Paths flow blind...
A Triple-Heptatstich54 total reviews
Comment from Badger_29
And I am encouraged by this, kind Sir Roy Owen. I find the rhyme scheme and syllable count to be quite pleasing, and I have learned of a new type of poetry today!
I also love how you included appropriate scripture in the author's notes, that brought back a distant memory of being in Twin Cities Rescue Mission in Marysville California, where you had to attend church before you got dinner.
Blessings,
Brother Badger Cull
Darren
reply by the author on 22-Jul-2021
And I am encouraged by this, kind Sir Roy Owen. I find the rhyme scheme and syllable count to be quite pleasing, and I have learned of a new type of poetry today!
I also love how you included appropriate scripture in the author's notes, that brought back a distant memory of being in Twin Cities Rescue Mission in Marysville California, where you had to attend church before you got dinner.
Blessings,
Brother Badger Cull
Darren
Comment Written 21-Jul-2021
reply by the author on 22-Jul-2021
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Thanks so much Darren for these marvellous comments and a great review, blessings Roy
Comment from Gert sherwood
What a beautiful poem You words flow with ease.
Now I cannot recall if I read your amazing words.
Here are two quotes that I read.
We are like clay containers filled with a beautiful treasure. So often it has been the love of Jesus expressed through the life of someone I know that has made a difference in my life.
Roy Lessin
God says "This is what I would love you to be, but I am not going to constrain you. I want it to be your choice." And it is a fantastic thing because even at the moment when I am making the choice to reject God, I would depend from moment to moment, you know that beautiful image of God
Gertcreating by breathing God's breath into this lump of clay, making it a human being.
Desmond Tutu
Gert
reply by the author on 22-Jul-2021
What a beautiful poem You words flow with ease.
Now I cannot recall if I read your amazing words.
Here are two quotes that I read.
We are like clay containers filled with a beautiful treasure. So often it has been the love of Jesus expressed through the life of someone I know that has made a difference in my life.
Roy Lessin
God says "This is what I would love you to be, but I am not going to constrain you. I want it to be your choice." And it is a fantastic thing because even at the moment when I am making the choice to reject God, I would depend from moment to moment, you know that beautiful image of God
Gertcreating by breathing God's breath into this lump of clay, making it a human being.
Desmond Tutu
Gert
Comment Written 20-Jul-2021
reply by the author on 22-Jul-2021
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Thanks for Desmond Tutu?s quote, He?s right, God makes Himself Known, we choose Him or reject Him, I chose Him, because He chose me, thanks for the wonderful review, comments and stares, bless you Roy
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Good day Roy you are welcome
Gert
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Bless you
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Thank you Roy God bless You
Gert
Comment from Raffaelina Lowcock
The mind reminds me sometimes of a song. The refrain of a song sometimes just repeats itself all day long, for no real reason other than one of remembrance. So, goes the mind, dwelling on one subject at a time and probing the mysteries we ruffle through. I see something of the kind in this poem of survival. Acceptance prevails.
Ralf
reply by the author on 22-Jul-2021
The mind reminds me sometimes of a song. The refrain of a song sometimes just repeats itself all day long, for no real reason other than one of remembrance. So, goes the mind, dwelling on one subject at a time and probing the mysteries we ruffle through. I see something of the kind in this poem of survival. Acceptance prevails.
Ralf
Comment Written 20-Jul-2021
reply by the author on 22-Jul-2021
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Thanks so much Ralf, for these marvellous comments and a great review, blessings Roy
Comment from Willie P. Smith
Very thought invoking, Roy. Excellent rhyme and a very easy read. I enjoyed the poem. understandable and well written. Thanks very much for sharing.
reply by the author on 22-Jul-2021
Very thought invoking, Roy. Excellent rhyme and a very easy read. I enjoyed the poem. understandable and well written. Thanks very much for sharing.
Comment Written 20-Jul-2021
reply by the author on 22-Jul-2021
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Thanks so much Willie, for these marvellous comments and a great review, blessings Roy
Comment from Gloria ....
This is your created poetic form, yes? It truly is a nice form, and one I don't believe I have written yet, so most definitely will.
You have developed your theme very well over the first two stanzas and then resolved as reconciled.
