Check Out
a poem11 total reviews
Comment from lyenochka
Lol. You've described most checkout counters in American grocery stories. I think it's less of a temptation for adults as it is for kids and it all becomes too much for young parents as they try to buy their groceries.
Congratulations on the win!!
reply by the author on 24-Jul-2021
Lol. You've described most checkout counters in American grocery stories. I think it's less of a temptation for adults as it is for kids and it all becomes too much for young parents as they try to buy their groceries.
Congratulations on the win!!
Comment Written 24-Jul-2021
reply by the author on 24-Jul-2021
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Thanks, lyenochka
Comment from Rosemary Everson1
cute poem. I definitely feel like you at a check out counter. I get to the counter and wonder if I really need this or that. I probably like the things that I don't need.
reply by the author on 19-Jul-2021
cute poem. I definitely feel like you at a check out counter. I get to the counter and wonder if I really need this or that. I probably like the things that I don't need.
Comment Written 19-Jul-2021
reply by the author on 19-Jul-2021
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Thanks, Rosemary
Comment from Jannypan (Jan)
Haha, I know what you mean. Those 'things' are there to keep one occupied while the cashier rings up the person in front of you. They are tempting. I hate to be behind a basket that has a screaming kid wanting everything. You did a good job with your contest entry, Mystery Author. I enjoyed reading it. I like the rhymes, the image, the color scheme, and the true message for us all. Best wishes.
Respectfully, Jan
reply by the author on 18-Jul-2021
Haha, I know what you mean. Those 'things' are there to keep one occupied while the cashier rings up the person in front of you. They are tempting. I hate to be behind a basket that has a screaming kid wanting everything. You did a good job with your contest entry, Mystery Author. I enjoyed reading it. I like the rhymes, the image, the color scheme, and the true message for us all. Best wishes.
Respectfully, Jan
Comment Written 18-Jul-2021
reply by the author on 18-Jul-2021
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Thank you, Jan
Comment from mermaids
This is the first poem I have read about the check out counter and your words are so true. Everything is there to tempt us and take our hard earned money. You have a smooth flow of rhyming words and a theme that many can relate to.
reply by the author on 18-Jul-2021
This is the first poem I have read about the check out counter and your words are so true. Everything is there to tempt us and take our hard earned money. You have a smooth flow of rhyming words and a theme that many can relate to.
Comment Written 18-Jul-2021
reply by the author on 18-Jul-2021
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Thank you, mm
Comment from artisart4u
Yes, I think those items are meant to be there for that purpose. While you are waiting in line you look around and say oh, then you get a taste for something your eyes spotted
or this particular article you been dying to read in a newspaper or magazine and you just got to read it. curiosity wins.
It is temptation.
Your couplets are nice and good luck with this poem.
reply by the author on 16-Jul-2021
Yes, I think those items are meant to be there for that purpose. While you are waiting in line you look around and say oh, then you get a taste for something your eyes spotted
or this particular article you been dying to read in a newspaper or magazine and you just got to read it. curiosity wins.
It is temptation.
Your couplets are nice and good luck with this poem.
Comment Written 16-Jul-2021
reply by the author on 16-Jul-2021
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Thank you, art, for the terrific review.
Comment from Sally Law
I know what you mean. When shopping with my grandchildren, they have handfuls of trinkets gathered by the time we check out. There's an entire level of temptation just below our eye view. Great entry we can all relate to.
Sending you my best today as always and best wishes for the upcoming contest,
Sal :))
reply by the author on 16-Jul-2021
I know what you mean. When shopping with my grandchildren, they have handfuls of trinkets gathered by the time we check out. There's an entire level of temptation just below our eye view. Great entry we can all relate to.
Sending you my best today as always and best wishes for the upcoming contest,
Sal :))
Comment Written 16-Jul-2021
reply by the author on 16-Jul-2021
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Thank you, Sal
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
Ha ha ha, this made me smile as the store tries to sell us things we doÅ?t really need by tempting us at the check out stage to add more items to our shopping list! I try not to be tempted, but always succumb to this ruse, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 16-Jul-2021
Ha ha ha, this made me smile as the store tries to sell us things we doÅ?t really need by tempting us at the check out stage to add more items to our shopping list! I try not to be tempted, but always succumb to this ruse, love Dolly x
Comment Written 16-Jul-2021
reply by the author on 16-Jul-2021
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Thanks, Dolly.
Comment from Theodore McDowell
In a sense, the poem is a commentary on our culture with temptations presenting themselves at every turn. We do need blinders and perhaps at times to unplug from technology.
reply by the author on 16-Jul-2021
In a sense, the poem is a commentary on our culture with temptations presenting themselves at every turn. We do need blinders and perhaps at times to unplug from technology.
Comment Written 15-Jul-2021
reply by the author on 16-Jul-2021
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Thanks, Theodore, for giving this a look.
Comment from kahpot
Excellent, yes the super markets are very good at putting temptation right in our line of vision, very well written and presented, best wishes for your contest****kahpot
reply by the author on 15-Jul-2021
Excellent, yes the super markets are very good at putting temptation right in our line of vision, very well written and presented, best wishes for your contest****kahpot
Comment Written 15-Jul-2021
reply by the author on 15-Jul-2021
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Thanks, kahpot
Comment from AliMom
Cute. Humorous. It's even harder to resist when you pass those booby-traps with children. That's why I snack before the shopping trips. Those lures to purchase last-minute things that you neither want nor need are strong. Good luck with the contest.
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reply by the author on 15-Jul-2021
Cute. Humorous. It's even harder to resist when you pass those booby-traps with children. That's why I snack before the shopping trips. Those lures to purchase last-minute things that you neither want nor need are strong. Good luck with the contest.
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Comment Written 15-Jul-2021
reply by the author on 15-Jul-2021
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Thanks, AliMom