of David, (ben David) he's a relative of Joseph's!
Comments:
make ourselves to home." (at home) Maybe it's more common where you live to say "to home"?
Formatting:
A lot of space was in the middle of this sentence:
"had less and less
energy"
After that sentence, the spacing between the paragraphs changed and no longer had the blank line between paragraphs as before.
Comment Written 17-Jul-2021
reply by the author on 18-Jul-2021
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Thank you for the read and review. I still have trouble getting my computer formatting to agree with Fanstory when I paste the post. I have read and heard the to home. it sounds a little strange to the ear but I like to be a little different.
Rikki
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That's totally fine. You keep using what is natural to you. Thanks for sharing, Rikki!!
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When I can get my muse off her butt.
Rikki
Comment from Elizabeth Emerald
Compelling and thought-provoking--vivid imagery--scene skillfully rendered--masterfully narrated. The events as you relate them comport with the Bible story.
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reply by the author on 18-Jul-2021
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Compelling and thought-provoking--vivid imagery--scene skillfully rendered--masterfully narrated. The events as you relate them comport with the Bible story.
This rating does not count towards story rating or author rank.
The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 17-Jul-2021
reply by the author on 18-Jul-2021
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The Bible is telling a redemption story which is good, I always thought there was deleted details. So my little brain ran wild.
Rikki