Very, very well written and conceived, Roy. :))
Gloria
reply by the author on 22-Jul-2021
This is your created poetic form, yes? It truly is a nice form, and one I don't believe I have written yet, so most definitely will.
You have developed your theme very well over the first two stanzas and then resolved as reconciled.
Very, very well written and conceived, Roy. :))
Gloria
Comment Written 20-Jul-2021
reply by the author on 22-Jul-2021
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Yes I did invent it Gloria, accidentally really. Thanks for the wonderful review and comments, blessings Roy
Comment from equestrik
This reminds me of a John Denver song, 'The Potter's Wheel" I enjoyed this poem as well as your picture. Your poem has lovely cadence as well as your message.
reply by the author on 22-Jul-2021
This reminds me of a John Denver song, 'The Potter's Wheel" I enjoyed this poem as well as your picture. Your poem has lovely cadence as well as your message.
Comment Written 19-Jul-2021
reply by the author on 22-Jul-2021
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Thanks again for these lovely comments and a super review, blessings Roy
Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose
Paths flow blind...
by royowen
Well written Triple-Heptatstich poem...
.I wouldn't know how even start it. Excellent tetrameter and the rhyme is not forced.
I like the imagery and the sea and mind metaphor ... most of us can't understand devine creation.
Well done
reply by the author on 19-Jul-2021
Paths flow blind...
by royowen
Well written Triple-Heptatstich poem...
.I wouldn't know how even start it. Excellent tetrameter and the rhyme is not forced.
I like the imagery and the sea and mind metaphor ... most of us can't understand devine creation.
Well done
Comment Written 19-Jul-2021
reply by the author on 19-Jul-2021
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Thanks so much Gypsy, for these wonderful comments and a lovely review blessings Roy
Comment from MissMerri
Thank you for this stirring poem, full of wisdom and important questions too. I think this is a challenging form and your poem makes it look easy and also beautiful. I loved the sounds of your rhymes and the melodic meter. Very nice, beginning to end.
This is my favorite part:
"This maze, my mind, this shallow sea,
will never know how grows a tree.
But yet I know it matters not
how clay becomes a living pot.
How can we know if faith endures,
and measure ills that trusting cures?
...But many sceptics it still lures."
Thanks for posting this. MM
reply by the author on 19-Jul-2021
Thank you for this stirring poem, full of wisdom and important questions too. I think this is a challenging form and your poem makes it look easy and also beautiful. I loved the sounds of your rhymes and the melodic meter. Very nice, beginning to end.
This is my favorite part:
"This maze, my mind, this shallow sea,
will never know how grows a tree.
But yet I know it matters not
how clay becomes a living pot.
How can we know if faith endures,
and measure ills that trusting cures?
...But many sceptics it still lures."
Thanks for posting this. MM
Comment Written 19-Jul-2021
reply by the author on 19-Jul-2021
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Thanks so much Adonna, for these wonderful comments and a lovely review blessings Roy
Comment from Theodore McDowell
l love the title to this one, Roy. Nice phrasing here:
if I could plunder time's decree.
For many thoughts would flood my mind,
I realised how paths flow blind
Same with this line:
But yet I know it matters not
how clay becomes a living pot.
the line has depth given the biblical echoes.
Well done
reply by the author on 19-Jul-2021
l love the title to this one, Roy. Nice phrasing here:
if I could plunder time's decree.
For many thoughts would flood my mind,
I realised how paths flow blind
Same with this line:
But yet I know it matters not
how clay becomes a living pot.
the line has depth given the biblical echoes.
Well done
Comment Written 19-Jul-2021
reply by the author on 19-Jul-2021
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Thanks so much Theodore, for these wonderful comments and a lovely review blessings Roy
Comment from J. P. Olesen
Excellent stuff Roy. I don't think I could put one of these poems together in a thousand years. I especially like the excerpts from the book of Isaiah.
reply by the author on 19-Jul-2021
Excellent stuff Roy. I don't think I could put one of these poems together in a thousand years. I especially like the excerpts from the book of Isaiah.
Comment Written 19-Jul-2021
reply by the author on 19-Jul-2021
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Thanks so much for these wonderful comments and a lovely review blessings Roy